First day of school
Sally is scared to go to the kindergarten2 total reviews
Comment from equestrik
This was cute. Sally is a clever and well adjusted young lady to be brave enough to dress that way and her parents would be quite free thinking to allow it!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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This was cute. Sally is a clever and well adjusted young lady to be brave enough to dress that way and her parents would be quite free thinking to allow it!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much for your comments.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was humorous and funny and it stood out. A rebel-girl's act of rejecting school and her chosen rebellion. Good imagery and visuals.
Two nits:
1. "What you have friends?" What did you mean?
2. "She wear purple t-shirt that was inside out..." You probably meant "she WORE purple t-shirt...." etc.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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This was humorous and funny and it stood out. A rebel-girl's act of rejecting school and her chosen rebellion. Good imagery and visuals.
Two nits:
1. "What you have friends?" What did you mean?
2. "She wear purple t-shirt that was inside out..." You probably meant "she WORE purple t-shirt...." etc.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you for reviewing my story. I corrected my errors.
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Great edits! You need a space between the third and forth sentences.
