Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 3"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
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Comment from Carol Clark2
Great story thus far. You've given us much to process and reflect on in this segment. Now I get to meet the detectives of a previous story. Looking forward to the next chapter. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Great story thus far. You've given us much to process and reflect on in this segment. Now I get to meet the detectives of a previous story. Looking forward to the next chapter. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Good morning, Carol
Yes, Hank and Garth will help us put the pieces together as we work out way through the lives and secrets entwined. Glad you enjoyed it!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sally Law
Great writing here, dear Carol. I'm coming in late, however, I was able to see the plot and put together some of the characters. I've been real sick and reading my own stuff has been difficult. The meds my doctor prescribed continue for another week. Brain fog is a side effect. I'm sure I'll do better in the future.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Great writing here, dear Carol. I'm coming in late, however, I was able to see the plot and put together some of the characters. I've been real sick and reading my own stuff has been difficult. The meds my doctor prescribed continue for another week. Brain fog is a side effect. I'm sure I'll do better in the future.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Dear Sally.... I hope you are feeling better. It's terrible when the meds (which are meant to help) tend to make matters worse.
I thank you for taking the to read this chapter... If you feel better and have the chance... the first two chapters have very important back information and there is still $$$$ on them. Only if you feel like it!
Take care and smiles to you! Carol
Comment from siais
An agonizing moan escaped her lips as she screamed, "Jack, I need you." She leaned back in the oversized leather chair and shook her fists in the air. Through gritted teeth, she cried, "God, are you listening? I can't do this alone."
I am waiting for the miracle, will love to read the next one.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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An agonizing moan escaped her lips as she screamed, "Jack, I need you." She leaned back in the oversized leather chair and shook her fists in the air. Through gritted teeth, she cried, "God, are you listening? I can't do this alone."
I am waiting for the miracle, will love to read the next one.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Good morning... How nice of you to stop by and read the story.... I am a writer who loves to add twists and turns (one right after another) and keep the reader guessing... There will need to be several miracles in this story. Hope you are staying for the ride....
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I see we will have our friend Frank Armato' s help again. YEA!!!!!!!!!!!!! Will Garth be here too? I think I have a crush on him. LOL This story is getting better and better. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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I see we will have our friend Frank Armato' s help again. YEA!!!!!!!!!!!!! Will Garth be here too? I think I have a crush on him. LOL This story is getting better and better. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Yes, Hank Armato is on his way... and I believe Garth has been spotted in town but not by any of us. LOL There is a lot going on... Smiles, Carol
PS... If Garth looks anything like my mind imagines him, I believe butterflies are doing flipflops in my stomach as well. LOL
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LOL In my opinion, he's one handsome man.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That manager had something to do with it, I'm betting my last donut on it!
Now she will have Hank, I'm glad he's back in this story, perhaps the others as well? Now we still don't know what is the connection with Faith Cranston and her daughter, Annie. Are they his? I don't believe so, but who are they? You've already started us on the guessing game, and I know what you're like, it's going to get worse before we know anything!! The ending was so sad. It brought back memories. Great chapter, my friend. Can't wait for the next one. :)) Hugs and love. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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That manager had something to do with it, I'm betting my last donut on it!
Now she will have Hank, I'm glad he's back in this story, perhaps the others as well? Now we still don't know what is the connection with Faith Cranston and her daughter, Annie. Are they his? I don't believe so, but who are they? You've already started us on the guessing game, and I know what you're like, it's going to get worse before we know anything!! The ending was so sad. It brought back memories. Great chapter, my friend. Can't wait for the next one. :)) Hugs and love. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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It's going to be one of those twists and turns and upside down rides I think...LOL Hanks on his way and things are brewing in town that we haven't seen as of yet... I think this one will tug on my emotions a lot too... makes me think when I'd rather not ...You too!
Take care my dear friend... Love ya.... Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Am I going to cry??? I get so emotional, too!!! Love you, too! xxx
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Yes, I know you will cry...and so will I while I am writing it! If I can do the story justice that is....
