Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

this is a beautifully written spring haiku. Sun peeks through crowded woodland screen. Bluebells bask. Nice photo to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thank you so much, Joanne :)

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This spring haiku is aptly described in your eleven-syllable poem. The picture you used is fully suggested with your words and this forest-secreted scene is nicely realized.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thank you, Bill :)

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Spring Haiku
by Debra White

Great spring haiku, Debra. I like your use of alliteration but that makes your poem contemporary. In classic haiku we don't use alliteration, metaphor, personification, etc.. but in contemporary is more liberal with rules...just a little information to keep in mind.

I love the presentation too, it certainly speaks of spring. Well done!

 Comment Written 22-May-2021

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reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Thanks so much for the pointers, Gypsy :)
Have a great weekend, best wishes, Debra

reply by the author on 22-May-2021

ps: I feel like a bit of a wally - I appear to have missed the last line of the requirements for the event and broke most of the rules, using both alliteration and personification. I will do better next time! x

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 22-May-2021

No worries, leave it as it is and just add contemporary to the haiku in your title.

reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Good idea! X

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

Your ultra-concise ekphrastic haiku is skillfully written and lovely, making excellent use of each syllable to describe an appealing woodland scene
Good use of personification

 Comment Written 22-May-2021

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reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Thank you so much, Janice :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

I love this! "Bluebells bask" - what an alliteration...and I love bluebells...beauty in two words and the whole rocks! You have a knack for haiku and so forth. The reader comes away sighing in delight!

 Comment Written 22-May-2021

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reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Thank you so much, Sherry :)

reply by Sherry Asbury on 22-May-2021

Bluebells bask binging on breaks in the clouds - see what you inspire, you sweet thing...

reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Oh, I like it!
I am like the bluebells....basking on breaks in the clouds - so much rain here in the UK!

reply by Sherry Asbury on 22-May-2021

Rain here in Oregon too...the raised gardens are right outside my LR windows...a small flag waves in one - soothing me...rain is pooling everywhere - but the gardens drink it in delight

reply by the author on 22-May-2021

I'm glad you have a room with a view :)
What is on the flag?

reply by Sherry Asbury on 22-May-2021

Oh, it is the American flag!

reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Of course it is! ;)
I have a tiny scarecrow in my garden - it's about a foot tall

reply by Sherry Asbury on 22-May-2021

And it does its job - haven't seen a crow in ages *smiles*

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Gorgeous. Stunning contribution to the club--sun peeking through screen--brilliant! Basking bluebells--whimsical, and delightfully alliterative, touch.

 Comment Written 21-May-2021

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reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Thanks, Liz :)

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

This is one of the best ones I've seen in the challenge. Gorgeous, and so descriptive. A fine ekphrastic poem for the senses.

Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge,
Sal XOs...

 Comment Written 21-May-2021

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reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Thanks so much, Sal :)

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

If only the sun would shine for this to happen Debra! An ambient scene here, much enjoyed, I have seen many bluebells about, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 21-May-2021

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reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Thank you, Dolly :)

Comment from Zan Zan

Excellent

I think haiku's becoming my fav little thing.

love love this.

Crowded "woodland screen" This had me

Best in all your endeavors. looking to see your work all over.

 Comment Written 21-May-2021

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reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Thank you so much, Zan Zan :)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Love your haiku! Yes, those bluebells are gorgeous! Did you know that the roots are edible? At least, in Korea, it's a traditional food. I don't hear about people digging up the plants here but they do harvest the ferns. I like the alliterative final line of the bluebells basking in the sunshine!

 Comment Written 21-May-2021

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reply by the author on 21-May-2021

Hello Helen :)
I didn't know that! Not sure I fancy the idea LOL
Thank you for your great feedback :)
Have a lovely weekend...
Best wishes as always, Debra x

reply by lyenochka on 21-May-2021

If you're curious, you can see:
https://www.koreanbapsang.com/doraji-namul-sauteed-bellflower-roots/

Have a great weekend!