a single coin
a 100 word flash fiction5 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This story was a good puzzle for the reader. Since George was in the setting of the Casino it could be assumed his finding a single quarter would mean he won a jackpot. Surprise to us, the setting was just a coincidence. This was great.
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This story was a good puzzle for the reader. Since George was in the setting of the Casino it could be assumed his finding a single quarter would mean he won a jackpot. Surprise to us, the setting was just a coincidence. This was great.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
Comment from John Garvey
What I love about this is that I kind of expected that coin to win him a jackpot. If you think about it, this guy is possibly a gambling addict, or at least he's not making all the best decisions, so I would have been happy for him until and unless I really reflected on it. (If you have a problematic relationship with gambling and you win a bunch of money on your last roll, you're just gonna turn around and lose it all I suppose, the victim of a deepening addiction.)
Your ending was vastly better. The guy's still a loser at the end of the story, but he's alive. Clever and thought-provoking.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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What I love about this is that I kind of expected that coin to win him a jackpot. If you think about it, this guy is possibly a gambling addict, or at least he's not making all the best decisions, so I would have been happy for him until and unless I really reflected on it. (If you have a problematic relationship with gambling and you win a bunch of money on your last roll, you're just gonna turn around and lose it all I suppose, the victim of a deepening addiction.)
Your ending was vastly better. The guy's still a loser at the end of the story, but he's alive. Clever and thought-provoking.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the insightful review. Maybe the near miss will straighten him out, haha.
Have a nice weekend, j
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You're welcome!
Comment from Bonnie Seach
Extraordinary! Time and coincidence befall all! Well crafted and presented with a lesson for all.
Thank you for sharing
Best wishes for the contest
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Extraordinary! Time and coincidence befall all! Well crafted and presented with a lesson for all.
Thank you for sharing
Best wishes for the contest
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the encouraging review, have a nice weekend, j
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Comment from DonandVicki
Luck comes in all forms. I like to think that beyond luck, God was trying to show George, in a very alarming way, just how fortunate he was. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Luck comes in all forms. I like to think that beyond luck, God was trying to show George, in a very alarming way, just how fortunate he was. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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You never know haha, thanks for the review, cheers, j
Comment from equestrik
This is a well done presentation for the '100 Word Dash' writing prompt. I was expecting a different ending but I really loved the one you wrote. This is a good and clever write.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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This is a well done presentation for the '100 Word Dash' writing prompt. I was expecting a different ending but I really loved the one you wrote. This is a good and clever write.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the thoughtful review, have a great week end, j
