There Goes The Squirrel
A short story.14 total reviews
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Raul,
Good luck in the contest.
A lovely story with a fine moral attached.
So Often nature provides cues we can also relate to human behaviour.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Hi Raul,
Good luck in the contest.
A lovely story with a fine moral attached.
So Often nature provides cues we can also relate to human behaviour.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 17-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you! I hope I win!
Comment from palmart
Nice Poem, Raul1! You brought to front the imperfection of Jerry`s father and that when he was younger did some "monkeyshines". Unfortunately, Jerry takes the part of the squirrel and felt a bit unhappy on how the story ends. Great Writing!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Nice Poem, Raul1! You brought to front the imperfection of Jerry`s father and that when he was younger did some "monkeyshines". Unfortunately, Jerry takes the part of the squirrel and felt a bit unhappy on how the story ends. Great Writing!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you!
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You`re welcome, Raul1!
Comment from Janetsue
There's good and bad sides to a lot of situations. I can understand the father and son's feelings about the squirrel. The picture you chose, however, looks so cute! Maybe this little guy is waving goodbye to his bad behavior. :-) Best wishes in the contest, Raul!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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There's good and bad sides to a lot of situations. I can understand the father and son's feelings about the squirrel. The picture you chose, however, looks so cute! Maybe this little guy is waving goodbye to his bad behavior. :-) Best wishes in the contest, Raul!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Sanku
A good imagery of a squirrel running up the tree and all around the garden.And a lesson for the child not to be like them. well done. Though I feel a bit put out because I love those silly creatures .lol
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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A good imagery of a squirrel running up the tree and all around the garden.And a lesson for the child not to be like them. well done. Though I feel a bit put out because I love those silly creatures .lol
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from pharp
Raul,
You did an outstanding job in the penning of the amazing story with only 100 words. I love the artwork chosen.
This short story is very clear. As parents, we must teach our children; choices that are made have consequences. We can only pray that they listen.
Thanks for sharing a most enjoyable read; the very best to you in the contest.
Have a wonderful and blessed weekend.
Blessings..Portia
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Raul,
You did an outstanding job in the penning of the amazing story with only 100 words. I love the artwork chosen.
This short story is very clear. As parents, we must teach our children; choices that are made have consequences. We can only pray that they listen.
Thanks for sharing a most enjoyable read; the very best to you in the contest.
Have a wonderful and blessed weekend.
Blessings..Portia
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you! Have a great weekend to you too! You have made my day, my friend! :)
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You are welcome, looking forward to reading more, my friend.
Blessings...Portia
Comment from amada
This is a very nice and short story that kept my attention. It has elements of everyday life, the kid, the father, the small animal, and this fear that is told to us since infancy. Could be animals, people, colors, etc. Nice write.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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This is a very nice and short story that kept my attention. It has elements of everyday life, the kid, the father, the small animal, and this fear that is told to us since infancy. Could be animals, people, colors, etc. Nice write.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Writing a story in only 100 words is difficult. Here you pulled it off with an interesting and educational tale of a father teaching his son not to behave like an animal who reacts solely on instinct.
Good story.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Writing a story in only 100 words is difficult. Here you pulled it off with an interesting and educational tale of a father teaching his son not to behave like an animal who reacts solely on instinct.
Good story.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Mary
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Interesting flash story that a beg, mid and end. Does it tell something about your own childhood! Good observation. Good luck in the contest! Look forward to reading your horror stories!:)
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Interesting flash story that a beg, mid and end. Does it tell something about your own childhood! Good observation. Good luck in the contest! Look forward to reading your horror stories!:)
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
There Goes The Squirrel
by Raul1
Good entry for the
100 Word Flash Fiction contest.
Interesting write in its entirety - verse, though brief, compelling in structure . The attached notes are informative and appreciated...
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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There Goes The Squirrel
by Raul1
Good entry for the
100 Word Flash Fiction contest.
Interesting write in its entirety - verse, though brief, compelling in structure . The attached notes are informative and appreciated...
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Pj Dennison
You have clearly defined the beginning, middle, and ending which in flash fiction can be difficult. You did a good job of carrying out the theme in your story. The theme is seen throughout the story in the dialogue between father and son as well as in the story the father told. The theme is don't behave like a wild animal. Your character development is good for such a short work. The story ends with a moral. Behaving like a wild animal can create havoc in the life of others.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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You have clearly defined the beginning, middle, and ending which in flash fiction can be difficult. You did a good job of carrying out the theme in your story. The theme is seen throughout the story in the dialogue between father and son as well as in the story the father told. The theme is don't behave like a wild animal. Your character development is good for such a short work. The story ends with a moral. Behaving like a wild animal can create havoc in the life of others.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you!