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Comment from Dilettante junior
Virtual SIX
Sorry out of sixes
Dearest Carol,
What an inspiring piece! You sure poured your heart onto paper didnt you? I can totally relate to this following the death of a close one, when you are expected to read a eulogy, face the public, answer their questions, bury your loved one and return back to an empty house. Honestly that time was a blur for me. It felt like an out of body slow motion sketch.
I am glad you found yourself again. It is one of the hardest things to do.
Cheers,
DJ
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Virtual SIX
Sorry out of sixes
Dearest Carol,
What an inspiring piece! You sure poured your heart onto paper didnt you? I can totally relate to this following the death of a close one, when you are expected to read a eulogy, face the public, answer their questions, bury your loved one and return back to an empty house. Honestly that time was a blur for me. It felt like an out of body slow motion sketch.
I am glad you found yourself again. It is one of the hardest things to do.
Cheers,
DJ
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Thank you, sweetie... I love the Virtual SIX... it matches the rest of my type style. LOL, I am not sure I am fully back to searching for myself, but I feel better about it. It's sweethearts like you that have given me the motivation to be a writer again. Smiles and hugs your Mama Bear
Comment from Wendy G
Hi Carol,
You are a wonderful writer, and this is a gift. You will never lose the grief but it is being transformed into a vehicle for you to express yourself with honesty and truth and great power. They say that the greater the love, the greater the pain when one loses one's soul mate. But you can smile, because imagine your joy when you see him again!
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Hi Carol,
You are a wonderful writer, and this is a gift. You will never lose the grief but it is being transformed into a vehicle for you to express yourself with honesty and truth and great power. They say that the greater the love, the greater the pain when one loses one's soul mate. But you can smile, because imagine your joy when you see him again!
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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How beautiful and thoughtful, Wendy. I really appreciate the kindness and hope that you are right. I believe with all my heart that God brought Mike and I together so he would learn to believe in God and change his ways... He did and I am forever grateful for the time we had together. Smiles, Carol
Your shiny stars are glittering all over my face. Smiles!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Heartrending rendition of grief--sugg: put your notes in the text so they're more likely to be read by those who don't want to struggle with small print. Stunning metaphor --My heart was empty. It was a vessel pumping blood, nothing more.
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Heartrending rendition of grief--sugg: put your notes in the text so they're more likely to be read by those who don't want to struggle with small print. Stunning metaphor --My heart was empty. It was a vessel pumping blood, nothing more.
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Liz, I can still hear myself screaming and sobbing in my head. I had been so staunch and got things done.... and then there wasn't anything left to do but say goodbye. I was lost. I could function, but I felt nothing. I am blessed that I kept my promise to return to writing... that's where I will find myself. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
You've done a great job in sharing this painful part of your life. I like your comparison of the flowers pushing through the ground in spring. So glad there's a new tomorrow with God's mercies new each day. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, and prayers for continued strength. Carol
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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You've done a great job in sharing this painful part of your life. I like your comparison of the flowers pushing through the ground in spring. So glad there's a new tomorrow with God's mercies new each day. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, and prayers for continued strength. Carol
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Hi Carol... I didn't believe I could ever get to the point of even wanting to find me again, but through my writing I have. Thanks for understanding and for adding shiny bright stars to my day. Smiles, Carol
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You're welcome. I'm glad to get to know you better. Blessings. Carol
Comment from karenina
What a wonderfully, touching, testament to life! It has been a pleasure to get to know you through your wonderful work on site... You've not only captured by imagination (Beth! I dream of Beth!)-- You've opened up your life and shared precious moments of love and loss, of terror and triumph, of pride and perseverance with all of us! Of COURSE grief never goes away! No more than love does! The miracle is, we learn from day to day determination that the loss that once felt so crushing has in fact made us stronger, more determined to prove to ourselves, to our lost loved one--that we will not just survive...we'll thrive! A victory for ourselves (because we must!)--and a nod toward the love and confidence your husband had in you! You are not only a prolific writer, you are a ray of sunshine on the site...how lucky am I to call myself a fan and you a friend? VERY LUCKY! YOU are the "silver lining" in so many of our lives!--Karenina
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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What a wonderfully, touching, testament to life! It has been a pleasure to get to know you through your wonderful work on site... You've not only captured by imagination (Beth! I dream of Beth!)-- You've opened up your life and shared precious moments of love and loss, of terror and triumph, of pride and perseverance with all of us! Of COURSE grief never goes away! No more than love does! The miracle is, we learn from day to day determination that the loss that once felt so crushing has in fact made us stronger, more determined to prove to ourselves, to our lost loved one--that we will not just survive...we'll thrive! A victory for ourselves (because we must!)--and a nod toward the love and confidence your husband had in you! You are not only a prolific writer, you are a ray of sunshine on the site...how lucky am I to call myself a fan and you a friend? VERY LUCKY! YOU are the "silver lining" in so many of our lives!--Karenina
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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What a sweetheart I have found for a friend! As I said, I have been blessed. I was a caretaker almost all my life, and in the last ten years, I was double-fold with Mike, my Mom... and then don't forget the cantankerous father and my Johnny. Only in the last week or so have I finally permitted myself to find myself. And now I am addicted to a story with characters that hurt, and I have to make them better...OOPS, there's that caretaker again on paper this time. LOLYou are the best! Thanks for the lovely review, your friendship, and the shiny stars. Love ya, Carol
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True! Never more involved as a caretaker! Still, you are at the helm of your readership...( see what I did there?)... and, unlike in real life you create the characters, their situations, and their fictional fate! (Oh, Beth!, dear young woman!)--- Karenina
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
You are capable of beautiful writing and enjoyable reading. The journey we take to know ourselves and be the best we can be is a journey worth taking. You have been on many trips and arrived safely, in the end, each time. Keep it up, you are soaring!
