Lone Egret
5/7/5 Ekphrastic Autumn Haiku for Haiku Club Event16 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Hi Gypsy, I would like to join the Haiku Club. I will learn a lot from you, I'm sure. I am quite deeply into haiku these days. But must warn you, I am rather a lazy writer! Anyway, what I love about this one: the art work is exquisite, and so appropriate for haiku, especially being black and white and minimal. The haiku is excellent, I think. For first line imagery; second line, 'vacuous' I wonder about because not used in common language(haiku is noted for its simplicity isn't it?) and the 3rd is just right. A 6, I believe! Gidddy :-)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Hi Gypsy, I would like to join the Haiku Club. I will learn a lot from you, I'm sure. I am quite deeply into haiku these days. But must warn you, I am rather a lazy writer! Anyway, what I love about this one: the art work is exquisite, and so appropriate for haiku, especially being black and white and minimal. The haiku is excellent, I think. For first line imagery; second line, 'vacuous' I wonder about because not used in common language(haiku is noted for its simplicity isn't it?) and the 3rd is just right. A 6, I believe! Gidddy :-)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Hello, giddy, you are right, haiku speaks the simple way of the masses and I try to do that but sometimes some words pack a lot of meaning.
I hope you do join our club, you have much to teach and share. Members of the club participate as much as they want, or as little as they want.
Thank you very much for your exceptional review and six stars!!!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Sharon Davis
This 5-7-5 haiku piece creates a vivid, sensory rich experience for the reader.
The image chosen to accompany the poem enhances the imagery found within the poem.
Great job, great presentation.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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This 5-7-5 haiku piece creates a vivid, sensory rich experience for the reader.
The image chosen to accompany the poem enhances the imagery found within the poem.
Great job, great presentation.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Mary Vigasin
The beauty in the picture and the beauty of your words are one of lasting sadness and loneliness. The loneliness is so deep that a reader momentarily feels the emotion.
Thank you for this wonderful work.
REgards,
Mary
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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The beauty in the picture and the beauty of your words are one of lasting sadness and loneliness. The loneliness is so deep that a reader momentarily feels the emotion.
Thank you for this wonderful work.
REgards,
Mary
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Lone Egret", is short, succinct and more than a little sad. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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"Lone Egret", is short, succinct and more than a little sad. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much, duchess.
Gypsy hugs
Gypsy,
You're very welcome.
Bless you and hugs,
the Duchess
Comment from kahpot
This whole presentation just shouts loneliness, as we see the lone egret watch his wedge fly into the darkness, "vacuous" what a great word, an excellent haiku, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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This whole presentation just shouts loneliness, as we see the lone egret watch his wedge fly into the darkness, "vacuous" what a great word, an excellent haiku, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 12-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much, Kym. It's always good to hear from you.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Senyai
Hi Gypsy,
Most exquisite haiku you have penned! I simply fell in love with the whole of your poem and presentation! Ekphrastic is a new term for me, but am learning to appreciate its use. Your words of the lonely egret on a tree cast in darkness with a huge full moon convey such loneliness -
"vacuous long night" is beyond expressive, like it wrapped up around him and absorbed all meaning. He lost his wedge, his other egrets and waits for their returning with the coming dawn.
Gypsy, you've expressed such deep deep loneliness here, that it says this kind of loneliness is more than waiting for one night. It is felt by a final separation over time .... but hopeful waiting is conveyed.
Beautifully written!
Senyai
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Hi Gypsy,
Most exquisite haiku you have penned! I simply fell in love with the whole of your poem and presentation! Ekphrastic is a new term for me, but am learning to appreciate its use. Your words of the lonely egret on a tree cast in darkness with a huge full moon convey such loneliness -
"vacuous long night" is beyond expressive, like it wrapped up around him and absorbed all meaning. He lost his wedge, his other egrets and waits for their returning with the coming dawn.
Gypsy, you've expressed such deep deep loneliness here, that it says this kind of loneliness is more than waiting for one night. It is felt by a final separation over time .... but hopeful waiting is conveyed.
Beautifully written!
Senyai
Comment Written 12-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much, Senyai. I appreciate your exceptional review and six stars. Your kind words are precious to me.
Gypsy hugs
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You are so welcome! Well deserved on this beautiful poem. I felt the egret?s loneliness so deeply.
Comment from royowen
One wonders if the animal kingdom just get on with life, ignoring the the process, or indeed they feel the need, I know I do, beautifully written Gypsy, congratulations on your club, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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One wonders if the animal kingdom just get on with life, ignoring the the process, or indeed they feel the need, I know I do, beautifully written Gypsy, congratulations on your club, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem, Roy :)
gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from zanya
So few words yet such a powerful sentiment expressed here as the sole egret experiences a deep sense of loneliness having lost his 'wedge'( an interesting word that I was not familiar with & such an exquisite pic to illustrate
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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So few words yet such a powerful sentiment expressed here as the sole egret experiences a deep sense of loneliness having lost his 'wedge'( an interesting word that I was not familiar with & such an exquisite pic to illustrate
Comment Written 12-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much for your kind words and six stars!! I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
I really like how the first two lines of your Ekphrastic poem are set up and how they are effectively connected (thanks too for the wedge definition). I have a problem with my vision, not your thinking, of the sound of loneliness. I have no alternative, but sense your thought process in describing the same. It is the age old problem about a tree falling in a distant forest - can you hear the same as it crashes to the ground? If that sound actually reaches you, it is the vibration (sound waves) on the ear that creates the sound.
Mark
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Gypsy,
I really like how the first two lines of your Ekphrastic poem are set up and how they are effectively connected (thanks too for the wedge definition). I have a problem with my vision, not your thinking, of the sound of loneliness. I have no alternative, but sense your thought process in describing the same. It is the age old problem about a tree falling in a distant forest - can you hear the same as it crashes to the ground? If that sound actually reaches you, it is the vibration (sound waves) on the ear that creates the sound.
Mark
Comment Written 12-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Gloria ....
I love the gunmetal gray tones of your presentation that is carried forward into the forefront with a fine haiku.
A vacuous long night illustrates how long a night can seem with the sound of loneliness.
Excellent atmosphere, and a fine read today, Gypsy. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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I love the gunmetal gray tones of your presentation that is carried forward into the forefront with a fine haiku.
A vacuous long night illustrates how long a night can seem with the sound of loneliness.
Excellent atmosphere, and a fine read today, Gypsy. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs