Running Blind
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Running Blind ~ Chapter Nine "The Blind Girl's toughest cold case.
29 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
This is an excellent connecting chapter setting up the process for taking action in (hopefully) capturing the hitchhiker soon. I like that your storyline is based on priceless paintings. Artwork is very important to me although I really am just a dabbler. Hugs, Janet
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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This is an excellent connecting chapter setting up the process for taking action in (hopefully) capturing the hitchhiker soon. I like that your storyline is based on priceless paintings. Artwork is very important to me although I really am just a dabbler. Hugs, Janet
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous compliments, dear Janet. This means the world to me! Love and blessings always,
Sal XOs
Comment from LovnPeace
I really enjoyed reading this chapter Sally. It seemed to slow down in it's pace. Good for me. My eyes were affected y the covid 19 virus so reading is more of a chore now. Blessings, Barbara
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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I really enjoyed reading this chapter Sally. It seemed to slow down in it's pace. Good for me. My eyes were affected y the covid 19 virus so reading is more of a chore now. Blessings, Barbara
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and encouraging news. Blessings always,
Sal XOs
Comment from Cindy Warren
The trucker was lucky, considering who he had riding with him. Bet he doesn't pick up hitchhikers for a while! And they're onto Tony, but I'm betting he doesn't go down without a fight. I can't wait for the coming action.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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The trucker was lucky, considering who he had riding with him. Bet he doesn't pick up hitchhikers for a while! And they're onto Tony, but I'm betting he doesn't go down without a fight. I can't wait for the coming action.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and insightful comments. It is greatly appreciated.
Blessings,
Sal XOs
Comment from Gloria ....
And another fine chapter with great pacing, and just the right amount of fine imagery, and light-hearted banter.
Some great insight here too, Sally, and I love the way you build just the amount of tension.
Looking forward to the next chapter too. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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And another fine chapter with great pacing, and just the right amount of fine imagery, and light-hearted banter.
Some great insight here too, Sally, and I love the way you build just the amount of tension.
Looking forward to the next chapter too. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and star blast, dear Gloria. I'm so blessed and honored by this. I'm so glad you'll be staying tuned. Sending you my best, with love and blessings always,
Sal XOs
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Sally,
I enjoyed the chapter, but a couple of things made me wonder.
"I will pay for your parking fine, sir, for a bit of information. We have reason to believe your hitchhiker may know something about a double homicide in Frontier County where the remains of two men were pulled from the Vermilion River. Did you happen to pick up your hitchhiker in that area?"
How did Sally know that the trucker had a hitchhiker? Did I miss something? Perhaps Big D doesn't drive his rig alone. Maybe he has another driver with him, and they take shifts delivering their load.
Sally also sent Suzy as a decoy...
"Suzy... do exactly as I say. Move towards Jean-Baptiste, and take his arm." ... was that a wise thing for her to do? What if Tony had shot her?
But really, I better go back and re-read the previous two chapters. Did Sally know that Tony had hitched a ride with a transport? I'm a bit mixed up.
And third, it surprised me that Big D (Dwayne Cooper) would throw up such a fine meal (I love a good clam chowder!). But maybe it scared him badly that he had picked up a hitchhiker who was a killer.
And then there's Tony the Tiger, calling the Curator of The Fountain Gallery in New Orleans, Analiese Irving. Is she crooked, too?
I've got to get this all straightened out in my pointed head before I read your next chapter, Sally.
But excellent writing!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Hi Sally,
I enjoyed the chapter, but a couple of things made me wonder.
"I will pay for your parking fine, sir, for a bit of information. We have reason to believe your hitchhiker may know something about a double homicide in Frontier County where the remains of two men were pulled from the Vermilion River. Did you happen to pick up your hitchhiker in that area?"
How did Sally know that the trucker had a hitchhiker? Did I miss something? Perhaps Big D doesn't drive his rig alone. Maybe he has another driver with him, and they take shifts delivering their load.
Sally also sent Suzy as a decoy...
"Suzy... do exactly as I say. Move towards Jean-Baptiste, and take his arm." ... was that a wise thing for her to do? What if Tony had shot her?
But really, I better go back and re-read the previous two chapters. Did Sally know that Tony had hitched a ride with a transport? I'm a bit mixed up.
And third, it surprised me that Big D (Dwayne Cooper) would throw up such a fine meal (I love a good clam chowder!). But maybe it scared him badly that he had picked up a hitchhiker who was a killer.
And then there's Tony the Tiger, calling the Curator of The Fountain Gallery in New Orleans, Analiese Irving. Is she crooked, too?
I've got to get this all straightened out in my pointed head before I read your next chapter, Sally.
