Letting Go
A Mother and Daughter Moment19 total reviews
Comment from writer723
This is a cute and sweet little story. I sensed a sadness in Mandy at the end when she spoke of her father leaving. Your words expressed so much emotion being experienced by the child. She wanted her mother to ask her to stay, even though Mandy would only be gone for two days. This scenario suggests the child wishes her mother would've asked her father to stay as well. You've poignantly shared how a child understands more than we realize sometimes. Great job!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021
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This is a cute and sweet little story. I sensed a sadness in Mandy at the end when she spoke of her father leaving. Your words expressed so much emotion being experienced by the child. She wanted her mother to ask her to stay, even though Mandy would only be gone for two days. This scenario suggests the child wishes her mother would've asked her father to stay as well. You've poignantly shared how a child understands more than we realize sometimes. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021
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Dear reviewer... I thank you so much for taking the time to read, understand and review my contest entry. I appreciate it very much. Have a great day!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aw, that was such a sad ending, it suddenly came together with that one line... I'm not Daddy. I'll be back! Those words say it all. Too many children suffer when one parent leaves, many believing it's their fault. Well done, you wrote this simply but with a powerful punch. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021
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Aw, that was such a sad ending, it suddenly came together with that one line... I'm not Daddy. I'll be back! Those words say it all. Too many children suffer when one parent leaves, many believing it's their fault. Well done, you wrote this simply but with a powerful punch. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021
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Thank you, my friend. Of course, I always value your reviews and understanding of what I write. Thank you so much for your kindness. Have a great day!
Comment from lyenochka
I like the list of very important things from Mandy's perspective. The speechless goodbye is especially moving as she is mentally reassuring her mother of her sure return. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021
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I like the list of very important things from Mandy's perspective. The speechless goodbye is especially moving as she is mentally reassuring her mother of her sure return. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021
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Thanks for your kind review and suggestions, Helen. Have a great day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write here as this girl is loyal and different to those she has known, a sad and honest write that touched my heart, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021
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A poignant write here as this girl is loyal and different to those she has known, a sad and honest write that touched my heart, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021
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Thanks for your kind review and suggestions, Dolly. Have a great day!
Comment from Anne Johnston
Well done in this story told in so few words. How big a step this is for the little girl to leave her mother and visit grandma for a couple of days, assuring her mother that she will return.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Well done in this story told in so few words. How big a step this is for the little girl to leave her mother and visit grandma for a couple of days, assuring her mother that she will return.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Yes, those first moments are always tough ones for little ones when their life has made a drastic change... it's tough on adults and almost impossible for children. Thank you.
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You are welcome
Comment from L. Kalere
Based on personal experience you captured the heart and soul of this little girl, who is so attached to her mother. You had two surprises, which made the story all the better. Poor grandma was the one taking her away from her mother, and the breathtaking final quote. Wow, that wasn't expected. Well done. A great entry for the contest.
Linda
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Based on personal experience you captured the heart and soul of this little girl, who is so attached to her mother. You had two surprises, which made the story all the better. Poor grandma was the one taking her away from her mother, and the breathtaking final quote. Wow, that wasn't expected. Well done. A great entry for the contest.
Linda
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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I thank you very much for picking up on the emotions within the story. A few words to say a lot. Appreciate your kind review. Have a great day!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
What a shocker--stunning punchline--hadn't seen that coming. Fine work in a flash--masterful set-up for the kicker. I expect to see this one in the winners' circle!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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What a shocker--stunning punchline--hadn't seen that coming. Fine work in a flash--masterful set-up for the kicker. I expect to see this one in the winners' circle!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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I think I too shall Croak.... this wordy author struggles to write in clipped words and sentences. LOL Thanks for the kind review and especially the thoughtful remarks.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a sad depiction of a little girl being shuffled between mom and dad after a divorce. You did a great job with your poignant contest entry, Mystery Author. Though sad, I enjoyed reading it. I like the way you formatted the lines and the perfect picture. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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What a sad depiction of a little girl being shuffled between mom and dad after a divorce. You did a great job with your poignant contest entry, Mystery Author. Though sad, I enjoyed reading it. I like the way you formatted the lines and the perfect picture. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Yes, I think the children are the losers regardless of the outcome of a divorce. There family connection is broken and its hard to know how to deal with it as an adult let alone a child. Thank you so much.
Comment from Alaskastory
"Letting Go" is a sweet story told in very few words. It beautifully touches on a time in a little girl's life and offers her things to cling to lovingly for strength. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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"Letting Go" is a sweet story told in very few words. It beautifully touches on a time in a little girl's life and offers her things to cling to lovingly for strength. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I sincerely appreciate that you took the time to read and comment. Have a great day!
Comment from Jane Graille
You have conveyed so much depth with this short fiction. You neatly written dynamics of Mandy and her mother's shared history, present and their fears. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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You have conveyed so much depth with this short fiction. You neatly written dynamics of Mandy and her mother's shared history, present and their fears. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for understanding the emotions involved. It's difficult to tell a story in so few words. I appreciate your review. Have a great day!
