Barrier
The walls we make7 total reviews
Comment from heavenempress
excellent piece of work and creativity at its best in just few meaningful words. The piece reminds us not to create walls that block love for others. in other ways no walls of selfishness or greediness. I highly reccommend your work to others. keep it up.
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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excellent piece of work and creativity at its best in just few meaningful words. The piece reminds us not to create walls that block love for others. in other ways no walls of selfishness or greediness. I highly reccommend your work to others. keep it up.
Comment Written 21-May-2021
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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Thank you so much. I am proud that you would recommend me to others to read.
Comment from Debra White
Hello Mia,
Sometimes, when we've been let down or hurt in life, we build our barriers high to protect ourselves. It can have the knock-on effect of making us lonely... Well expressed.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
For consideration - line one only has 4 syllables instead of the required 5 for the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Hello Mia,
Sometimes, when we've been let down or hurt in life, we build our barriers high to protect ourselves. It can have the knock-on effect of making us lonely... Well expressed.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
For consideration - line one only has 4 syllables instead of the required 5 for the contest.
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Thank you for noticing the error.
Comment from BellaRik7579
I gave this poem four stars because it is short and to the point and I can relate to the point the author is trying to convey to the reader. I think that the Author could look deeper into herself in using a different choice of words to express the meaning of lonley.
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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I gave this poem four stars because it is short and to the point and I can relate to the point the author is trying to convey to the reader. I think that the Author could look deeper into herself in using a different choice of words to express the meaning of lonley.
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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You are right I could have gone deeper. You inspired me to do so and the piece has changed in unexpected but I think Beautiful ways.
Comment from RodG
This short poem describes someone I know perfectly. How can one not be lonely if he shuts people out, distrusts almost everyone, and considers almost everything a "slight"?
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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This short poem describes someone I know perfectly. How can one not be lonely if he shuts people out, distrusts almost everyone, and considers almost everything a "slight"?
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Unfortunately it seems like we have closed our doors to both friends and strangers just now because of the pandemic, it is so sad, loneliness can be damaging to our health, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Unfortunately it seems like we have closed our doors to both friends and strangers just now because of the pandemic, it is so sad, loneliness can be damaging to our health, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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This is true. Thank you.
Comment from kahpot
Exactly, when we do feel alone we do lock everybody out, and will remain there until we learn to accept, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Exactly, when we do feel alone we do lock everybody out, and will remain there until we learn to accept, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from lancellot
Well, I suppose in a lot cases this true. I also think that sometimes certain people simple either don't know how to connect or have internal issues that holds them back. But, then there are those lonely because they haven't found the right person or people. Loneliness can be complicated.
Thought provoking piece.
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Well, I suppose in a lot cases this true. I also think that sometimes certain people simple either don't know how to connect or have internal issues that holds them back. But, then there are those lonely because they haven't found the right person or people. Loneliness can be complicated.
Thought provoking piece.
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Loneliness can be very complicated, I agree.
