Shades of Light
Free Verse26 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
A beautiful free write, similar in form to a reversed Nonet. I like the look of this and the theme. So lovely, dear Melissa. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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A beautiful free write, similar in form to a reversed Nonet. I like the look of this and the theme. So lovely, dear Melissa. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Hello Sally. Thank you very much. My intent was to write a Nonet for the contest, but this took on a life of its own. LOL. :)
Melissa
Comment from zanya
It's a great title - light and darkness- and a moment captured beneath the 'magnolia tree' in sunlight's light and shade -like life itself times of joy and sorrow
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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It's a great title - light and darkness- and a moment captured beneath the 'magnolia tree' in sunlight's light and shade -like life itself times of joy and sorrow
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Hello Zanya. Thank you for your wonderful review!! :)
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
This is lovely Melissa! Both the words and presentation work well together to paint a picture of life from differet viewpoints. Just a little shifting and we gain a whole new perspective - from darkess into light. And I love the use of a magnolia tree to filter the light. Good job on this unique free verse.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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This is lovely Melissa! Both the words and presentation work well together to paint a picture of life from differet viewpoints. Just a little shifting and we gain a whole new perspective - from darkess into light. And I love the use of a magnolia tree to filter the light. Good job on this unique free verse.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Hello June. Thank you for your lovely words and review. I so appreciate the in depth thoughts you shared. You are right? all we need to do is shift a little. :)
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
What an elegant shape you have created with this concrete free verse. It reminds me of Mount Fuji in Japan. This is a beautiful description of the effects of sunlight and shadow on this old magnolia tree.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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What an elegant shape you have created with this concrete free verse. It reminds me of Mount Fuji in Japan. This is a beautiful description of the effects of sunlight and shadow on this old magnolia tree.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Hello Jim. Thank you, my friend. I began this with the thought of writing a Nonet, but it had a life of its own. LOL. :)
Melissa
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I did think at first it was a reverse nonet, until I started counting.
Comment from royowen
This is a very disguised free verse, the fact that you've shaped it so nicely in an upside stylised poem, is really interesting. I like the way you've also shaped the narrative to write the dance of shade and light. Well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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This is a very disguised free verse, the fact that you've shaped it so nicely in an upside stylised poem, is really interesting. I like the way you've also shaped the narrative to write the dance of shade and light. Well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you Roy. It is summertime here and the trees offer the shade and I love to watch the dappled sunlight underneath? it seems so playful. Thanks again.
Melissa
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Me too
Comment from Susan Newell
I like everything about this poem - the style, the subject matter, the imagery, and most of all that you make an effort to stand in the light. I see the whole thing as a metaphor for good and evil, and the divine light of God.
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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I like everything about this poem - the style, the subject matter, the imagery, and most of all that you make an effort to stand in the light. I see the whole thing as a metaphor for good and evil, and the divine light of God.
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Hello Susan. I appreciate your comments? and yes, it is a metaphor for walking in the light that He gives. Thank you.
Melissa
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You are welcome.
