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Renga Two

Viewing comments for Chapter 58 "Remembrance of You"
multi-author book number two

4 total reviews 
Comment from Mark Schardine
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remembrance of you faded --
grief lingers ... uninvited

Taking leave of another person can cause terrible stress, and when the parting took place on unfair or unhappy terms, the grief comes with pain.

 Comment Written 25-May-2021


reply by the author on 25-May-2021
    Thank you, Mark :)
Comment from padumachitta
Exceptional
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Hello
ah, yes,,,
this is a good discription of the process of loss...the waves of grief, those moments that smack us upside the head...

I send you a cyber hello, and hope you have a quiet and calm sunday.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021


reply by the author on 23-May-2021
    I'm so glad to hear from you. I'm very sick, could you pray for me? I have colitis infection.

    Thank you very much for the exceptional review and kind words and six stars. May you have a wonderful day.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by padumachitta on 23-May-2021
    Oh my dear.
    Of course I will light a candle aand meditate, I will chant the White Tara mantra for your healing!

    I hope you?re being looked after well.

    Thinking of you
    padumachitta
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
    Thank you, padumachitta, I appreciate it. My daughter is looking after me.

    gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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I like the feeling of your renga. That the memories are fading and yet somehow deep below the conscious, the pain of the relationship still lingers.

Reminisce is a verb so I think you might consider a noun like "Remembrance"

 Comment Written 22-May-2021


reply by the author on 22-May-2021
    Thank you very much, Helen. I corrected that.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Bill Schott
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These two lines of the continuing renga, Reminisce of You, add to the idea that the returning memories of a former relationship are not appreciated.

 Comment Written 22-May-2021


reply by the author on 22-May-2021
    Thank you very much, Bill.