Uncle T-Rex
He's a good guy, but eating with him is not enjoyable.5 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, this made me smile as your Uncle has bad eating habits and we are taught from a young age to close our mouth when we are eating, but some never learned that lesson! A fun post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Ha ha ha, this made me smile as your Uncle has bad eating habits and we are taught from a young age to close our mouth when we are eating, but some never learned that lesson! A fun post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thanks, Dolly, for the read and review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Fabulous story! Fearsome pic. Brilliant depiction of sloppy eater.
Heads-up--not sure if the compound word [vice-grip=>VISE-GRIP] counts as one or two per the judges--sugg: make explicit mention in the notes.
I'd place one jaw on the top of his head and under his chin and squeeze [closing=>TO CLOSE] his mouth. (and remove some other word to keep count at 100)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Fabulous story! Fearsome pic. Brilliant depiction of sloppy eater.
Heads-up--not sure if the compound word [vice-grip=>VISE-GRIP] counts as one or two per the judges--sugg: make explicit mention in the notes.
I'd place one jaw on the top of his head and under his chin and squeeze [closing=>TO CLOSE] his mouth. (and remove some other word to keep count at 100)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your read, review and suggestion.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your description of your uncle and the way he eats is revolting. I would not like to see it. Your words are well thought out.
May I suggest ~
However, sitting across from him when he eats is a[ delete a/ replace with so] revolting. He's a T-Rex
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your description of your uncle and the way he eats is revolting. I would not like to see it. Your words are well thought out.
May I suggest ~
However, sitting across from him when he eats is a[ delete a/ replace with so] revolting. He's a T-Rex
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the read and suggestion.
Comment from Leann DS
Poor uncle Frank! Nobody taught him any manners. I like how you compared him to a tea Rex. Creative!
Typos for your review:
My uncle Frank does a lot for my brother and me. He takes us to ball games, parades and museums. However, sitting across from him when he eats is a revolting.- remove the word "a"
He's a T-Rex chomping down on his prey. His mouth opens so wide one can see his brown teeth and slippery tongue as he sloshes away as food oozes from the side of his mouth.
- consider changing "as "to "and "... And food sloshes
I enjoyed this, even though I was grossed out! :-) Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. Have a great week!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Poor uncle Frank! Nobody taught him any manners. I like how you compared him to a tea Rex. Creative!
Typos for your review:
My uncle Frank does a lot for my brother and me. He takes us to ball games, parades and museums. However, sitting across from him when he eats is a revolting.- remove the word "a"
He's a T-Rex chomping down on his prey. His mouth opens so wide one can see his brown teeth and slippery tongue as he sloshes away as food oozes from the side of his mouth.
- consider changing "as "to "and "... And food sloshes
I enjoyed this, even though I was grossed out! :-) Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. Have a great week!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the read and suggestions.
Comment from lancellot
Yes, I've been told I was a messy eater too. I feel Uncle Frank's pain. We are so oppressed. I'm kidding. Very good. This story covers a topic most people know about, can't stand, tolerate, but never seem to write about.
Good idea.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Yes, I've been told I was a messy eater too. I feel Uncle Frank's pain. We are so oppressed. I'm kidding. Very good. This story covers a topic most people know about, can't stand, tolerate, but never seem to write about.
Good idea.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the read and review. Much appreciated.
