We Shall Have No Pie
5-7-5 contest entry10 total reviews
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
This is really a nice Haiku. For, you happen
to follow all of the rules. Therefore, you have
the skills to pay the bills. And I hope to read more
from you. Keep Writing. Nevertheless, I will be
looking forward to seeing you, when you stop by
my spot to enjoy some of my poetry.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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This is really a nice Haiku. For, you happen
to follow all of the rules. Therefore, you have
the skills to pay the bills. And I hope to read more
from you. Keep Writing. Nevertheless, I will be
looking forward to seeing you, when you stop by
my spot to enjoy some of my poetry.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your lovely review. I'm sorry it took so long to respond, as I have been ill and not on the site. Hugs.
Comment from mermaids
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem that shows the fun of eating berries from the vine, which I have done. There is a good feeling in your words and it takes the reader out into nature.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem that shows the fun of eating berries from the vine, which I have done. There is a good feeling in your words and it takes the reader out into nature.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your kind review. Your encouraging comments are much appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a cautionary tale with a note of humor. The reader is invited to develop the art of a sense of humor toward themselves. My mother used to say we could have one berry while we were berrying. She reminded us we'd have a nice pie and some berries in milk and sugar. We followed that dictate and had pie & berries in milk and sugar.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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This is a cautionary tale with a note of humor. The reader is invited to develop the art of a sense of humor toward themselves. My mother used to say we could have one berry while we were berrying. She reminded us we'd have a nice pie and some berries in milk and sugar. We followed that dictate and had pie & berries in milk and sugar.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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What a compliant child you were! :-) My brother, sister, and I usually just ate the berries. Ha ha
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What a compliant child you were! :-) My brother, sister, and I usually just ate the berries. Ha ha
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Ha Ha Ha but we enjoyed the pie!
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There unfortunately has never been much of a compliant bone in my body & I've gotten in plenty of trouble for it. It's clearly Karmic.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Six if I had one. The child passes the empty pail to mom, but mom will fill it with a memory of the moment and an aching love. the pail will never be truly empty. The child feels safe and loved enough to smile as she passes to the mother an empty pail with berry stained fingers. The stains are not stains of shame or guilt in this relationship. they are stains of joy and freedom. Well done my friend, Tim
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Six if I had one. The child passes the empty pail to mom, but mom will fill it with a memory of the moment and an aching love. the pail will never be truly empty. The child feels safe and loved enough to smile as she passes to the mother an empty pail with berry stained fingers. The stains are not stains of shame or guilt in this relationship. they are stains of joy and freedom. Well done my friend, Tim
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your supportive and encouraging review, Tim. I humbly appreciate it, and the thought of a six star rating is good enough for me! Hugs and blessings.
Comment from karenina
AND I just used my last six! (Timing has always been an issue with me!)
This is seriously adorable! I think I was one of those kids... My grand-mom would take me berry picking and my general default was: "One in the bucket, two in my mouth!"
Happy memories! (Maybe not so much for my grand-mom, though)
Somehow she always managed to get at least one pie made!
Smiles.
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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AND I just used my last six! (Timing has always been an issue with me!)
This is seriously adorable! I think I was one of those kids... My grand-mom would take me berry picking and my general default was: "One in the bucket, two in my mouth!"
Happy memories! (Maybe not so much for my grand-mom, though)
Somehow she always managed to get at least one pie made!
Smiles.
Karenina
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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The same for me! I think this is how a miniature berry turnover was created. :-) Thank you so much for your review and comments. Appreciate it much. Hugs and blessings.
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No love by! I used yo male teeny tiny tarts for my little ones! Not because I wad clever! It was the mother of necessity! (chuckle)
Karenina
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wonderful! Brilliant title and whimsically vivid image--chagrined (note spelling--only one "R") purple smile. This charmer may be a winner. FIngers crossed.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Wonderful! Brilliant title and whimsically vivid image--chagrined (note spelling--only one "R") purple smile. This charmer may be a winner. FIngers crossed.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much! I humbly appreciate your encouragement. And thanks for catching the misspelling. My phone missed it. Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment from Begin Again
OOOPS! I think the pie filling is already in the tummy and the crust will have to follow...lol I remember as a kid picking berries and it is so easy to eat, eat, eat....Very cute and truthful too! Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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OOOPS! I think the pie filling is already in the tummy and the crust will have to follow...lol I remember as a kid picking berries and it is so easy to eat, eat, eat....Very cute and truthful too! Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Same here, Carol. Berry picking was a daily adventure for my brother, sister, three younger cousins and I during the summertime. We rarely got a pie. :-) Thanks for the comments and review. Hugs.
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Congratulations on winning a ribbon in the story contest. Awesome! Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sally Law
This is just precious! How many times has this happened to me. One we retell of the strawberry field catastrophe. Many mouths were red.... and there was certainly no shortcake.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs....
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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This is just precious! How many times has this happened to me. One we retell of the strawberry field catastrophe. Many mouths were red.... and there was certainly no shortcake.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs....
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Berries are just so tiny, it can't hurt to eat just one? And one more? And one more. :-) Thank you so much for your comments and review. Hugs and blessings always.
Comment from Cat Merto
Nicely worded 575 poem
About berry eaten before they made it the pie
It could see that happening
Nicely done
Photo and and color theme was good was well
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Nicely worded 575 poem
About berry eaten before they made it the pie
It could see that happening
Nicely done
Photo and and color theme was good was well
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your thoughtful and encouraging review and comments. You are appreciated. Hugs and blessings.
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Your welcome
Comment from Anne Johnston
That is a great entry for this contest. I like the picture you have chosen. You tell a very true story about picking berries with children. It is much easier to eat more than they save.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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That is a great entry for this contest. I like the picture you have chosen. You tell a very true story about picking berries with children. It is much easier to eat more than they save.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, for reading and reviewing. Your kind comments are appreciated. Hugs and blessings.
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You are welcome