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You will, I'm sure of it. :)) Every story I've read of yours has been exceptional, just never have enough gold stars to give one to them all. xxx
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I'll take the silver ones twinkling in your eyes when you smile...
Hugs and smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Sounds like Elizabeth is in a scary situation that could get worse before it gets better. Lizzie get your gun, and hope that the bullet meant for you doesn't come from the back or in your sleep. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Sounds like Elizabeth is in a scary situation that could get worse before it gets better. Lizzie get your gun, and hope that the bullet meant for you doesn't come from the back or in your sleep. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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I'm afraid there is going to be lots of bad stuff going on and we won't no which direction it's coming from... Get out those margaritas and the wine and pull up a chair...LOL
Have a great day! Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I'm here and waiting for all the action. Bring it on, Carol. :-)
Comment from royowen
Now it's making sense, she's been in touch with a man called Hank Armani, who was recommended to her, because Jack believed her life to be in danger, because of the estate, poor girl, you know the devastation of your love and your best friend, permanently. Your writing betrays your feelings, that is good, you understand the secret of writing a good story, well done, Carol, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Now it's making sense, she's been in touch with a man called Hank Armani, who was recommended to her, because Jack believed her life to be in danger, because of the estate, poor girl, you know the devastation of your love and your best friend, permanently. Your writing betrays your feelings, that is good, you understand the secret of writing a good story, well done, Carol, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Hank Armato --- he's the private eye from my other story... Yes, my emotions will spill into this one I think if it comes across like I think it will. Smiles and hugs!!! Carol
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Well done
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Very well written and engaging chapter. You left me wanting to continue reading and to follow the outcome of the mystery. You gave us a possible villain in Miguel and have confirmed that her life is in danger through Jack's letter. well done
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Very well written and engaging chapter. You left me wanting to continue reading and to follow the outcome of the mystery. You gave us a possible villain in Miguel and have confirmed that her life is in danger through Jack's letter. well done
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Well, good morning to you and thank you for stopping by... this is chapter 3 and if you think you will continue to follow, you might want to read one and two...Some important information was placed in those chapters for later on.... In my stories, you will see that I tempt the reader with lots of villains, but never quite tell you how it comes together...I love twists and turns and emotional spills.
Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent chapter that starts to bring everything into focus. Now we have a idea that the vineyard itself is the source of the danger and that Jack knew his life was in danger and the Elizabeth is as well. We will soon have Hank involved, and we are left to wonder how the people living on the property fits into this puzzle.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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This is an excellent chapter that starts to bring everything into focus. Now we have a idea that the vineyard itself is the source of the danger and that Jack knew his life was in danger and the Elizabeth is as well. We will soon have Hank involved, and we are left to wonder how the people living on the property fits into this puzzle.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Good morning, Beth...
Thanks for the awesome start to my day... I am flattered that you found the story worthy of your stars. I am always worried about the stories I write, but more so in the beginning, as I wonder if people will find interest and be drawn into it. You made me very happy!
Thank you as always, Carol
Comment from Susan Newell
No sixes left, but this would rate one. Compelling throughout. I love the way you defined Miguel through his eyes and through Elizabeth's gut. Well done, and I'm ready for more.
A couple things:
rows of vines ladened with luscious ==> laden (ladened is "not in current usage" -- I looked it up.)
discovered that lead to his death. ==> led (very common error in print)
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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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No sixes left, but this would rate one. Compelling throughout. I love the way you defined Miguel through his eyes and through Elizabeth's gut. Well done, and I'm ready for more.
A couple things:
rows of vines ladened with luscious ==> laden (ladened is "not in current usage" -- I looked it up.)
discovered that lead to his death. ==> led (very common error in print)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Good morning, my friend....
I saw your name pop up and thought...okay, get ready to work... but I was pleasantly surprised that I actually didn't do too bad...LOL I am thrilled that you feel it is worth the six and I will happily accept the virtual one... The more I think about this story... I believe it will be quite an emotional story instead of just murders... My brain is still spinning.
Thanks again as always, Carol
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I could see some interesting things happening with Elizabeth's "sixth sense" and Alyssa's tenacious "hound-dog-on-a-scent" nature.