But excellent writing!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and generous stars, dear Kim. Some things will reveal themselves in the upcoming chapters. I always leave little crumbs to keep my readers coming back. I appreciate you so much. The next chapter is pivotal. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
Comment from estory
I think you did a great job juggling the suspense here, this unwinds slowly through dialogue and yet you keep enough close to the vest to keep the readers guessing about who dunnit. Super job with the dialogue and I think you have some well dilineated characters here. estory
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I think you did a great job juggling the suspense here, this unwinds slowly through dialogue and yet you keep enough close to the vest to keep the readers guessing about who dunnit. Super job with the dialogue and I think you have some well dilineated characters here. estory
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous rating. Both are so appreciated. Blessings always,
Sal XOs
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Excitement is brewing again for your friend and you. The art collection is wanted by several people. Hopefully it will stay safe and out of the arms of the bad man.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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Excitement is brewing again for your friend and you. The art collection is wanted by several people. Hopefully it will stay safe and out of the arms of the bad man.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous comments. So glad you like. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs?
Comment from ShirleyT1
Another well-written chapter that continues to hold my interest and make me want more! I love the part about the mom tattoo. Your story flows well, and great dialogue with intriguing characters.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Another well-written chapter that continues to hold my interest and make me want more! I love the part about the mom tattoo. Your story flows well, and great dialogue with intriguing characters.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and generous comments, dear Shirley. Blessings always,
Sal XOs
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The plot thickens, the reader is on the edge of their seat. What does Sally know? Will we be left this way til the next episode? ""Suzy... do exactly as I say. Move towards Jean-Baptiste, and take his arm."
"No way! I won't leave you here...!"
"Suzy, you must trust me. Now, go!"
I like how you frequently insert the comedy relief in the midst of tension.
"Do you know where he is? We'd like to bring him in for questioning."
"He's vanished. Oh, man... I'm such an idiot!"
The trucker's undigested buffet was next, and hit the ground, a little bit too close to my boots.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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The plot thickens, the reader is on the edge of their seat. What does Sally know? Will we be left this way til the next episode? ""Suzy... do exactly as I say. Move towards Jean-Baptiste, and take his arm."
"No way! I won't leave you here...!"
"Suzy, you must trust me. Now, go!"
I like how you frequently insert the comedy relief in the midst of tension.
"Do you know where he is? We'd like to bring him in for questioning."
"He's vanished. Oh, man... I'm such an idiot!"
The trucker's undigested buffet was next, and hit the ground, a little bit too close to my boots.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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I?m glad you enjoy my wicked sense of humor. Some don?t get me. In these tense stories, you simply must have relief. I?m so glad you?re enjoying my new book. Sending you my best and many thanks for the wonderful review. Blessings always,
Sal XOs
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Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Fantastic, as usual! Oh, I'm so glad Big D is alright; hanging around with Tony the Tiger, I thought he was done for. And I'm especially glad Detective Sally and her friend Suzy mobilized the other law enforcement personnel and escaped whatever fate Tony had in mind for them; but unfortunately that Tony's a slippery character, and they still have to watch their backs now..
Spags and such:
"And have Wi-Fi," Suzy added. [new speaker, new paragraph -- I should have flagged it in Chapter 8]
and asked, "what the heck do you need that for?"
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and asked, "What the heck do you need that for?"
Lonnie Hastings-
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Lonnie Hastings:
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Pleather! You are too funny, Sal. I remember when that term first aired on a TV commercial.
And an aikido stick? You go, girl!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Fantastic, as usual! Oh, I'm so glad Big D is alright; hanging around with Tony the Tiger, I thought he was done for. And I'm especially glad Detective Sally and her friend Suzy mobilized the other law enforcement personnel and escaped whatever fate Tony had in mind for them; but unfortunately that Tony's a slippery character, and they still have to watch their backs now..
Spags and such:
"And have Wi-Fi," Suzy added. [new speaker, new paragraph -- I should have flagged it in Chapter 8]
and asked, "what the heck do you need that for?"
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and asked, "What the heck do you need that for?"
Lonnie Hastings-
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Lonnie Hastings:
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Pleather! You are too funny, Sal. I remember when that term first aired on a TV commercial.
And an aikido stick? You go, girl!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and generous star shine! As always, your keen eye is greatly appreciated. My first car had pleather seats. Man, did it burn my legs in this Florida heat! Then we moved to New York where it felt like ice in the winter. Not the best invention but a 60s flashback in living room decor. Sending you my best today and love and blessings always,
Sal XOs
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You're very welcome, my dear friend. Haha, 60s flashback. I hope you and all the family are doing well.
Love and prayers, Mary Kay xoxo
