Blind Eye
Don't turn a...16 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
What a clever piece - alerting the reader to the homeless, and then presenting the personal challenge - do we in fact see them, really see them, as real people, with their own story? Well written. Best wishes for your entry.
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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What a clever piece - alerting the reader to the homeless, and then presenting the personal challenge - do we in fact see them, really see them, as real people, with their own story? Well written. Best wishes for your entry.
Comment Written 21-May-2021
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem and for this great review. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We have a couple of homeless souls on the streets here and they are young men. I doÅ?t know their story but it is so sad to see youngsters give up on life, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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We have a couple of homeless souls on the streets here and they are young men. I doÅ?t know their story but it is so sad to see youngsters give up on life, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-May-2021
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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I agree, I wonder what brings them to this? Many homeless people are mentally ill which is devastating, I know because my son has schizophrenia and if it weren't for family keeping him safe and grounded, this might be where he ended up. Thanks again for taking time to read my poem.
Comment from WriterHeather
This is an incredibly powerful piece of writing. I hope that this opens people's eyes to this important issue. It seems like homelessness becomes a bigger problem in my city every year
reply by the author on 20-May-2021
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This is an incredibly powerful piece of writing. I hope that this opens people's eyes to this important issue. It seems like homelessness becomes a bigger problem in my city every year
Comment Written 20-May-2021
reply by the author on 20-May-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review, it means the world to me. :)
Comment from Deborah Mosher
Well done. I enjoyed this, and it was hard hitting in the way you intended which can be hard when working with such a short amount of words or syllables. Only thing I would maybe change it put "reaching" instead of "reach out." I feel it would flow just a little better, but overall great job.
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reply by the author on 20-May-2021
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Well done. I enjoyed this, and it was hard hitting in the way you intended which can be hard when working with such a short amount of words or syllables. Only thing I would maybe change it put "reaching" instead of "reach out." I feel it would flow just a little better, but overall great job.
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Comment Written 20-May-2021
reply by the author on 20-May-2021
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I appreciate you reading and reviewing my poem and for your suggestion. Have a wonderful evening. :)
Comment from fretless
I was homeless for over 4 years. Sometimes it feels like nobody sees you when you are hopeless and in need of a helping hand. Then every now and then someone helps you when you least expect it. I'm sure you are one of those angels.
reply by the author on 20-May-2021
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I was homeless for over 4 years. Sometimes it feels like nobody sees you when you are hopeless and in need of a helping hand. Then every now and then someone helps you when you least expect it. I'm sure you are one of those angels.
Comment Written 20-May-2021
reply by the author on 20-May-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem and for this exceptional review..I'm honored. I'm sorry for what you went through, I hope life is much better for you now. I help whenever I can but it never seems like it's enough and it's heartbreaking. Thanks again for reading.
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its my pleasure. and even if you can help one shingle person it is worth it.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
This is an excellent 2-10-2 poem. I love the sentiment behind it. The homeless are not invisible, yet society tends to treat them that way.
This is a great entry for the contest. I hope it does well.
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reply by the author on 20-May-2021
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This is an excellent 2-10-2 poem. I love the sentiment behind it. The homeless are not invisible, yet society tends to treat them that way.
This is a great entry for the contest. I hope it does well.
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Comment Written 20-May-2021
reply by the author on 20-May-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review, I appreciate it more than you know. :)
