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Comment from Gloria ....
As always, top-notch writing from your quarter. You give a thorough account of the landscape including the political and personal. Your character's dynamics shine through brilliantly even in and maybe especially because of deftly woven in undertones like the ... cool look in response to the touch.
Fine story telling here, Jim and definitely exceptional. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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As always, top-notch writing from your quarter. You give a thorough account of the landscape including the political and personal. Your character's dynamics shine through brilliantly even in and maybe especially because of deftly woven in undertones like the ... cool look in response to the touch.
Fine story telling here, Jim and definitely exceptional. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Many thanks indeed for these encouraging remarks as well as for the six star grading. Only two more posts in this book and then we proceed to book 3.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Really a very good chapter. It makes me wonder if Julia knows about the letter Steinhauser was carrying with him from Germany. Tom's description of the capture of the Germans was amusing. Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Really a very good chapter. It makes me wonder if Julia knows about the letter Steinhauser was carrying with him from Germany. Tom's description of the capture of the Germans was amusing. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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That would point to collusion between Germany and those living in Jericho. What a can of worms that would be. Many thanks for the review. Z
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image for your story,
and a good chapter.
-I didn't remember Tommy being
a part of the war effort because
of the farm and the mill.
-Allen seemed to like his
recounting of the event that
happened with the German plane.
-He is a good story teller and adds
local flavor to it.
-It is a sad situation regarding the mill,
and Tommy is obviously impacted by it.
-You show how people had their
lives and livelihoods changed or
taken away because of the war.
-I assume Tom J. never married
Anneliese so why would Julia make
the remark of having a cousin, unless
Anneliese was pregnant.
-This is getting more intriguing!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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-A good image for your story,
and a good chapter.
-I didn't remember Tommy being
a part of the war effort because
of the farm and the mill.
-Allen seemed to like his
recounting of the event that
happened with the German plane.
-He is a good story teller and adds
local flavor to it.
-It is a sad situation regarding the mill,
and Tommy is obviously impacted by it.
-You show how people had their
lives and livelihoods changed or
taken away because of the war.
-I assume Tom J. never married
Anneliese so why would Julia make
the remark of having a cousin, unless
Anneliese was pregnant.
-This is getting more intriguing!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Many thanks for the review. Tommy was turned down for service in WWI and now he is a farmer as well as a miller and too old for military service he would be turned away again, but the home guard was specifically designed as a part time outfit for those who had been rejected for military service full time. This was why it was held in low esteem by the regulars.
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You are welcome and thanks for explaining that.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
PANTYGYNT:
It would seem that Peter Allen overplayed his hand this time - even the best of manipulative investigators mess up now and then. Girls as bright as Julia are often intentionally quiet so they can take everything in and digest it. This should be very interesting.
Rdfrdmomo2
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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PANTYGYNT:
It would seem that Peter Allen overplayed his hand this time - even the best of manipulative investigators mess up now and then. Girls as bright as Julia are often intentionally quiet so they can take everything in and digest it. This should be very interesting.
Rdfrdmomo2
Comment Written 18-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021
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Thank you for this review. Sometimes, not getting the answer you don't want is almost as good as getting the answer you want , an Allen is going to have to run with that on this occasion.
Comment from Ulla
No sixes in my arsenal, Jim, no pun intended. But this was a great chapter. It was fun and informative. So young Julia picked up on the name. An interesting aspect and, yet again, a new twist to the story. So now what? Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2021
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No sixes in my arsenal, Jim, no pun intended. But this was a great chapter. It was fun and informative. So young Julia picked up on the name. An interesting aspect and, yet again, a new twist to the story. So now what? Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2021
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You will have to wait till Sunday or perhaps next Wednesday to find the answer to that, and even then it may not be enough. We then move on to Book3 where some of the unanswered questions wil be dealt with.
Many thanks for the review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great chapter Jim, this is getting interesting trying to gauge what Heather's reaction will be, and with Julia bringing out the Miss Marple side of her character. Enjoying it.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2021
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Great chapter Jim, this is getting interesting trying to gauge what Heather's reaction will be, and with Julia bringing out the Miss Marple side of her character. Enjoying it.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 17-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2021
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Only two more posts left for this novel then on to book3. Many thanks for this kind review.
Comment from Ginnygray
Interesting story of a downed German plane with two jerries escaped and two dead. The Home Guard finds them with one, Don Davies almost getting his head blown off when one of the jerries shot at him. Pale and giving some thought at what could have happened let him allow someone else to drive back. The sadness when the owner of the mill gives the unhappy condition of the mill making him feel as though he had lost his purpose in life. Then the story turns to Anneliese and if she was pregnant.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Interesting story of a downed German plane with two jerries escaped and two dead. The Home Guard finds them with one, Don Davies almost getting his head blown off when one of the jerries shot at him. Pale and giving some thought at what could have happened let him allow someone else to drive back. The sadness when the owner of the mill gives the unhappy condition of the mill making him feel as though he had lost his purpose in life. Then the story turns to Anneliese and if she was pregnant.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you for this most supportive review. Much appreciated
Comment from JudyE
Again, the writing continues to hold the reader's attention. What will Allen do now, I wonder?
A few thoughts:
'Carry on Sergeant Bache' says the colonel, so up I goes to the stone floor, but there bain't no one there. "Up you goes then, Private Davies," I says to Don and he climbs up into the garners. - I would have thought both dialogues should be in double quotes.
"Who fired that shot?" Calls out Sir Harry. - lower case for 'calls..'
"Come out with your hands up." He calls. - lower case for 'he'
"Aye," says Don Davies from above our heads. "Andy ock,'andy ock." He says that were German for hands up like. - lower case for 'he'
When he began to tell of the disasters that had befallen the mill, all the energy seemed to have left him. - I might have said '.. all the energy seemed to leave him'.
The underlying, bubbling humour that had typified the story of the captured Germans, had vanished. - delete comma
In a sense he had betrayed his interest in mentioning it, which was why he had left it until the end. - comma after 'sense'
'Yes, dear.' - should this end with a question mark?
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Again, the writing continues to hold the reader's attention. What will Allen do now, I wonder?
A few thoughts:
'Carry on Sergeant Bache' says the colonel, so up I goes to the stone floor, but there bain't no one there. "Up you goes then, Private Davies," I says to Don and he climbs up into the garners. - I would have thought both dialogues should be in double quotes.
"Who fired that shot?" Calls out Sir Harry. - lower case for 'calls..'
"Come out with your hands up." He calls. - lower case for 'he'
"Aye," says Don Davies from above our heads. "Andy ock,'andy ock." He says that were German for hands up like. - lower case for 'he'
When he began to tell of the disasters that had befallen the mill, all the energy seemed to have left him. - I might have said '.. all the energy seemed to leave him'.
The underlying, bubbling humour that had typified the story of the captured Germans, had vanished. - delete comma
In a sense he had betrayed his interest in mentioning it, which was why he had left it until the end. - comma after 'sense'
'Yes, dear.' - should this end with a question mark?
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for this detailed editing. The points you raise have been attended to. Only two more chapters to go, then on to Book 3.
Comment from elchupakabra
I only have one small note to offer in the way of dialogue, particularly where the character is using slang/accents - less is more.
Oh aye, that were quite funny (peculiar/hysterical?). None of us heard her come in, musta' been late on in the night and with dead engines too.
You nail it later on, using 'wunna' but it opened on sort of a proper monologue so just a few minor tweaks, otherwise, I have nothing to add and even the above is only marginal. Keep up the excellent work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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I only have one small note to offer in the way of dialogue, particularly where the character is using slang/accents - less is more.
Oh aye, that were quite funny (peculiar/hysterical?). None of us heard her come in, musta' been late on in the night and with dead engines too.
You nail it later on, using 'wunna' but it opened on sort of a proper monologue so just a few minor tweaks, otherwise, I have nothing to add and even the above is only marginal. Keep up the excellent work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. In the matter of dialogue you appear to be in the minority here.
Comment from estory
I think you had a colorful telling of that moment when the two German crew of the Dornier get captured in the 'Battle of Cleeborough.' It's all done in this colloquial, local language too, which gives it even more personality. We get this sense of the cobbled together nature of some of these country episodes of the war. But also this mysterious story of Annaliese Steinhauser, who continues to weave in and out of the tale, And her mysterious relationship with Tom Joliffe. estory
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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I think you had a colorful telling of that moment when the two German crew of the Dornier get captured in the 'Battle of Cleeborough.' It's all done in this colloquial, local language too, which gives it even more personality. We get this sense of the cobbled together nature of some of these country episodes of the war. But also this mysterious story of Annaliese Steinhauser, who continues to weave in and out of the tale, And her mysterious relationship with Tom Joliffe. estory
Comment Written 17-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Many thanks for your continued reviewing only two more chapters to go in this book then on to Book 3.