The Two of Me
Viewing comments for Chapter 88 "Courage & Will"Chochee Medina Life and Times
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Comment from Jarvis Popovich
Main points are concise and helpful to bring the point across. The message is hopeful and needs no help itself.
There were a few places I might choose different wording as if just to rhyme, like at the end "regardless if boy or girl" I think there might be something else to say instead of boy or girl. Like "regardless of courage and will"
Just trying to help. Great poem.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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Main points are concise and helpful to bring the point across. The message is hopeful and needs no help itself.
There were a few places I might choose different wording as if just to rhyme, like at the end "regardless if boy or girl" I think there might be something else to say instead of boy or girl. Like "regardless of courage and will"
Just trying to help. Great poem.
Thanks!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the Review and Advice
Comment from Bonnie Seach
This poem has been adjusted by the author and is awarded 5 stars.
The poem has an admirable theme. It s supported by an applicable picture.
There is work needed to elevate it to a higher rating.
, Review guidelines allow 4 stars or less where work is needed. This is to help us as writers, improve our skills.
Best wishes
*maybe > should be 2 words
*Obsticles > obstacles
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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This poem has been adjusted by the author and is awarded 5 stars.
The poem has an admirable theme. It s supported by an applicable picture.
There is work needed to elevate it to a higher rating.
, Review guidelines allow 4 stars or less where work is needed. This is to help us as writers, improve our skills.
Best wishes
*maybe > should be 2 words
*Obsticles > obstacles
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the Review, Correction and Kind compliments.
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Come back soon for a higher rating 👌😊
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Hello OC Poet. I have tried to update it to 5 stars. I hope it works 👆🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟👆👌☺️
Comment from Sharon Davis
This spiritual poem speaks well of Courage and Will, two very important traits, which can provide great comfort and assistance as one moves through their life.
The piece is well structured and presented.
Thank you for sharing your work, an enlightening read.
Nicely done.
Note: I did notice one spelling error- obstacles.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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This spiritual poem speaks well of Courage and Will, two very important traits, which can provide great comfort and assistance as one moves through their life.
The piece is well structured and presented.
Thank you for sharing your work, an enlightening read.
Nicely done.
Note: I did notice one spelling error- obstacles.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the Review, Correction and Kind compliments
Comment from DC Garriott
Careful with those capital letters. Always make sure your obeying the laws of literature at least 80% of the time! Other wise it's rhyme scheme was good and it was easy to read! Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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Careful with those capital letters. Always make sure your obeying the laws of literature at least 80% of the time! Other wise it's rhyme scheme was good and it was easy to read! Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the Review and Continued Support
Comment from Anne Johnston
That is a great poem. Your words are true, we need courage and a strong will and we find both of those as we yield ourselves to the Lord and follow is direction and guidance.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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That is a great poem. Your words are true, we need courage and a strong will and we find both of those as we yield ourselves to the Lord and follow is direction and guidance.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the Review and Continued Support
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You are welcome