Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

What a beautiful story conveyed to us. You don't find many with a love like that. It's sad when one spouse dies too young, leaving the other alone to raise children and carry on whether they want to or not. God bless. Good luck with the contest.
Patty

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021

Thanks for the insightful review cheers.

Comment from zanya

Exceptional

This is a story that gets the reader's attention from the beginning, in a setting where life seems to be moving along, on an even keel, so to speak, yet the reader can detect that all is not quite what it seems

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021

Thanks for the insightful review and sparkly star, I appreciate you, cheers.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it, though it is poignant. I had a feeling that it would end the way it did. Your words are well chosen and create great imagery. The fact that the children were playing while mom was speaking to Tom is so believable. I was engaged from start to finish. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021

Thanks for the encouraging review Jan, cheers.

Comment from BeckyRae

Good

You need to proofread your work. First of all, Chuck is a name and should be capitalized. "Mom came by last week, she is looking well" lacks the quotation marks. It is an interesting story. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2021

Thanks for the review.