Caught A Glimpse
Shadows on my wall9 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Having to use specific words is a challenge in an of itself. This narrative poem is excellent. I'm sure there will actually be readers who can identify with it. It is not so far fetched. Well written.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Having to use specific words is a challenge in an of itself. This narrative poem is excellent. I'm sure there will actually be readers who can identify with it. It is not so far fetched. Well written.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this terrific review and your thoughtful comments. :)
Comment from pookietoo
You have a great imagination. Very enjoyable. Keep up the great work. I wish you a lot of luck in this contest. Thank you again. :-) :-) Good luck again.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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You have a great imagination. Very enjoyable. Keep up the great work. I wish you a lot of luck in this contest. Thank you again. :-) :-) Good luck again.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this great review. :)
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You're welcome.
Comment from MAMONIA
Great idea for the prompt.
Please note: Second to last para...'dark shadows can never do ME harm.
Other than that: Congrats on your win.
It certainly is a fun piece and I got a chuckle out of it.
Best of luck always,
Marie
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Great idea for the prompt.
Please note: Second to last para...'dark shadows can never do ME harm.
Other than that: Congrats on your win.
It certainly is a fun piece and I got a chuckle out of it.
Best of luck always,
Marie
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this nice review and the correction....both are very appreciated. :)
Comment from Chris Davies
Good luck collecting on the rent! I wasn't expecting that ending. I enjoyed your poem and loved the creepy picture it captured the mood so well. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Good luck collecting on the rent! I wasn't expecting that ending. I enjoyed your poem and loved the creepy picture it captured the mood so well. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this very nice review, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from WriterHeather
Love it! Wonderful job incorporating the required words into this witty, creative, funny, and relatable entry. I'm sure everyone has suspected their house to be haunted at one point or another
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Love it! Wonderful job incorporating the required words into this witty, creative, funny, and relatable entry. I'm sure everyone has suspected their house to be haunted at one point or another
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this terrific review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from kahpot
I have often wondered what it would be-if ghosts did exist and try to make us aware, love the ending-yes paying rent would be nice, an excellent read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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I have often wondered what it would be-if ghosts did exist and try to make us aware, love the ending-yes paying rent would be nice, an excellent read, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this nice review. :)
Comment from Pantygynt
The words required are all there in what is trying to be a regular poem in iambic tetrameter rhyming abcb. The metre is a little shaky in places where the metrical stress does not match the natural stress although the syllable count is correct.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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The words required are all there in what is trying to be a regular poem in iambic tetrameter rhyming abcb. The metre is a little shaky in places where the metrical stress does not match the natural stress although the syllable count is correct.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem. I don't really think about metre and syllable counts when I write, although I know many do. :)
Comment from Cat Merto
Nicely worded poem
Using the words giving
About shadows/ ghosts
Haunting your house
Remember say a prayer
They will be out of your hair,
The only fear is fear itself
No all ghost are here to harm,most are here to protect you.
Photo and color theme perfect harmony for your poem
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Nicely worded poem
Using the words giving
About shadows/ ghosts
Haunting your house
Remember say a prayer
They will be out of your hair,
The only fear is fear itself
No all ghost are here to harm,most are here to protect you.
Photo and color theme perfect harmony for your poem
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thanks for this great review. Not sure a prayer will make them leave though.:)
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Your welcome
Comment from Justin Yhoung
I had never associated shadows with night lights myself, until drawn to their attention, and I wonder what the speaker's infatuation with them is, whether they pay attention to them in the daytime as well, and thus was hooked by the author's opening.'
The rhyming structure changes in verse two, making the reader to quickly adjust to catch the rhythm of the piece. Its almost as if the content is more important than the form, yet has a form, to make it a poem.
An change from finding joy in dark things to a state of wondering if similar circumstances could be real and lying in wait makes one reconsider their decisions. The speaker poses the question of what is and isnt real to the reader, challenging them to decide whether the subject is paranoid or have legit cause for concern, and maybe a foolish decision by the reader will be akin to watching foolish movies in the first place.
Does the dog howl because of the shadows and the cat tuck away for same said reason? Clearly the author's observation of their pets puts them in tune with what animals can perceive that humans cannot. A wise soul.
A new take on an old saying alert with freshness and humorous smile at witty original thinking. Still, the tone is one of caution before ending with laughter yet a good idea in a way too become rich. Ver clever, bravo!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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I had never associated shadows with night lights myself, until drawn to their attention, and I wonder what the speaker's infatuation with them is, whether they pay attention to them in the daytime as well, and thus was hooked by the author's opening.'
The rhyming structure changes in verse two, making the reader to quickly adjust to catch the rhythm of the piece. Its almost as if the content is more important than the form, yet has a form, to make it a poem.
An change from finding joy in dark things to a state of wondering if similar circumstances could be real and lying in wait makes one reconsider their decisions. The speaker poses the question of what is and isnt real to the reader, challenging them to decide whether the subject is paranoid or have legit cause for concern, and maybe a foolish decision by the reader will be akin to watching foolish movies in the first place.
Does the dog howl because of the shadows and the cat tuck away for same said reason? Clearly the author's observation of their pets puts them in tune with what animals can perceive that humans cannot. A wise soul.
A new take on an old saying alert with freshness and humorous smile at witty original thinking. Still, the tone is one of caution before ending with laughter yet a good idea in a way too become rich. Ver clever, bravo!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this great review and for your insightful comments. :)
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Yw & ty 4 ur work :)
