Running Blind
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Comment from Ulla
Ah, you just answered my question what a wee thingy is. This is a great chapter, Sally, and so much is happening. I can understand her jaw dropping when the painting went for three million. Now what? Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Ah, you just answered my question what a wee thingy is. This is a great chapter, Sally, and so much is happening. I can understand her jaw dropping when the painting went for three million. Now what? Ulla xxx
Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Thank for for the wonderful review and generous stars! I feel so much better. It has been terribly slow and someone came that hadn't read my book (at all) and wanted clarity. This is troubling. Just like any book, one must read it to catch up.
Thank you for sending sunshine across the miles. Blessings always, dear Ulla.
Sal XOs...
Comment from Bonnie Seach
This story is interesting and holds the reader's interest. The structure seems to follow a planned outline.
Descriptions are good.
There are a number of places that need work.
Review guidelines allow 4 stars or less where work is needed.
Careful editing should strengthen the overall quality of this work. All the best for success
*An upper case letter follows a colon
A lower case letter follows a semi colon
*Jackson and I aside at the
> Jackson and me
*cream and lumps is sugar.
> lumps of
*he began anew. "A stranger came in the precinct looking.
> comma after anew, instead of a period
*said. Janelle denied him any information; then he left.
> period after information. New sentence. Not good to use "then" here
*Leery* of the gentleman's motives, Janelle thought to run
Needs clarification
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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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This story is interesting and holds the reader's interest. The structure seems to follow a planned outline.
Descriptions are good.
There are a number of places that need work.
Review guidelines allow 4 stars or less where work is needed.
Careful editing should strengthen the overall quality of this work. All the best for success
*An upper case letter follows a colon
A lower case letter follows a semi colon
*Jackson and I aside at the
> Jackson and me
*cream and lumps is sugar.
> lumps of
*he began anew. "A stranger came in the precinct looking.
> comma after anew, instead of a period
*said. Janelle denied him any information; then he left.
> period after information. New sentence. Not good to use "then" here
*Leery* of the gentleman's motives, Janelle thought to run
Needs clarification
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Well, it sees 'the blind gal' is going to have a tough day. I can't wait to find out what she learns from
Olivia Henry. I am betting she can start to put some pieces to the puzzle together.
Looking past the bloated car, she caught sight of the other man that had made it to the river's edge; falling onto the craggy shore. (other man WHO had made)
The brave sergeant was relieved for the man that had survived; (man WHO had)
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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Well, it sees 'the blind gal' is going to have a tough day. I can't wait to find out what she learns from
Olivia Henry. I am betting she can start to put some pieces to the puzzle together.
Looking past the bloated car, she caught sight of the other man that had made it to the river's edge; falling onto the craggy shore. (other man WHO had made)
The brave sergeant was relieved for the man that had survived; (man WHO had)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the excellent review and for the critique. I had a double goof. I have repaired them both. Thanks again so much, dear Barbara, Blessings always,
Sal XOs...
