haiku (wasp seeks nourishment)
A club challenge poem15 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Wasp Seeks Nourishment, presented as a 5-7-5, rings the dinner bell for hungry bees and allows for patrons to fly in and fill up. Nice...........
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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This haiku, Wasp Seeks Nourishment, presented as a 5-7-5, rings the dinner bell for hungry bees and allows for patrons to fly in and fill up. Nice...........
Comment Written 24-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gert sherwood
A club challenge poem
haiku (seeking nourishment)
kahpot between the insects and not enough rain.
The beautiful picture of the trumpet flowers need rain and rid of the pesty bugs
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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A club challenge poem
haiku (seeking nourishment)
kahpot between the insects and not enough rain.
The beautiful picture of the trumpet flowers need rain and rid of the pesty bugs
Gert
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are so welcome kahpot
Gert
Comment from Mark D. R.
cute idea for Gypsy's club Haiku insect entry
you selected a terrific photo to complement your verse
last line is the great twist for your ending
mark
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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cute idea for Gypsy's club Haiku insect entry
you selected a terrific photo to complement your verse
last line is the great twist for your ending
mark
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
This is an excellent response to the challenge! Seeking nourishment, they decided to stay awhile. Great interpretation of the artwork. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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This is an excellent response to the challenge! Seeking nourishment, they decided to stay awhile. Great interpretation of the artwork. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your wonderful and encouraging comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dilettante junior
Dear poet,
What a beautiful haiku! I love it. It speaks of nature, insects, the fulfilling process of pollination, with a fun twist as well!
Well done!
Cheers,
DJ
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Dear poet,
What a beautiful haiku! I love it. It speaks of nature, insects, the fulfilling process of pollination, with a fun twist as well!
Well done!
Cheers,
DJ
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your haiku is in great form. I enjoyed reading it. Your color scheme is perfect and sets off your well thought out words perfectly. Great job with the syllable count per line. I like your satori--fits well. Your words read smoothly and create great imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Your haiku is in great form. I enjoyed reading it. Your color scheme is perfect and sets off your well thought out words perfectly. Great job with the syllable count per line. I like your satori--fits well. Your words read smoothly and create great imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your most encouraging comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
haiku (seeking nourishment)
by kahpot
I love your poem. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Lovely presentation. Excellent imagery of the wasps and trumpet flower. I like the last line...good play on words and juxtaposition. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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haiku (seeking nourishment)
by kahpot
I love your poem. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Lovely presentation. Excellent imagery of the wasps and trumpet flower. I like the last line...good play on words and juxtaposition. Well done!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much, I am enjoying learning forms from/with you****kahpot
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made effective use of your seventeen syllables in this charming piece about a wasp in need of liquid sustenance. Good metaphor in the use of "squatter"
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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You have made effective use of your seventeen syllables in this charming piece about a wasp in need of liquid sustenance. Good metaphor in the use of "squatter"
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jesse James Doty
The picture is beautiful and suits the haiku well. This is an excellent example of an insect contemporary haiku style of poetry. I love the comparison of the wasp to a squatter...and I love the phrase, 'squatters paradise.' This style fits your need for accurate punctuation as it needs none this time. Well done, my friend.
Have a good day,
Jesse
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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The picture is beautiful and suits the haiku well. This is an excellent example of an insect contemporary haiku style of poetry. I love the comparison of the wasp to a squatter...and I love the phrase, 'squatters paradise.' This style fits your need for accurate punctuation as it needs none this time. Well done, my friend.
Have a good day,
Jesse
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You're very welcome, my friend.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from AnnaLinda
Hi K ym,
Interesting metaphor included in your contemporary insect haiku.
Good imagery too.
I might make it a 5/6/5 and reverse the order. It would leave out the (ing) in the first line...
wasp seeks nourishment
invades vacant trumpets
squatter's paradise
I think you need that apostrophe too...?
That adj. would keep it all in the moment. Just a thought...it is up to you.
You could also think of another 1 syllable descriptive word in the middle line...like 'bell trumpets' or something.
Ok, I enjoyed your creative and humorous contribution.
Anna
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Hi K ym,
Interesting metaphor included in your contemporary insect haiku.
Good imagery too.
I might make it a 5/6/5 and reverse the order. It would leave out the (ing) in the first line...
wasp seeks nourishment
invades vacant trumpets
squatter's paradise
I think you need that apostrophe too...?
That adj. would keep it all in the moment. Just a thought...it is up to you.
You could also think of another 1 syllable descriptive word in the middle line...like 'bell trumpets' or something.
Ok, I enjoyed your creative and humorous contribution.
Anna
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Thank you so very much, you suggestions are excellent and read very well, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
