Talking About Death
Some have talked about death as a conversation.3 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet,
I gave you your 4 th vote!
Your poem flows well.
Death is part of life .. so it's just a waste of time over thinking about it.
That said:
Before my mother died , I never gave death a thought.
After she suddenly died, I was scare for months my father would die seeing he was 7 years older then her.
The older I get the more I find myself thinking about death...
I wish I would live a brighter life , enjoy it rather than be gloomy and pessimistic.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Ciao mystery poet,
I gave you your 4 th vote!
Your poem flows well.
Death is part of life .. so it's just a waste of time over thinking about it.
That said:
Before my mother died , I never gave death a thought.
After she suddenly died, I was scare for months my father would die seeing he was 7 years older then her.
The older I get the more I find myself thinking about death...
I wish I would live a brighter life , enjoy it rather than be gloomy and pessimistic.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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My condolences to your family and friends. Thank you! Thank you for the advice.
Comment from lyenochka
I don't think anyone should have a morbid interest in Death. But we can also talk about life before and after death because Jesus conquered death for us. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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I don't think anyone should have a morbid interest in Death. But we can also talk about life before and after death because Jesus conquered death for us. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This poem makes a great comment about those morose and negative people who only look on the dark side of things. YUCK on them!
I enjoyed your poem but I thought it could be strengthened by some editing here and there. I hope you will forgive me for taking liberties, but I have done a bit of that below to show you what I mean:
*Your poem*
Some people talked
about death,
I don't know why,
it feels like they have joy
of it,
it is too graphic for me.
I would not like to talk
about this subject,
or spice it up into a
conversation.
It seems to be
something not worth mentioning.
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*With suggested edits*
Some people talk
about death.
I don't know why.
It seems like they find joy
in it,
but it is too graphic for me.
I would prefer not to talk
about this subject,
or insert it into a
conversation.
It's not
worth
mentioning.
***
Just a thought. I hope this helps. Thanks!!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This poem makes a great comment about those morose and negative people who only look on the dark side of things. YUCK on them!
I enjoyed your poem but I thought it could be strengthened by some editing here and there. I hope you will forgive me for taking liberties, but I have done a bit of that below to show you what I mean:
*Your poem*
Some people talked
about death,
I don't know why,
it feels like they have joy
of it,
it is too graphic for me.
I would not like to talk
about this subject,
or spice it up into a
conversation.
It seems to be
something not worth mentioning.
***
*With suggested edits*
Some people talk
about death.
I don't know why.
It seems like they find joy
in it,
but it is too graphic for me.
I would prefer not to talk
about this subject,
or insert it into a
conversation.
It's not
worth
mentioning.
***
Just a thought. I hope this helps. Thanks!!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Thank you! I can't take out the word spice because it has to be in the poem. In the instructions it is said to put in those four words. Is it still good enough for five stars? Thanks for your help.
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How about:
or use it to spice up a conversation
??
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But absolutely. I've already upgraded. Good luck!
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Yes, that's perfect. I have changed it. Thank you for your help!
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You are so welcome! Good luck!
