Sold Out
a 100-word story16 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, that was a surprise ending! I'm glad Amos could retire from his selling door to door and finally can spend time with his Mrs.! Well, now I see what you're doing when I don't get a notification about your posts. You're winning anonymous contests! Congrats, again!!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Oh, that was a surprise ending! I'm glad Amos could retire from his selling door to door and finally can spend time with his Mrs.! Well, now I see what you're doing when I don't get a notification about your posts. You're winning anonymous contests! Congrats, again!!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thanks for checking up on me, Helen.
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's hard to tell a good story in 100 words, but as I would expect, you've done another outstanding job. Your writing always puts me to thinking, as I'm sure it does many others. Thanks for sharing. And, congratulations on your contest winner!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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It's hard to tell a good story in 100 words, but as I would expect, you've done another outstanding job. Your writing always puts me to thinking, as I'm sure it does many others. Thanks for sharing. And, congratulations on your contest winner!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Ric.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Bill,
Very well structured and a deserved winner. You have packed a lot of 'sentiment' into the piece, with the lightest of touches. The choice of "wizened", "unkempt", "untrimmed" and "creaky" is a deft creation of place, and the pay off is gentle, caring - as I say, a creative piece, a warm feeling of hard work, and mature affection.
It is a good example of where a short piece can go, in the right hands.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
Stay safe
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Hello Bill,
Very well structured and a deserved winner. You have packed a lot of 'sentiment' into the piece, with the lightest of touches. The choice of "wizened", "unkempt", "untrimmed" and "creaky" is a deft creation of place, and the pay off is gentle, caring - as I say, a creative piece, a warm feeling of hard work, and mature affection.
It is a good example of where a short piece can go, in the right hands.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
Stay safe
cheers
phill
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Phil, for your terrific review. Bill
Comment from pome lover
that's clever.
I loved Amos Nandy. I remember (shouldn't admit this) Amos and Andy a hundred years ago. Very cute 100 word dash entry with a little private joke in there and a cute twist at the end. Good luck.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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that's clever.
I loved Amos Nandy. I remember (shouldn't admit this) Amos and Andy a hundred years ago. Very cute 100 word dash entry with a little private joke in there and a cute twist at the end. Good luck.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thanks, Katharine.
Comment from Bonnie Seach
Home at last. Home is where the heart is
It reminds me of the prodigal son
The story is well crafted and presented
Thank you for sharing
Best wishes for the contest
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Home at last. Home is where the heart is
It reminds me of the prodigal son
The story is well crafted and presented
Thank you for sharing
Best wishes for the contest
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Bonnie
Comment from Patty Palmer
The story is short and sweet. I take from it that the old man was a traveling salesman and the old lady is his wife. This is his way of telling her he is retiring and happy to whittle away the hours with her. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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The story is short and sweet. I take from it that the old man was a traveling salesman and the old lady is his wife. This is his way of telling her he is retiring and happy to whittle away the hours with her. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Patty
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I like the image and the story.
-You have a descriptive setting
and two well-drawn characters
with only a few words.
-A good hook at the beginning,
followed by the conversation
between the woman and Amos.
-I didn't read closely enough to
catch the Mrs. Nandy reference,
but I figured the relationship
from the ending line.
-A very good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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-I like the image and the story.
-You have a descriptive setting
and two well-drawn characters
with only a few words.
-A good hook at the beginning,
followed by the conversation
between the woman and Amos.
-I didn't read closely enough to
catch the Mrs. Nandy reference,
but I figured the relationship
from the ending line.
-A very good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Pam
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You are welcome.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aw, that was nice. But going by the peeling paintwork, and unkempt yard, he won't be sitting there for long!! Lol. Wonderful story in 100 words, well done! Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra x
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Aw, that was nice. But going by the peeling paintwork, and unkempt yard, he won't be sitting there for long!! Lol. Wonderful story in 100 words, well done! Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra x
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Sandra
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a fun contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. You saved the best for last. I loved the twist at the end. Your words are descriptive, and I could see everything you mentioned.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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What a fun contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. You saved the best for last. I loved the twist at the end. Your words are descriptive, and I could see everything you mentioned.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Jan
Comment from Begin Again
Oh the humor is so subtle and obviously funny.... Amos and Andy. Now you must have had your tickle bone recharged to come up with this one. Loved it! Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Oh the humor is so subtle and obviously funny.... Amos and Andy. Now you must have had your tickle bone recharged to come up with this one. Loved it! Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you, BA.