Comment from AliMom

Excellent

I like this poem. It is lyrical and dream-like. Your description of the maid in the sea is clear and magical. "cresento" - crescendo ? nice word use musical. Why is there a question mark after fleck? "in forever"-maybe just forever? Why is there a question mark after "lines"?

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021

I thank you very much Mom for the tips and I did clean her up a bit!
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Comment from Jarvis Popovich

Excellent

Ha! Geez, then you died! Cool. I love the romantic sediment here. She seems beautiful. I hope you find your maiden some day. Nice rhyming and flow. I thought there were a few question marks out of place but that's ok.

Thanks for writing!

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021

We do have a mermaid here by the name of Eileen who writes a lot about the ocean also you might want to check out her work.
When I decided to write about a love affair with a mermaid I tried to visualize what she would look like?
I've seen a few movies and there's also known evidence of what they do believe to be real feminine human looking creatures that live underwater which are quite hideous.
So I thought about the Disney Little Mermaid and tried to visualize that character as my mermaid!
Thanks again for your time and review!
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reply by Jarvis Popovich on 15-Jul-2021

Thanks for the
Tip Ricky. I?ll see if I can find her. Yeah, interesting choice of topic.

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021