Forty Four Cents
Children's rhyming poem16 total reviews
Comment from Christen Leonard
Children will love this poem! The poem told of a child having a thoughtful mindset. It also gave tips on how to earn money. It showed that good deeds will always bring rewards one way or another! And in the end, don't break the rules. How Nice!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Children will love this poem! The poem told of a child having a thoughtful mindset. It also gave tips on how to earn money. It showed that good deeds will always bring rewards one way or another! And in the end, don't break the rules. How Nice!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. Your kind comments are very appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem for a child, Forty-four Cents, cleverly builds the sum needed to make this enterprising child a happy consumer. The final bar to success was hilarious.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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This poem for a child, Forty-four Cents, cleverly builds the sum needed to make this enterprising child a happy consumer. The final bar to success was hilarious.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2021
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Thanks, Bill. Glad you liked it. My granddaughters were not happy with that ending! :-) Oh well. It brought up a good conversational topic with them, so I'm taking it as a win. Hugs.
Comment from Patty Palmer
She was one busy little girl trying to earn enough money to buy her treats. Everything she did was done in rhyme to fit the contest. I know some kids would have just begged for the money, but your poem tells how she felt responsible to earn the money herself. Good luck with the contest.
Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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She was one busy little girl trying to earn enough money to buy her treats. Everything she did was done in rhyme to fit the contest. I know some kids would have just begged for the money, but your poem tells how she felt responsible to earn the money herself. Good luck with the contest.
Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your comments and review. I appreciate them both very much.
Comment from royowen
Oh dear foiled and falling at the last jump, now we know how a steeplechaser feels, when he is a furlong in front coming to the last jump. Beautifully written a great kiddy's poem, well rhymed with a morale, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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Oh dear foiled and falling at the last jump, now we know how a steeplechaser feels, when he is a furlong in front coming to the last jump. Beautifully written a great kiddy's poem, well rhymed with a morale, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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Ha ha! Thank you for your entertaining and fun review. It is appreciated.
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Well done
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I changed it. I figured if you noticed it and I also questioned it, it was important enough to make the change. Thanks again!
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Well done
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This narrative poem is very skillfully-composed and expressive of how one may be willing to work hard to earn money for a special treat--but may still be unable to get to that treat. Charming poem with lessons to teach
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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This narrative poem is very skillfully-composed and expressive of how one may be willing to work hard to earn money for a special treat--but may still be unable to get to that treat. Charming poem with lessons to teach
Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. You're encouraging and supportive comments are appreciated.
Comment from RodG
I think young readers will enjoy this poem, especially COUNTING HER MONEY ALONG WITH THE SPEAKER as she earns it doing chores and just being "cute." But your ending's weak. If she can ride a bike, why can't she cross the street?
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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I think young readers will enjoy this poem, especially COUNTING HER MONEY ALONG WITH THE SPEAKER as she earns it doing chores and just being "cute." But your ending's weak. If she can ride a bike, why can't she cross the street?
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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To answer your question, perhaps she is four years old? Both my son and nephew learned to ride their bikes at age 4. Or, maybe she has training wheels? Or maybe her bike is a tricycle. We always called tricycles bikes. Anyway? Not sure. I wasn't there. Ha ha thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from equestrik
This is really cute! What a fun write which includes some money knowledge and math. This is a wonderful entry for the contest and I wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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This is really cute! What a fun write which includes some money knowledge and math. This is a wonderful entry for the contest and I wish you all the best.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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Thank you. It was fun to write! I appreciate your supportive and encouraging comments and review. Hugs.
Comment from Sharon Davis
This Children's poem is entertaining and engaging, with a great rhythm and rhyming scheme.
It tells a story of perseverance as the child works diligently toward a goal.
Thank you for sharingnyour work.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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This Children's poem is entertaining and engaging, with a great rhythm and rhyming scheme.
It tells a story of perseverance as the child works diligently toward a goal.
Thank you for sharingnyour work.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your support of comments and for reading my poem. I appreciate it. Hugs.
Comment from writer723
I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was very interesting and intriguing. I felt drawn into the situation being described. Your words painted such a vivid picture in my mind. Great writing!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was very interesting and intriguing. I felt drawn into the situation being described. Your words painted such a vivid picture in my mind. Great writing!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate the time you took to read and review my poem. Hugs.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, after saving all that money, this poor child could not cross the street, I thought you were going to say that the shop was closed! A fun story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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Ha ha ha, after saving all that money, this poor child could not cross the street, I thought you were going to say that the shop was closed! A fun story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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:-) Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. When I was writing, I was thinking that a parent or older sibling could do a problem-solving conversation so the child could figure out how to get to that candy store! :-)
