Don't want to lose my sight
I was born a preemie, with bad vision, hearing and smell5 total reviews
Comment from writer723
I really enjoyed reading your story. You have such a wonderful way with words and are quite adept at expressing yourself. I found this writing to be very interesting. It held my attention throughout. Your vivid descriptions made it easy for me to visualize the scenario you were writing about. Excellent job!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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I really enjoyed reading your story. You have such a wonderful way with words and are quite adept at expressing yourself. I found this writing to be very interesting. It held my attention throughout. Your vivid descriptions made it easy for me to visualize the scenario you were writing about. Excellent job!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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thanks a lot
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet! I gave you your first vote!
I definitely would not want to lose my sight..without I would not be independent ..
I love watching , discovering fauna and flora .. I would miss these wondrous things
I love watching black & white films etc
I also would give up the sense of smell .. smoking , strong scents like perfume give me all headaches so not having smell doesn't sound that bad to me .
I enjoyed your essay..
Sadly, in the past women were not aware that smoking and drinking alcohol while pregnant was unhealthy for the unborn...
... on the other hand YOU were blessed in founding your soulmate .. your significant other...
who is there for you when your ( poor ) senses fail you.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Ciao poet! I gave you your first vote!
I definitely would not want to lose my sight..without I would not be independent ..
I love watching , discovering fauna and flora .. I would miss these wondrous things
I love watching black & white films etc
I also would give up the sense of smell .. smoking , strong scents like perfume give me all headaches so not having smell doesn't sound that bad to me .
I enjoyed your essay..
Sadly, in the past women were not aware that smoking and drinking alcohol while pregnant was unhealthy for the unborn...
... on the other hand YOU were blessed in founding your soulmate .. your significant other...
who is there for you when your ( poor ) senses fail you.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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thanks for the comments.
Comment from Chris Davies
Your choices were well defended and your prose was excellent. I like the way you tied the choices to your own life and great that your wife compliments you so. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Your choices were well defended and your prose was excellent. I like the way you tied the choices to your own life and great that your wife compliments you so. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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hard choice finally decided I would miss sight the most of all the senses.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job giving readers some history of how your birth affected your senses, Mystery Author..
retarred--->retarded [this word isn't used much anymore, though at the time was used a lot]
supervision--->superior
A1/4deaf---one quarter deaf
I believe you included more than one of the sense you would not wish to lose, even though you named one in the end. I would expand on that one and cut out some of the others mentioned as they confuse the issue. However, just my opinion--I'll defer to the judges. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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You did a good job giving readers some history of how your birth affected your senses, Mystery Author..
retarred--->retarded [this word isn't used much anymore, though at the time was used a lot]
supervision--->superior
A1/4deaf---one quarter deaf
I believe you included more than one of the sense you would not wish to lose, even though you named one in the end. I would expand on that one and cut out some of the others mentioned as they confuse the issue. However, just my opinion--I'll defer to the judges. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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thanks I will revise it accordingly
Comment from Leann DS
Your essay is interesting with a lot of detail. I liked reading about your sensory experiences.
Check out the following paragraph for some suggested edits:
Well, I am half blind, �¼ *(completely) deaf, and half nose blind as *(blindness) *(as well)well. But I tested as a genius *(and was) was reading at the 16 grade (college-level highest score) level in the first grade and got 750 on my history advance *(Advanced) placement SAT score -- only one of eight people to score so high in the entire country.. *(I should)Should have majored in history at University.
I hope this is helpful. Good luck to you in the contest. Have a great week.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Your essay is interesting with a lot of detail. I liked reading about your sensory experiences.
Check out the following paragraph for some suggested edits:
Well, I am half blind, �¼ *(completely) deaf, and half nose blind as *(blindness) *(as well)well. But I tested as a genius *(and was) was reading at the 16 grade (college-level highest score) level in the first grade and got 750 on my history advance *(Advanced) placement SAT score -- only one of eight people to score so high in the entire country.. *(I should)Should have majored in history at University.
I hope this is helpful. Good luck to you in the contest. Have a great week.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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thanks.