Surprise!
80 words short fiction.30 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! That IS the biggest surprise! Brilliantly told as we hardly would have been expecting a thief to be caught by another thief. This definitely deserved to win. Congratulations!!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Lol! That IS the biggest surprise! Brilliantly told as we hardly would have been expecting a thief to be caught by another thief. This definitely deserved to win. Congratulations!!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for these glittering message of congratulations. I loved it.
Comment from Kyler Johns
Love it! It gave me a fright at first and I was pretty sure that he was caught by the owner or at least, something that is not-human. I totally enjoyed the plot twist.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Love it! It gave me a fright at first and I was pretty sure that he was caught by the owner or at least, something that is not-human. I totally enjoyed the plot twist.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much again.
Comment from Janetsue
I just saw this posted. I would give it a six but there are none of them are left. However, I did vote for your entry so I am very happy to know you are the contest winner. It is a brilliant piece of writing!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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I just saw this posted. I would give it a six but there are none of them are left. However, I did vote for your entry so I am very happy to know you are the contest winner. It is a brilliant piece of writing!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thanks for the thought .That is more important.
Comment from Tpa
A good twist to the story I found funny and entertaining. Flash fiction is often a difficult manner for completing a story, but you did it so well. A most enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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A good twist to the story I found funny and entertaining. Flash fiction is often a difficult manner for completing a story, but you did it so well. A most enjoyable read.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much .
Comment from Susan Larson
What a delightful little surprise. I love how you developed this story with so much dialogue. And it leaves it up to the reader's imagination what will happen next. No surprise that you won the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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What a delightful little surprise. I love how you developed this story with so much dialogue. And it leaves it up to the reader's imagination what will happen next. No surprise that you won the contest!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Oh, haha...I laughed out loud spontaneously when I read the ending. This is very good as a surprise. I had no idea, what was going to happen, and who the voice was, with the hand on his shoulder, going to be. An excellent suspense flash fiction story! The artwork is very enticing...it drew me in to read what was going to be the surprise. Thank you for this wonderful way to start my day!
Have a good morning,
Jesse
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Oh, haha...I laughed out loud spontaneously when I read the ending. This is very good as a surprise. I had no idea, what was going to happen, and who the voice was, with the hand on his shoulder, going to be. An excellent suspense flash fiction story! The artwork is very enticing...it drew me in to read what was going to be the surprise. Thank you for this wonderful way to start my day!
Have a good morning,
Jesse
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much I am glad I was able to give a few light hearted moments to you .
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You are very welcome.
Have a nice day,
Jesse
Comment from damommy
Congratulations on your win! It was well deserved. I had no idea where the story was going, and the ending was a total surprise. I wonder if they split the loot. hahahaha
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Congratulations on your win! It was well deserved. I had no idea where the story was going, and the ending was a total surprise. I wonder if they split the loot. hahahaha
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant! Not surprised this won a contest on the theme of surprise! You managed to tell a suspenseful story with a stunning twist. Thanks for repromoting this!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Brilliant! Not surprised this won a contest on the theme of surprise! You managed to tell a suspenseful story with a stunning twist. Thanks for repromoting this!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much.I am glad you enjoyed this story .
Comment from Lisa Marcelina
This put a smile on my face. Writing a story in less than 100 words takes great skill. I thought you captured the prompt very well and the story was nicely written.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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This put a smile on my face. Writing a story in less than 100 words takes great skill. I thought you captured the prompt very well and the story was nicely written.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much
Comment from Eunice Amero
Now that is something else. Did the thief really find another thief in the same house he was in? That's funny but sad because there are so man thieves and robbers in our world. Everything has to be locked up. Protected and look after or you can lose everything. I wonder sometimes what's wrong with people. You did a good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Now that is something else. Did the thief really find another thief in the same house he was in? That's funny but sad because there are so man thieves and robbers in our world. Everything has to be locked up. Protected and look after or you can lose everything. I wonder sometimes what's wrong with people. You did a good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for this honour .I wish I had more words to write..
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You are more than welcome. Take care and you did a great job.