Ralf
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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You are capable of beautiful writing and enjoyable reading. The journey we take to know ourselves and be the best we can be is a journey worth taking. You have been on many trips and arrived safely, in the end, each time. Keep it up, you are soaring!
Ralf
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thanks, Ralf... I really do believe that within the last week or so, I finally gave my self permission to find me again. I am enjoying writing ...almost like an addiction. Smiles, Carol
You light up my little corner tonight with your smile, friendship and the shiny stars. Thank you.
Comment from Susan Newell
Carol,
I knew from your pen name that you were starting over in some way. You are to be commended for sharing your tragic, but love-filled story. I'm sure that you were operating on autopilot for quite awhile. I have in no way experienced the devastation that you have, but I did experience a loss that caused me to rethink and rebuild myself. I have a few years that aren't much more than a blur. I, too, was on autopilot. We are both fortunate to know just who was piloting the plane while we were timing out. He never lets us down. You not only have a gift, you ARE a gift to all of us who have the joy of reading both your fiction and nonfiction. Thank you!
Sue
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Carol,
I knew from your pen name that you were starting over in some way. You are to be commended for sharing your tragic, but love-filled story. I'm sure that you were operating on autopilot for quite awhile. I have in no way experienced the devastation that you have, but I did experience a loss that caused me to rethink and rebuild myself. I have a few years that aren't much more than a blur. I, too, was on autopilot. We are both fortunate to know just who was piloting the plane while we were timing out. He never lets us down. You not only have a gift, you ARE a gift to all of us who have the joy of reading both your fiction and nonfiction. Thank you!
Sue
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Hi, Sue... I was a caretaker all my life and doublefold for the last ten. I thought that's all that I was. In the last week or so, I think I actually gave myself permission to find me again. I love writing and lately it's like an addiction. Every second that I am not doing something... I'm at the computer. The story is consuming me...as I figure out how to get Beth and Ty through it. Thanks again for the lovely review, for being my friend, and for the shiny stars. Smile, Carol
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I understand the caretaker role, and it's hard to break out of. I'm glad you are finally finding time for Carol!
Comment from Judy Lawless
Carol, you have bared your soul with this, and it seems to have given you some sense of well-being. It choked me up; it made me smile. It's amazing what this writing community can do for us. I'm so happy to have met you on here. You build us up too. Bless you. Keep smiling. Smiles and hugs.
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Carol, you have bared your soul with this, and it seems to have given you some sense of well-being. It choked me up; it made me smile. It's amazing what this writing community can do for us. I'm so happy to have met you on here. You build us up too. Bless you. Keep smiling. Smiles and hugs.
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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I have been feeling better of late.. writing always helps, and it's easier to bare your soul when you know no one can see you. When I saw the contest, it just felt like the right thing to write. I hope I don't come across as "preachy" because that would be the last thing I intend to do. To each his or her own... I feel it's my turn to find me. Smiles, Carol
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Not preachy at all, Carol. Your faith is what sustains you. :)
Comment from Ric Myworld
Every day, we all "Begin Again." Yesterday is gone and can be no more. But tomorrow is "waiting in the wings," and if we've learned from the past, just maybe, we can right all our wrongs. Of course, that's impossible for most of us, but thankfully, there is hope. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Every day, we all "Begin Again." Yesterday is gone and can be no more. But tomorrow is "waiting in the wings," and if we've learned from the past, just maybe, we can right all our wrongs. Of course, that's impossible for most of us, but thankfully, there is hope. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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I think I'm a recovering "caretaker" and probably will slip back now and again, but I promised to find myself in my writing and I think I am headed that way. Sometimes when I try to explain myself I probably sound "preachy, but I'm far from that. I write to release my emotions because honestly, in real life, face to face, I don't do that. Writing gives me that freedom. Smiles! Your best friend LOL Carol
Comment from robyn corum
Carol,
I adore you.
I was just talking with someone else about the fact that we must always try to be gracious and kind because we never know what load someone else may be carrying. You hide things well. I'm sorry that you have to go through these things, my sweet friend, but I'm so glad they led you here. Hugs-
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Carol,
I adore you.
I was just talking with someone else about the fact that we must always try to be gracious and kind because we never know what load someone else may be carrying. You hide things well. I'm sorry that you have to go through these things, my sweet friend, but I'm so glad they led you here. Hugs-
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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You are a sweetheart, and I adore you too. I've carried a heavy load and so much more that I don't share, but I've reaped many blessings as well. Personally, on a face-to-face level, I don't usually express my thoughts or true feelings, but when I write... I guess I feel, "who's going to stop me" Funny how one rationalizes things. I, too, am glad I'm here and that I have found some "true" friends. Not everyone is, you know. Take it from a gullible old lady.LOL, thanks for the shiny stars, but mostly, thanks for being you. Smiles and hugs - Carol
