One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Jean Lutz1
Layered and lovely. This not only paints the pictures it speaks to the senses. The color scheme somber. Even in leaving, she is leaving a part of herself to others. Did she spend time on the streets in the rain. So much to ponder.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Layered and lovely. This not only paints the pictures it speaks to the senses. The color scheme somber. Even in leaving, she is leaving a part of herself to others. Did she spend time on the streets in the rain. So much to ponder.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
I see you have not lost your knack for writing words of wisdom...You have captured in words what so many others struggle to express. This reminds me of something I wrote a while back called "In A Good Will Box"..Thanks for sharing this..Think it just might get my fingers dancing again on my keyboard of imagination...
TK
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I see you have not lost your knack for writing words of wisdom...You have captured in words what so many others struggle to express. This reminds me of something I wrote a while back called "In A Good Will Box"..Thanks for sharing this..Think it just might get my fingers dancing again on my keyboard of imagination...
TK
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I love your pen name ;) looking forward to your writing.
Thank you very much for the six stars and exceptional review.
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Comment from rspoet
Hello Gypsy.
Whether haiku or senyru, this is a marvelous 5-7-5 form
with wonderful imagery and grammatical connection.
The satori is splendid and lets the words expand outward.
Nice use of multiple senses.
You've touched all the bases on this one.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Hello Gypsy.
Whether haiku or senyru, this is a marvelous 5-7-5 form
with wonderful imagery and grammatical connection.
The satori is splendid and lets the words expand outward.
Nice use of multiple senses.
You've touched all the bases on this one.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Hello, Robert,
It's a Humanity haiku with a kigo, Senryu doesn't have a Kigo.
Thank you very much for the six stars and exceptional review. It's always good to hear from you ;)
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Comment from Senyai
Hi Gypsy,
If I had a six, it would be yours! When a haiku is done right, it is so so powerful ...
and this one is done right. Made me almost cry, as you captured such a feeling of sorrow in the reality of death.
The photo to accompany is striking and enhances that mood of sadness ... winter rain.
Wish I had saved a gold star for you :-(
Always,
Senyai
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Hi Gypsy,
If I had a six, it would be yours! When a haiku is done right, it is so so powerful ...
and this one is done right. Made me almost cry, as you captured such a feeling of sorrow in the reality of death.
The photo to accompany is striking and enhances that mood of sadness ... winter rain.
Wish I had saved a gold star for you :-(
Always,
Senyai
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Senyai, Thank you very much for your Excellent review. I appreciate you taking the time to read my haiku. You got the meaning right.
Gypsy hugs
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Have a wonderful Sunday, Gypsy ❤️
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Last Goodwill Boxes', is sort, succinct and more than a little heart-wrenching. It was a pleasure to read and review this talented poet's work.
I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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'Last Goodwill Boxes', is sort, succinct and more than a little heart-wrenching. It was a pleasure to read and review this talented poet's work.
I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your Excellent review. I appreciate you taking the time to read my haiku. You got the meaning right.
Gypsy hugs
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Gypsy, you're very welcome. I'm delighted to know I got the meaning right.
Hugs,
the Duchess
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These are sad words as a period of grief brings the winter rain after this forced donation, few words speaking volumes here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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These are sad words as a period of grief brings the winter rain after this forced donation, few words speaking volumes here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
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Comment from kahpot
A very sad image that these words give, though never the final goodbye but the thought of a loved ones smile/ sunshine that is clouded/gone, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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A very sad image that these words give, though never the final goodbye but the thought of a loved ones smile/ sunshine that is clouded/gone, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
I find this skillfully-written, beautiful poem to be very moving in the message it implies. After losing a loved one, one way to find comfort is to use what she left behind to help someone in need.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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I find this skillfully-written, beautiful poem to be very moving in the message it implies. After losing a loved one, one way to find comfort is to use what she left behind to help someone in need.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
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Comment from Ginnygray
Gypsy, I hope that you have made a book or booklet of these haiku. This one is somber because it mentions a loss of a Mother. Her clothes in boxes to give away to the good will getting a winter rain drenching!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Gypsy, I hope that you have made a book or booklet of these haiku. This one is somber because it mentions a loss of a Mother. Her clothes in boxes to give away to the good will getting a winter rain drenching!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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You got the meaning of my haiku right...
Thank you very much for your review and feedback. I appreciate your time and effort.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Boogienights
This is heartbreaking, I know because I've been through it. Its hard to let go of memories that are contained in possessions of those we love. Thank you for this thoughtful poem.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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This is heartbreaking, I know because I've been through it. Its hard to let go of memories that are contained in possessions of those we love. Thank you for this thoughtful poem.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback. I appreciate your time and effort.
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