Running Blind
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Running Blind ~ Chapter Eight"The Blind Girl's toughest cold case.
27 total reviews
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Sally:
Where would many of us be if we did not trust our instincts and intuitions? I know that every time I fail to do so, I regret it later. It seems Sally is going to have her hands full trying to solve multiple crimes at once - and her artwork hasn't even been stolen yet. Glad she has a loyal husband and trusty service dog on her side.
Jan
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Sally:
Where would many of us be if we did not trust our instincts and intuitions? I know that every time I fail to do so, I regret it later. It seems Sally is going to have her hands full trying to solve multiple crimes at once - and her artwork hasn't even been stolen yet. Glad she has a loyal husband and trusty service dog on her side.
Jan
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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I feel the same. My instincts are on overdrive as a blind person. You know I?m blind in real life, right? People read me for the longest time and don?t realize that I am actually blind. Most are shocked. Anyway, I decided to make a book series out of this phenomenon and the perceptions of a blind detective. So glad you like. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs?
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Yes, Sally, I realized a good while ago you are blind in real life by some of the comments you have made in replies to reviews or in explaining to me how you do certain things on fanstory. I think you are doing a great service to others who are blind by showcasing what they can do in your novels as well as what you do here on fanstory as a writer. Love you, my friend. jan
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Sal.
That was a clever twist in the story to include the television news flash. It fills in some gaps but it has an interest building effect. It's like reviewing the past and what has happened when all of a sudden the present interrupts with additional information, which may or may not be helpful to the detectives. It does add some tension because now it has been made contemporary.
PAL Z
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Hello Sal.
That was a clever twist in the story to include the television news flash. It fills in some gaps but it has an interest building effect. It's like reviewing the past and what has happened when all of a sudden the present interrupts with additional information, which may or may not be helpful to the detectives. It does add some tension because now it has been made contemporary.
PAL Z
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and kind compliments, dear Z. I?m glad you liked the news too. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
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Hi Sal.
You're welcome. The "news" was a good hook in the story.
PAL Z
Comment from poetwatch
That third eye senses danger, Sally. :) Detective Law is loose in the city with her bloodhound German Sheperd. Things are coming close to close with Detective Lieutenant Miles Jean-Baptiste close at hand. :) In reality, there are hundreds, maybe thousands of missing people, some don't want to be found, some are dead and buried, and some are fakes. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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That third eye senses danger, Sally. :) Detective Law is loose in the city with her bloodhound German Sheperd. Things are coming close to close with Detective Lieutenant Miles Jean-Baptiste close at hand. :) In reality, there are hundreds, maybe thousands of missing people, some don't want to be found, some are dead and buried, and some are fakes. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and kind compliments, dear poet. Both are so appreciated. Sending you my very best,
Sal XOs?
Comment from Judy Lawless
The suspense is building well in this Sally. Still so many questions to be answered, but that's what will keep us watching for the next chapter, time after time. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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The suspense is building well in this Sally. Still so many questions to be answered, but that's what will keep us watching for the next chapter, time after time. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you, dear Judy! Your kind review always means so much. Blessings always,
Sal XOs?
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Oh no, you're being watched! Detective Sally Law has such a close connection with King; she can pick up on his intuition, too. I was really hoping that she would get to meet Olivia Henry, in this chapter, but I guess we'll have to wait until next week.
Suggested minor revisions:
Get some of those as the Motor Court Motel may be our home a little longer."
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Get some of those, as the Motor Court Motel may be our home a little longer."
Captain Will Moran: New Orlean Police Department.
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Captain Will Moran: New Orleans Police Department.
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This was such a great chapter, I didn't want it to end. Tony Alfanzi is such a bad character, I hope the poor truck driver makes it in and out of the diner alive! Could that be the same place where Sally and her crew are eating? If the oil rig is parked there illegally, does that mean Dwayne Cooper is already done for? I hope not.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Oh no, you're being watched! Detective Sally Law has such a close connection with King; she can pick up on his intuition, too. I was really hoping that she would get to meet Olivia Henry, in this chapter, but I guess we'll have to wait until next week.
Suggested minor revisions:
Get some of those as the Motor Court Motel may be our home a little longer."
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Get some of those, as the Motor Court Motel may be our home a little longer."
Captain Will Moran: New Orlean Police Department.
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Captain Will Moran: New Orleans Police Department.
