Comment from MissMerri

Exceptional

Such a dramatic story told with all the power and intensity of a hurricane. The emotions are felt as we travel with you through the build up and the endurance of storm conditions. The quiet of the center is equally dramatic. Such a well-told story deserves six stars. I really enjoyed this.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021

Thanks again for the six star review and your support is much appreciated estory

Comment from Dilettante junior

Excellent

Dear estory,

What a delightful read! While reading, I made sure to check outside to watch out for heavy rain or strong gusts. Such a vivid description you portrayed. I held my breath when you opened the door to see what it felt like. So glad you were safe and sound! A most gripping piece. Beautifully portrayed from memory.

Well done.
Cheers,
DJ

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021

Thanks for the excellent review and I am glad this story seemed to capture the tension and uncertainty that goes with this moment of going through a hurricane. Probably one the most vivid memories of my life. It is one of those life changing moments when you realize how small you are in the forces of nature. estory

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

A perfect closing line to this visceral account. Graphic imagery such as rain laying down a carpet of water and Dark, boiling clouds are racing by bring the scenes to life. I can understand the urge to actually experience the force of the wind and the miraculous calm in the middle of the storm. A powerful piece of writing.

A few observations...
winds of over a 110 miles an hour I think you only need the article when spelling out the numbers a hundred and ten...
"They say they'll be a lot of rain," my mother says, "And (and) some of the roads might get blocked by falling trees."
ankle(-)deep and battery(-)powered
You have a number of places where a leading phrase isn't separated by a comma. I don't think it always needs to be, but I thought you could do with one here: At the supermarket(,) there is an early flurry of nervous shoppers

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and all the comments and suggestions. I am glad people seem to have found the writing colorful enough to capture the feelings of tension and uncertainty when you go through one of these storms. I will take a look at the grammar. estory

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

estory, its nice to see you are back on Fanstory
I read about your experience during a hurricane. Its wheel told
plus. I found your story was easy to follow and kept me wanted to read more.

Gert

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and I am glad you enjoyed my little bit of a thriller, if you can call it that. It was one of those life changing moments in my life, when I realized how small people can be in the middle of the forces of nature. estory

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock

Excellent

Nature is awesome. Nothing can stop the power that is in a hurricane. How could you stop the force that is strong enough to turn you or anything in its path, upside down? So much food for thought when you think about battling winds. Your story is intriguing and daunting.
Ralf

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and I am glad you enjoyed this thriller of a chapter. It was one of those life changing moments in my life and I am glad the writing seemed to capture that sense of being overwhelmed by nature and struggling to stand up and walk through it. estory

Comment from Leann DS

Excellent

this was really interesting and you did an excellent job with your descriptions. I've never been in a hurricane, and I enjoyed reading about your experience.

I noticed one typo, for your review, as follows:


On a September night I lay in darkness, listening to the radio. The reporter is telling of the hurricane churning slowly towards us in the ocean south of our island. It is a CAT 3, with sustained winds of over a 110
- over 110

Thanks for sharing this. Well done. Have a great weekend.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021

Thanks for the excellent review and all your comments and suggestions. I will take a look at it and give it an edit at some point. But I am glad the story seemed to capture that intensity that these storms can have. It deffinitely was a life changing moment. estory

Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

I have no trouble understanding your need to go out in the might of this power - it is something I would have done for sure...It makes me think, not of fury, but of the elements showing us their strength lest we ever forget. Very good story and totally engaging.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this story. People are curious, they are drawn by curiosity. I wouldn't say I was risking my life standing on the porch, but I would have to agree with my father that I could have damaged the storm door. But I wouldn't trade that moment of standing in the hurricane gusts for anything. Nor standing in the eye of the storm. That was intense. estory

Comment from Theodore McDowell

Excellent

Extremely well-written description. It held my interest and attention. I wish I had a six star left for this one. I loved the ending. Great job and keep up the good work. You have a nice style, straightforward and simple, to your writing that is appealing.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021

Thanks so much for the excellent review and I am glad you enjoyed the story and found it so well written. This book is somewhat a take on Washington Irving's sketch book, and Wilhelm Heyer's Long Island Light essays. somewhere in between those two. I want a narrative that is in a personal voice, straightforward, and articulating something of the spiritual elements you experience in life in these physical moments. estory

Comment from Judy Lawless

Exceptional

Wow, this was really interesting to read a first-hand account of someone who experienced a hurricane. I can imagine what you felt, your need to feel the power and really experience it. I'm happy that it didn't destroy your home or harm you and your family. Thanks for sharing it. For that I'm giving you my last six stars. :)

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021

Thanks again for the six star review and I am glad you enjoyed this so much. It is fun to write this book, the chapters are short and intense and I think when you are enjoying the writing, that's when you do the best work. Thanks so much and I appreciate all the support. estory