One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Mark Schardine
a sweet symphony
to lull maiden to dream of
faraway places
We can imagine her preferring to seek our joy in distant places, and letting go of any fear of danger.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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a sweet symphony
to lull maiden to dream of
faraway places
We can imagine her preferring to seek our joy in distant places, and letting go of any fear of danger.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Mark.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Ginnygray
The ibis, a lovely red bird sits on the shoulder of a young maiden where swept up in the moonlight and night creatures songs causes the maiden to dream of far away places where the ibis flies among other pretty maidens. Format and art work are well chosen and fits the syllable count of the 5/7/5/7/5/7/5/7/7.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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The ibis, a lovely red bird sits on the shoulder of a young maiden where swept up in the moonlight and night creatures songs causes the maiden to dream of far away places where the ibis flies among other pretty maidens. Format and art work are well chosen and fits the syllable count of the 5/7/5/7/5/7/5/7/7.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--and you sure didn't choka penning this one--ahh, ha, ha! Woo, I'm all over that joke like a tarp covering an old car up on blocks in the neighbor's front yard! I'll shut up now!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--and you sure didn't choka penning this one--ahh, ha, ha! Woo, I'm all over that joke like a tarp covering an old car up on blocks in the neighbor's front yard! I'll shut up now!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Gypsy A nicely set out poem with a peaceful but exciting outcome a pretty picture to work with I could see the ibis flying around the maidens nice imagery created Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Hi Gypsy A nicely set out poem with a peaceful but exciting outcome a pretty picture to work with I could see the ibis flying around the maidens nice imagery created Cheers Chris
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much, Chris :) I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem. Cheers.
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Comment from lyenochka
I'm looking at that red bird and it's not a heron. Herons have straight beaks. I think that's a South American scarlet ibis. I really loved the middle part of the poem: "swept up by silver moonlight
onto wishful sky
where creatures of the night sing
a sweet symphony"
That really describes a beautiful, fantasy scenery.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I'm looking at that red bird and it's not a heron. Herons have straight beaks. I think that's a South American scarlet ibis. I really loved the middle part of the poem: "swept up by silver moonlight
onto wishful sky
where creatures of the night sing
a sweet symphony"
That really describes a beautiful, fantasy scenery.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Helen. Erica told me it's an scarlet ibis and I changed it.
Thank you very much, Helen :) I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Janetsue
You are presenting a series of very beautiful images in this posting. The dreamy mood of the poem goes well with the accompanying picture that accents the message. It is an interesting form and I liked learning about it from your notes. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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You are presenting a series of very beautiful images in this posting. The dreamy mood of the poem goes well with the accompanying picture that accents the message. It is an interesting form and I liked learning about it from your notes. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Gloria ....
This truly is dreamy, and see exotic birds flying in the silver moonlight is a dreamland that one might want to visit for a while.
Much enjoyed this Choka, and many thanks for sharing. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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This truly is dreamy, and see exotic birds flying in the silver moonlight is a dreamland that one might want to visit for a while.
Much enjoyed this Choka, and many thanks for sharing. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Leann DS
I love this poem! The syllable count is great and I think it flows very well from line to line. The topic is unique and interesting. Very creative! Love it. Have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I love this poem! The syllable count is great and I think it flows very well from line to line. The topic is unique and interesting. Very creative! Love it. Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much, Leann :) I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem. Thank you very much for the six stars!!
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Comment from Erika Seshadri
This is so pretty. It transported me to another world where girls swim in moonlight and hang out with exotic birds, which sounds perfect to me.
I don't know if it really matters or if you care at all, but the bird in the picture is an ibis. Specifically a scarlet ibis. I feel like the poem would be equally as lovely if you decided to change the bird name to go with the picture. I'm a wildlife biologist, so I feel required to say something about it. Even if no one cares, lol.
Have a great night.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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This is so pretty. It transported me to another world where girls swim in moonlight and hang out with exotic birds, which sounds perfect to me.
I don't know if it really matters or if you care at all, but the bird in the picture is an ibis. Specifically a scarlet ibis. I feel like the poem would be equally as lovely if you decided to change the bird name to go with the picture. I'm a wildlife biologist, so I feel required to say something about it. Even if no one cares, lol.
Have a great night.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Erika, thank you very much for the heads-up ..I changed it to scarlet ibis.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation, Gypsy.
-A well written poem
with effective imagery
and a good topic.
-I like how it is in two
parts; the little red heron
is lured by the moonlight
to sing, then the maiden is
lulled to sleep by the song
"to dream of faraway places."
-Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Gypsy.
-A well written poem
with effective imagery
and a good topic.
-I like how it is in two
parts; the little red heron
is lured by the moonlight
to sing, then the maiden is
lulled to sleep by the song
"to dream of faraway places."
-Well done.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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You are very welcome, Gypsy.
