On the Edge of Deception Pg 57
And the end draws near.....17 total reviews
Comment from Alaskastory
"On the Edge of Deception Pg 5" is full of action with constant conversation. Words spoken do well in displaying each character. Whenever I get confused about one, the cast list is a great help. This is well done and a fun read.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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"On the Edge of Deception Pg 5" is full of action with constant conversation. Words spoken do well in displaying each character. Whenever I get confused about one, the cast list is a great help. This is well done and a fun read.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for reading this chapter. The final chapter is the next one 58. I hope that you find the story entertaining and the ending a surprise. Thanks for the review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Women like her have a way of bouncing back." I like the idea of hope for Nancy. She was a lying, sneaky devil, but also smart and tough. I like that you did not totally destroy her. I also liked the Red Alert password. Oh no! The Last Chance may be torched. I'm going to the next chapter to see what happens.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Women like her have a way of bouncing back." I like the idea of hope for Nancy. She was a lying, sneaky devil, but also smart and tough. I like that you did not totally destroy her. I also liked the Red Alert password. Oh no! The Last Chance may be torched. I'm going to the next chapter to see what happens.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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I seem to have to give my evil characters at least a glimmer of humanity. LOL Thanks for the review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from eliz100
This is another great installment. You sure know how to end a page to keep the reader reading. There is no room for improvement. I look forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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This is another great installment. You sure know how to end a page to keep the reader reading. There is no room for improvement. I look forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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I hope I can always keep drawing the reader back to my stories. That's what makes me happy and wanting to write. Smiles, Carol
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
hahahahahaha! Of course! And also setting yourself up for a possible sequel -- I like it! This looks good. I can't wait to go to the next one, and then I also dread it. Is that weird? haha
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Carol,
hahahahahaha! Of course! And also setting yourself up for a possible sequel -- I like it! This looks good. I can't wait to go to the next one, and then I also dread it. Is that weird? haha
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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I dreaded coming to the end as well...I couldn't write fast enough to get there and now that I have I am at a loss. Thanks for always being there, Carol
Comment from Leann DS
Love the password... :-) I was cracking up.
Of course, I love it! It's hard to write a review when you have nothing negative to say. :-)
I did find some thing you might want to look over though... I think you meant to say "back lash" instead of "Flashback."
Hank nodded to the agents, and they helped Amanda into the vehicle. The Agency had decided to keep her in an undisclosed location that would protect her from whatever flashback occurred. The dragnet was claiming a lot of influential people with octopus arms stretching into every walk of life. They needed to guarantee her safety.
Have a great week!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Love the password... :-) I was cracking up.
Of course, I love it! It's hard to write a review when you have nothing negative to say. :-)
I did find some thing you might want to look over though... I think you meant to say "back lash" instead of "Flashback."
Hank nodded to the agents, and they helped Amanda into the vehicle. The Agency had decided to keep her in an undisclosed location that would protect her from whatever flashback occurred. The dragnet was claiming a lot of influential people with octopus arms stretching into every walk of life. They needed to guarantee her safety.
Have a great week!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Glad you caught that password..LOL, I couldn't resist like the carpenter who always has to sign his name on the wall and wonder if anyone will discover it years from now.
Thanks for reading and enjoying ...I hate to see it end.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I sure hope O'Shea doesn't get a way, but this may be good and our friends can get the really high up people. I like that idea best.
At first, he'd hoped that Nancy would join him, but once she'd declined and suggested it was his time to shine, (omit 'that')
It appeared that one agent was changing a flat tire. (omit 'that')
Spider sighed, "It's an abandoned warehouse, knucklehead. (sighed isn't a speech tag, you need a period not a comma)
"She called and left me a message about the time change. Why? Should I have talked to her?" (omit 'me' if she called who else would she leave a message for?)
Peter sighed, "Forget it! It's not important." (same as before, period after sighed)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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I sure hope O'Shea doesn't get a way, but this may be good and our friends can get the really high up people. I like that idea best.
At first, he'd hoped that Nancy would join him, but once she'd declined and suggested it was his time to shine, (omit 'that')
It appeared that one agent was changing a flat tire. (omit 'that')
Spider sighed, "It's an abandoned warehouse, knucklehead. (sighed isn't a speech tag, you need a period not a comma)
"She called and left me a message about the time change. Why? Should I have talked to her?" (omit 'me' if she called who else would she leave a message for?)
Peter sighed, "Forget it! It's not important." (same as before, period after sighed)
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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You are so good at catching those little things. My eyes simply don't even see them until you point them out. I thank you very much.
Fixed... and I am glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What a guy. Nancy's friend O'Shea is going to blow up her bar! I see he's been tipped off, but I'm sure he isn't going to escape his fate. The teams are well in position to take care of everything. Looking forward to the end. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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What a guy. Nancy's friend O'Shea is going to blow up her bar! I see he's been tipped off, but I'm sure he isn't going to escape his fate. The teams are well in position to take care of everything. Looking forward to the end. Nancy:)
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Thanks so much for the kind review and for continuing to follow the story. Awesome! Smiles, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
Still on the edge of my seat, Carol! I thought this was all going to go smoothly, but now you've added some more suspense! I like the added touch of the show of emotion between Beth and Nancy. Still, is anyone really safe yet? Very well done!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Still on the edge of my seat, Carol! I thought this was all going to go smoothly, but now you've added some more suspense! I like the added touch of the show of emotion between Beth and Nancy. Still, is anyone really safe yet? Very well done!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Good morning, Judy... thank you for the awesome review and the stars. I hope you also enjoy the last chapter... it's a bit different for sure. I have appreciated your continued support and encouragement throughout the entire story. Thank you so much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You're quite welcome, Carol! I started reading the last chapter right after I reviewed this one, but then I got interrupted. Going there now.:)
Comment from Ric Myworld
You've set the stage, leaving only the one possibility of something going wrong. Which wouldn't be you if there wasn't at least some chance things could blowup in everyone's faces. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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You've set the stage, leaving only the one possibility of something going wrong. Which wouldn't be you if there wasn't at least some chance things could blowup in everyone's faces. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Good morning...I hope you enjoy the upcoming last chapter... it was a struggle to finish it and hope that I didn't fall on my face. So far...I think it has went over well. Smiles, Carol
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Great job! As with everything you write. I just finished the last chapter that went out in complete Carol style. :-)
Comment from BethShelby
I see O'Shea has been tipped off but I'm sure he isn't going to get far. The teams are well in position to take care of everything. I see you nave something else posted and I 'm hopint it is the chapter that wraps the great story up. I'll miss it but I can wait to see how ends.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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I see O'Shea has been tipped off but I'm sure he isn't going to get far. The teams are well in position to take care of everything. I see you nave something else posted and I 'm hopint it is the chapter that wraps the great story up. I'll miss it but I can wait to see how ends.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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I can't wait to see what you think as well Beth... It's been a journey, but I will miss it as well.
Thanks for all your support and for continuing to follow throughout all the trials and tribulations of my dear characters.
Smiles, Carol
