Riker's Island
Time in Hell2 total reviews
Comment from Andy Sea
Powerful phrases enhance the poignancy of this poem; 'gates of fates', 'Crooked Kingdom', etc. Even the title sounds scary for some reason. And could hear the sound of doors as they 'clang shut.' A vivid insight into the inside neatly tied in with the final lines.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021
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Powerful phrases enhance the poignancy of this poem; 'gates of fates', 'Crooked Kingdom', etc. Even the title sounds scary for some reason. And could hear the sound of doors as they 'clang shut.' A vivid insight into the inside neatly tied in with the final lines.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021
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Thank you kind sir!
Comment from Bonnie Seach
Thank you for the author's notes.
The poem gives an intimate description of the prison. I heard the clanging of the doors!
It is well written. There is a mature rhyme scheme which intensifies the sombreness of the facility. It is easy to picture a frightened young delinquent walking past the inmates staring at him. The use of the word "pen" caught me for a moment. It is used, not as a writing tool, but as an enclosure to restrain inmates. Best wishes for success.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the author's notes.
The poem gives an intimate description of the prison. I heard the clanging of the doors!
It is well written. There is a mature rhyme scheme which intensifies the sombreness of the facility. It is easy to picture a frightened young delinquent walking past the inmates staring at him. The use of the word "pen" caught me for a moment. It is used, not as a writing tool, but as an enclosure to restrain inmates. Best wishes for success.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, Bonnie
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