Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

That is a lovely free verse poem. It shows nostalgia for the past and all that was, yet appreciating the present beauty of the golden daffodils.The repetition gives added emphasis and thoughts of regret for what once was. Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021

Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. I really appreciate it.

Comment from Cybertron1986

Excellent

I like how this piece implies the return to nature and the involving time. It brings about a sense of humbleness to the powers that dominate and have relevance to our existence. This piece has me reflecting and that is what good writing does. Well done.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021

Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and give me your thoughts. I appreciate it.

Jill

Comment from Senyai

Excellent

Hi Jill,

What a lovely free verse of the timely changes through the years. Our town in Texas was small when we moved here years ago, with farms surrounding all sides.

Now years later, it doesn't even resemble the town back then. There are no farms or ranches for miles around. Our town mushroomed to merge with the two large cities near by.

Sad how times of the past, fall away to make way for the new ( but sadly not improved)

I related to your artfully crafted poem as it spoke to bygone times I remember fondly :-). Best to you in the contest!

Take care,
Senyai

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021

Senyai,

It's interesting how things change so quickly, sometimes for the good, sometimes not. There's just always change.

Thank you so much for reading my poem and sharing your thoughts with me. I appreciate it.

Jill

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Welcome to FanStory, Jill. I absolutely loved your poem. A masterfully written free verse with a story within. How life has changed for the worse in so many ways. I love the beautiful daffodils!
Sending you my best today as always, and my best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))

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 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021

Thank you Sally. I appreciate your thoughts on my poem. I'll keep my fingers crossed for the contest!

Comment from royowen

Excellent

It seems to be very much a prose-like commentary than a free verse. Although freestyle is a little prose like, it is still full of poetic device, such as metaphor similes occasional rhyme, and some flow, but nevertheless prose is still a legitimate art form, well done, a interesting work, good luck, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021

Thanks, Roy, for reading and responding to my poem. I struggled with this one so I find your comments to be helpful.

reply by royowen on 08-Jul-2021

Bless you