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Haiku - Light Show

Nocturnal

9 total reviews 
Comment from MAMONIA
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That's got to be a salamander, gecko, or whatnot. I got a kick out of the photo of it dancing on the sand. I enjoyed the way you described this
creature that changes colors like a chameleon.
Great write. I had fun reading it.
Best of luck always,
Marie

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2021

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Thank you, Marie. :)

    So delighted that you enjoyed it.

    John
Comment from Bill Schott
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This haiku, Light Show, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting seems to be describing the moon, which has a dark side. Your haiku is well done.

 Comment Written 24-May-2021

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
    Thank you Bill.
    Yep moon it is.
Comment from Wendy G
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A beautiful description of the "mystery" something. Neither your words nor your image spell it out, but yes, her shining presence is a blessing. Good wishes for your entry.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
    Thank you Wendy. :)
Comment from royowen
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I could think of so many images that attach themselves to this great little post, it boggles the mind, a great entry in this poetry contest, well done, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 22-May-2021

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
    Thanks Roy, always a pleasure to read one of your reviews.
reply by royowen on 24-Jun-2021
    Bless you
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Your poem is such a mystery, is this about a flower or something scarier? "
illuminating

hauntingly iridescent

hiding a dark side" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.

 Comment Written 22-May-2021

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
    Thank you Iza, it was the moon that was too he subject of this lil poem. ;)

    Thank you for reviewing this
    Best
    John
Comment from Deborah Z
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Short, yet effective. I would guess the moon, but maybe it's something I haven't yet thought of. Overall, enjoyable and well written. One of my favorites of the day.

 Comment Written 22-May-2021

reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
    Thank you so much Deborah. T'was indeed the moon..

    So glad you enjoyed it.

    Best
    John
Comment from Susan Newell
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Who doesn't love a full moon? I'm guessing moon because of "hauntingly iridescent." (Should be one R.) I'm also not sure about the slow rising, but I'll grant poetic license for that. :-) Nice job with the contest prompt. (Seems I read something entirely different than other reviewers.)

 Comment Written 20-May-2021

reply by the author on 20-May-2021
    Lol busted!

    Thanks for the "r" heads up

    Coincidentally I was in edit mode when you commented...removing all reference to rising. Lol

    Thanks
    John
reply by Susan Newell on 20-May-2021
    I'll check it out again!
reply by Susan Newell on 20-May-2021
    Rising is still there. ? ? Maybe something that describes what it does once it's up there? It xxxxx through the sky. (It doesn't walk, but I can think of several applicable words.)
reply by the author on 20-May-2021
    Thanks Susan. I guess I meant to say I removed "she" though I most definitely regard the moon as female.
    I want the piece to be descriptive of the subject. I know the sun rises and the moon travels, but I am set in it now. Lol

    Thank you for your helpful comments
reply by Susan Newell on 20-May-2021
    Well, sometimes the moon appears over the horizon. We'll call that rising, okay?
reply by the author on 20-May-2021
    Ok lol
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
    Apologies. I decided to have some fun with this. Switched verse 3 to verse 1 and replaced verse 3 with something more satiric.
reply by Susan Newell on 21-May-2021
    No apologies needed. I saw that you had a major rework, and I like it.
Comment from C. F. Rogers
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I love this haiku. Such a simple piece, but it says so much. I will definitely be thinking about this one for the rest of the day. Superbly done! Can't wait for more.

 Comment Written 20-May-2021

reply by the author on 20-May-2021
    Thank you :)

    I am so pleased that you liked it

    Best
    John
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
    Apologies. I decided to have some fun with this. Switched verse 3 to verse 1 and replaced verse 3 with something more satoric.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This sounds like a woman with many attributes and she has not gone unnoticed as she rises, eyes are watching and enjoying the scene, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 20-May-2021

reply by the author on 20-May-2021
    Definitely associated with a woman, that is for sure. ;)

    Funny thing is I felt compelled to change the first line before I read your comment. I just can't help myself. Lol. I felt I had mischievously misled the reader by stating "she"... I was thinking of the allure of a woman as I wrote it. I guess it's just in my soul.

    Love
    John xx
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
    Apologies. I decided to have some fun with this. Switched verse 3 to verse 1 and replaced verse 3 with something more satoric.