Comment from pharp

Excellent

You did an excellent job in the penning of this story in a poem.
A most enjoyable read; excellent rhyming throughout with a very smooth flow. Thanks for your service; my husband was also in Vietnam in 1967-68. God Bless You! The very best to you in the contest.

Portia

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thanks so much and thanks to your husband for his service during such a bitter and difficult time.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this story. You did a good job to describe what happened and how one struggled to be ultimately successful.

I especially like this paragraph in the poem: ""I know you didn't like me, Amidst the poke and pan"
"But admit I made you better
I was your biggest fan"... People should not underestimate other people's capability...

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thanks so very much....Obviously, I am not a pure poet....but I tried to make each stanza have a mini-life of it's own,.....Godspeed to you and yours....Stu Harrell

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Cricket the Critic
Stuart Harrell you are so right that
Some folks ain't what they seem
You have an good story in your poem.
With a very good history about D-day in 1944.
Thank you for sharing your story in your poem
Gert

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thanks so very much......Godspeed and best to you and yours....Stu Harrell

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

This is a strange and interesting story in a poem. I have enjoyed reading it. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thanks so very much......Best Wishes to you going forward..Stu Harrell....

reply by Raul1 on 23-May-2021

You're welcome and thank you!

Comment from Kerry L Batchelder

Exceptional

A very interesting and intriguing poem. I have to admit Cricket made me wonder what had happened to him to have lost the ability to be play sports or join in activities that he obviously had an interest in. His criticism helped the others improve. This story again, supports the evidence of why it is not good to judge a book by it's cover. A cute and entertaining read with a big message. Great job!

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thanks so very much.....Best Wishes to you going forward.....Stu Harrell

Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

You did quite well writing a story in a poem from the beginning to the end. Your rhyme and rhythm are perfect. The story enjoyable reading. My brother also served in Vietnam. Thank you for your service. Good luck with the contest!
Patty

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thanks so very much....Bless your brother for his service to the nation during such a difficult time.......Good luck always to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Brilliant--one-of-a-kind--a powerful story rendered in fine rhyme--startling imagery of childhood taunting turned into a lasting friendship--stunning closer.

 Comment Written 22-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thanks so very much....I really like your writing...trying to be more eloquent and precise like you and Dolly poems....for now my stuff is sort of "barn swaggle" but still fun .....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

Comment from jenintorre

Exceptional

I really enjoyed reading this story in a poem and think it should do very well in the competition. Very poignant and well witten. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.

 Comment Written 22-May-2021

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reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Thank you so very much.......These are fun to bash together.....Godspeed to you and yours......Stu Harrell

Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

God bless your service to this country where I can be free to say what I think and what I want... You did a fine job with this...psychology, history, and all the rest. Your rhyme is good and I did not notice one forced rhyme. I have known a hundred crickets and they all are wounded in some way...you give this cricket a sympathetic demeanor.

 Comment Written 22-May-2021

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reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Thanks so very much.....these are fun to sketch together...plus I like a little history to boot.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

reply by Sherry Asbury on 22-May-2021

I love history - and since I wasn't there I need to learn...

Comment from elchupakabra

Excellent

The piece has a historical nature to it but is told in a whimsical way, almost like a limerick. Great work on this story in a poem, good luck and thanks for sharing. Later daze.

 Comment Written 22-May-2021

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reply by the author on 22-May-2021

Yo Brother.....Thanks so very much....Obviously..I ain't no pure poet, but do have fun bashing these little verses together.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell