Lady with a Briefcase
A mysterious woman...32 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
I loved it! I wish I had a six. Your description of the mysterious lady with a briefcase is stunning. Excellent attention to detail. Tears welled my eyes as I was reading about her. Who knows why she was this way - love gone wrong, relations with her family - but we'll never know. She will always remain an enigma.
I loved it. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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I loved it! I wish I had a six. Your description of the mysterious lady with a briefcase is stunning. Excellent attention to detail. Tears welled my eyes as I was reading about her. Who knows why she was this way - love gone wrong, relations with her family - but we'll never know. She will always remain an enigma.
I loved it. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the great support to my work!
Comment from Anne Johnston
You have told your story well. Great description of this mysterious lady. Now you leave us all thinking about her, and wondering just who she was and what was in the briefcase. Very well done.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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You have told your story well. Great description of this mysterious lady. Now you leave us all thinking about her, and wondering just who she was and what was in the briefcase. Very well done.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you for reading my sgirt story, Anne.
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You are welcome
Comment from lancellot
Ah, It is a story of people watching and then letting our imagination create all sorts of intrigue and adventure. Anything to relieve the boredom that real life has cast upon us.
Good work, it also remind us, that even if we don't know. Everyone has a tale.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Ah, It is a story of people watching and then letting our imagination create all sorts of intrigue and adventure. Anything to relieve the boredom that real life has cast upon us.
Good work, it also remind us, that even if we don't know. Everyone has a tale.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments.
Comment from jenintorre
I enjoyed reading your story. It is very intriguing. What a pity that you never found out more about her. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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I enjoyed reading your story. It is very intriguing. What a pity that you never found out more about her. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your reading this story.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, you definitely have me watching and waiting to know more. I don't believe you could have hired a top marketing firm to have created anymore interest. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Well, you definitely have me watching and waiting to know more. I don't believe you could have hired a top marketing firm to have created anymore interest. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your great comments, Ric.
Comment from robyn corum
Amada,
I can absolutely see how this mysterious woman's memory would linger around, leaving mysterious questions in a young person's head. She does sound so unusual! *smile*
But I'm not sure you've actually given us a 'story', though - it's seems you've really only given us a lead-in to one to me. You have got the reader very intrigued with the character, for sure. And now, if you went just a wee bit forward, it would work.
For example, if you said that you stumbled on a newspaper years later with her picture on the front page. Shocked, you read the headline and the main article to your mom and it revealed that.....
Of course, that would remove it from the factual setting and take it into the fictional, but it would take the piece into a 'story' - a piece that has a beginning, middle (climax), and satisfying conclusion.
Just a few thoughts, and certainly yours to use or reject. Thanks! Still worthy of a five.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Amada,
I can absolutely see how this mysterious woman's memory would linger around, leaving mysterious questions in a young person's head. She does sound so unusual! *smile*
But I'm not sure you've actually given us a 'story', though - it's seems you've really only given us a lead-in to one to me. You have got the reader very intrigued with the character, for sure. And now, if you went just a wee bit forward, it would work.
For example, if you said that you stumbled on a newspaper years later with her picture on the front page. Shocked, you read the headline and the main article to your mom and it revealed that.....
Of course, that would remove it from the factual setting and take it into the fictional, but it would take the piece into a 'story' - a piece that has a beginning, middle (climax), and satisfying conclusion.
Just a few thoughts, and certainly yours to use or reject. Thanks! Still worthy of a five.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Hi Robin, your imagination is boundless...I couldn't even start...
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I think you can. I know you can.
Comment from estory
What I liked about this little story is that it delves into this sense of the world that I too am fascinated with: this sense of mystery of the people that surround us. We have this image of them, walking silently with their briefcases, and we can only guess at what they are doing and where they came from and where they are going. It is a great image of mystery and suspense and it speaks to the fact that we really don't know much about the people we sometimes share apartment buildings with. estory
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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What I liked about this little story is that it delves into this sense of the world that I too am fascinated with: this sense of mystery of the people that surround us. We have this image of them, walking silently with their briefcases, and we can only guess at what they are doing and where they came from and where they are going. It is a great image of mystery and suspense and it speaks to the fact that we really don't know much about the people we sometimes share apartment buildings with. estory
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Hi estory, thank you for the deep and fascinating study...I am thinking now...I am a quiet person as well, maybe there could be some little story about me as well..Ha! I love your comments.
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I wrote a story last year with a similiar theme. It's called Tenants and it is the first story in my collection Intersections in my Port. estory
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Hu dear author, I looked in your portfolio and I didn't find it...I checked up to 2019, Rereading your message it was posted in 2020, Could you tell me what month?
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Just look in the book Intersections in my portfolio. It's in there. estory
Comment from humpwhistle
Neat--the way you managed to wait to the end to introduce yourself--despite this being a story about your life. We are, certainly, that which we perceive.
Right now, this is posted as 'fiction'. Based on the contest rules, you may wish to change it to ;non-fiction'.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Neat--the way you managed to wait to the end to introduce yourself--despite this being a story about your life. We are, certainly, that which we perceive.
Right now, this is posted as 'fiction'. Based on the contest rules, you may wish to change it to ;non-fiction'.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thabk you so much, Lee.
Comment from tfawcus
Such clockwork consistency and automaton type of behaviour would be sure to leave an indelible memory on an impressionable young mind. You certainly leave us wondering about this strange lady!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Such clockwork consistency and automaton type of behaviour would be sure to leave an indelible memory on an impressionable young mind. You certainly leave us wondering about this strange lady!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for reading my story and for your gracious comments.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Intriguing! Vivid description and excellent narration--amusing to construe such outlandish possibilities--I can relate--I'd feared (with legitimate reason) that my absentee lawyer had been "dumpstered." I hope you write more about this lady!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Intriguing! Vivid description and excellent narration--amusing to construe such outlandish possibilities--I can relate--I'd feared (with legitimate reason) that my absentee lawyer had been "dumpstered." I hope you write more about this lady!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for reading this story, Elizabeth.