Let There Be Light
Lune Poem6 total reviews
Comment from Susan Newell
Hmmm. A metaphor for life? Are we already in the abyss, surrounded by darkness and evil? Will we choose to see the Light of the World? I like that you don't say, "Will there be light." You make it a matter of choosing to see it. Excellent.
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Hmmm. A metaphor for life? Are we already in the abyss, surrounded by darkness and evil? Will we choose to see the Light of the World? I like that you don't say, "Will there be light." You make it a matter of choosing to see it. Excellent.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
Comment from Bill Schott
This lune poem, Let There Be Light, has the proper formatting and finds the tunnel entered and the light at the end of it anticipated.
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This lune poem, Let There Be Light, has the proper formatting and finds the tunnel entered and the light at the end of it anticipated.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2021
Comment from Anne Johnston
Great entry for this contest. I love the picture of the train entering the tunnel. No matter how dark things may be for the moment, we always look for the light at the end of the tunnel.
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Great entry for this contest. I love the picture of the train entering the tunnel. No matter how dark things may be for the moment, we always look for the light at the end of the tunnel.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2021
Comment from Master Matilda
When I first read this I was thinking I was missing the rest and wasn't sure if I clicked on the correct "read" button! Lol. Then, I went back and just studied the picture with the poem seeing so many words beyond the words. What a great image to create wonder.....will we see the light at the end of the tunnel? So many of us get stuck in the darkness and need these reminders, with few words, to inspire us to see the light. Thank you for sharing.
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When I first read this I was thinking I was missing the rest and wasn't sure if I clicked on the correct "read" button! Lol. Then, I went back and just studied the picture with the poem seeing so many words beyond the words. What a great image to create wonder.....will we see the light at the end of the tunnel? So many of us get stuck in the darkness and need these reminders, with few words, to inspire us to see the light. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2021
Comment from Bonnie Seach
The 3 line poem with 5-3-5 syllables is designed
to form a crescent ð??? like the letter "C". Your word *surrounds* is too long and spoils the pattern.
Perhaps something like "it is dark" would have fitted nicely.
However, the syllable count fits the contest rules. Thank you for sharing
Best wishes
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The 3 line poem with 5-3-5 syllables is designed
to form a crescent ð??? like the letter "C". Your word *surrounds* is too long and spoils the pattern.
Perhaps something like "it is dark" would have fitted nicely.
However, the syllable count fits the contest rules. Thank you for sharing
Best wishes
Comment Written 27-Jun-2021
Comment from Sally Law
I certainly hope so. As a Christian, I'm always looking towards the light to see my way ahead. A wonderful lune and entry for the contest. I wish you all the best.
Sal XOs...
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I certainly hope so. As a Christian, I'm always looking towards the light to see my way ahead. A wonderful lune and entry for the contest. I wish you all the best.
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 27-Jun-2021