Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Such A Long Journey"Musings of an old man -2021
25 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, interesting, descriptive and creative.
I enjoyed the way this author presented this journey. The poem flows
and connects well. The artwork is great and compliments both the
theme and words of this poem.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
  |
The author's words are engaging, interesting, descriptive and creative.
I enjoyed the way this author presented this journey. The poem flows
and connects well. The artwork is great and compliments both the
theme and words of this poem.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
-
Thank you for your review and comments
Comment from kiwisteveh
I approach every poem I read anticipating that the surface words are in fact a metaphor for something deeper - and indeed my own poems almost always hold inner meaning.
This time there is an obvious metaphor comparing the ascent of the mountain to the journey of life - often steep and difficult. But when you gave the mountain a feminine pronoun, I wondered too if you were referring to a courtship. If so it was brave indeed to describe your lady as worn, weathered, listing and unyielding!
I don't believe I have seen free verse from you before. A really enjoyable piece.
Steve
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
|
I approach every poem I read anticipating that the surface words are in fact a metaphor for something deeper - and indeed my own poems almost always hold inner meaning.
This time there is an obvious metaphor comparing the ascent of the mountain to the journey of life - often steep and difficult. But when you gave the mountain a feminine pronoun, I wondered too if you were referring to a courtship. If so it was brave indeed to describe your lady as worn, weathered, listing and unyielding!
I don't believe I have seen free verse from you before. A really enjoyable piece.
Steve
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
-
Steve thank you, a mixed metaphor of ones life yes, my bride and I both in our 70?s married 45 years and travelled well worn paths of struggle and bliss together. Thanks for your review and comments?
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a long poem for you. It uses the mountain and climbing it as a metaphor for dealing with the problems of aging. The land erodes, as sometimes, mrmory and strength erode. Each new sunrise brings hope.
Good answer to the picture this artwork.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
|
This is a long poem for you. It uses the mountain and climbing it as a metaphor for dealing with the problems of aging. The land erodes, as sometimes, mrmory and strength erode. Each new sunrise brings hope.
Good answer to the picture this artwork.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
-
Thank you 🙏. Yes this a metaphor of life, about a mountain yes, a wife whom I have blessed to watch show wear and tear together during our ascent of this life?s plane. Thank you for your review.
-
You're welcome, JLR
Joan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your club entry. The best part of these challenges is the reviewer gets to read some great poems and this is one of them. LOL I enjoyed the metaphors you used.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
|
I enjoyed reading your club entry. The best part of these challenges is the reviewer gets to read some great poems and this is one of them. LOL I enjoyed the metaphors you used.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
-
Barbara?thank you this kind acknowledgement, have a splendid weekend. 🙏
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This expresses in poetry what I've watched on tv on Running Wild with Bear Gryllis. He makes the guest's journey become metaphorical. It is amazing what he gets these celebrities to talk about and how much self-confidence. This poem is a great metaphor. I like your use of personification. The reader is drawn in to become enamored with the mountain. This is a profound work.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
|
This expresses in poetry what I've watched on tv on Running Wild with Bear Gryllis. He makes the guest's journey become metaphorical. It is amazing what he gets these celebrities to talk about and how much self-confidence. This poem is a great metaphor. I like your use of personification. The reader is drawn in to become enamored with the mountain. This is a profound work.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
-
Liz, thank you so very much, what is a our lives but a collection of opportunities for connections with our plant and perhaps one another in remarkable ways.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Janet, I really liked the way you personalised the mountain as beiing the attraction to s woman. your poem is beautifully written and the imagery is outstanding. I loved it. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
|
Hi Janet, I really liked the way you personalised the mountain as beiing the attraction to s woman. your poem is beautifully written and the imagery is outstanding. I loved it. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
-
Thank you so very much!
Comment from Begin Again
What a beautiful poem... a lifelong quest .. the mountain like the love of a woman drawing him closer and closer until the moment he will start his ascent. And comparing the attributes to his own life. Marvelous. Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
|
What a beautiful poem... a lifelong quest .. the mountain like the love of a woman drawing him closer and closer until the moment he will start his ascent. And comparing the attributes to his own life. Marvelous. Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
-
carol, thank you so much 🙏
Comment from Sally Law
A beautiful prompt for a poem. A mountain like this demands a poetic offering, doesn't it? I'm away writing other things at present. I doubt I'd do better with it though. A splendid offering. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
|
A beautiful prompt for a poem. A mountain like this demands a poetic offering, doesn't it? I'm away writing other things at present. I doubt I'd do better with it though. A splendid offering. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
-
Thank you have a blessed weekend!
Comment from Kit Nongkhlaw
The photograph speaks it all. It is so captivating and mesmerizing. So also the words flow easily to tell about this journey called life. Such a long journey begins and ends with the 'morrow's sunrise. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
|
The photograph speaks it all. It is so captivating and mesmerizing. So also the words flow easily to tell about this journey called life. Such a long journey begins and ends with the 'morrow's sunrise. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
-
Thank you very much Kitbok🎶🎶
Comment from Possummagic
You write beautifully, and from the heart. I love your descriptive phrases and how, even without the illustration, I have a clear picture in my mind of the scene and the journey before you. Quite lovely.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
|
You write beautifully, and from the heart. I love your descriptive phrases and how, even without the illustration, I have a clear picture in my mind of the scene and the journey before you. Quite lovely.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
-
Thank you for such kind words, I appreciate every one, have a great weekend.🙏