The Two of Me
Viewing comments for Chapter 91 "Rolling River Rocks"Chochee Medina Life and Times
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Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good poem about letting life move as it should. It shows the ups and downs of life.
I found a few mistakes. Compound should be compounded. Flow should be flows. In the last line since you use rocks, it should be they.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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This is a good poem about letting life move as it should. It shows the ups and downs of life.
I found a few mistakes. Compound should be compounded. Flow should be flows. In the last line since you use rocks, it should be they.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the Review and Continued Support
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You're very welcome on both accounts.
dp
Comment from AliMom
Excellent. I like your use and development of the extended metaphor: life as a river. I'm thinking compounded as opposed to "compound"; the weight of as opposed to "the weight"; flows as opposed to "flow". Lovely imagery though. Good to see writing as your rescue. Continue to write lovely verses.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Excellent. I like your use and development of the extended metaphor: life as a river. I'm thinking compounded as opposed to "compound"; the weight of as opposed to "the weight"; flows as opposed to "flow". Lovely imagery though. Good to see writing as your rescue. Continue to write lovely verses.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the Review and assistance in correction of this poem offering wording.