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This was such a great chapter, I didn't want it to end. Tony Alfanzi is such a bad character, I hope the poor truck driver makes it in and out of the diner alive! Could that be the same place where Sally and her crew are eating? If the oil rig is parked there illegally, does that mean Dwayne Cooper is already done for? I hope not.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and generous stars, dear Mary Kay. I?m glad you enjoyed this one. It?s heating up and I hope you will stay tuned! Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs?.
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You're so very welcome, my dear friend, Sally. I wouldn't want to miss any of this exciting story!
I hope you and your other family members are feeling much better.
Love and prayers, Mary Kay xoxo
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Thank you so much for the awesome review and star package. You are a bright star in my deep blue sky right now! Thank you for your prayers! Sal XOs?
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You're very welcome, my dear friend. And what a sweet thing to say! You're such a blessing to me, too.
Love and continued prayers, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from royowen
You invariably finish a chapter well, and the lead up isn't bad either. You always have the dogs as part of your stories, and are great main characters Sally, nobody does it as well as you My friend, well done Sally, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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You invariably finish a chapter well, and the lead up isn't bad either. You always have the dogs as part of your stories, and are great main characters Sally, nobody does it as well as you My friend, well done Sally, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review, dear Roy. It is most appreciated. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs?
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Most welcome Sally
Comment from Sankey
This was good again. Who was the other blind person? You have a clever way of bringing things in that you have alluded to in the past like the tanker in the parking lot. It is good how God increases other senses of the Blind or Deaf. No spags.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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This was good again. Who was the other blind person? You have a clever way of bringing things in that you have alluded to in the past like the tanker in the parking lot. It is good how God increases other senses of the Blind or Deaf. No spags.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Aw, thank you so much! You?re such a dear fan! I?m always delighted to see you and read your kind reviews. No spags? That?s unbelievable! Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs?
Comment from Gloria ....
I enjoyed this chapter very much, Sally. The pacing is punchy, and moves the plot forward at a fast pace. Dialogue is natural, and the definition of characters and setting done just right. Some excellent turn of phrases such as "etched in his food memory". That's enough to make a person hungry, besides the green thingie which I was hoping was spinach. lol
Just a couple of typos:
catching a ride on a (an) oil tanker
"I'm glad your (you) forwarded some of this DNA stuff to me, Sally.
I switched off my instant messager (messenger, or messages) and leaned back in my chair.
I was being surveiled, (surveilled) and I knew it.
Minor details in an excellent chapter. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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I enjoyed this chapter very much, Sally. The pacing is punchy, and moves the plot forward at a fast pace. Dialogue is natural, and the definition of characters and setting done just right. Some excellent turn of phrases such as "etched in his food memory". That's enough to make a person hungry, besides the green thingie which I was hoping was spinach. lol
Just a couple of typos:
catching a ride on a (an) oil tanker
"I'm glad your (you) forwarded some of this DNA stuff to me, Sally.
I switched off my instant messager (messenger, or messages) and leaned back in my chair.
I was being surveiled, (surveilled) and I knew it.
Minor details in an excellent chapter. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous stars! I appreciate the helpful critique as well. I use MSN ?Instant Messenger? as a blind person in my stories because it reads all texts and emails. A helpful blind tool especially for a blind detective. I probably should put that again in my author?s notes. I?m so blessed by this and delighted that you enjoyed this chapter. Sending you my best today as always, dear Gloria.
Sal XOs?
Comment from damommy
I hate it when I'm left hanging at the end of a chapter. You do it so well! lol. That last paragraph was kinda creepy. Gave me goose bumps. Hurry with the next chapter!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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I hate it when I'm left hanging at the end of a chapter. You do it so well! lol. That last paragraph was kinda creepy. Gave me goose bumps. Hurry with the next chapter!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and kind compliments. So delighted to please you! Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs?
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's always a good way to start off my Sunday, catching up on all the happenings in "Running Blind." Which, I've done my whole life. Not that I couldn't see, but because, I never slowed down enough to look and see where I was going, before running headlong into everything. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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It's always a good way to start off my Sunday, catching up on all the happenings in "Running Blind." Which, I've done my whole life. Not that I couldn't see, but because, I never slowed down enough to look and see where I was going, before running headlong into everything. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the excellent review and comments, dear Ric. Both are so appreciated. All my best,
Sal XOs?
