Wishing
A Puente poem for Potlatch Poetry25 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Yovnne,
Nice done puente poem for the potlach club. It tells of the hope bird song gives us even if our wish to fly doesn't come true.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Yovnne,
Nice done puente poem for the potlach club. It tells of the hope bird song gives us even if our wish to fly doesn't come true.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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We should never stop wishing/hoping/dreaming. Thank you, Joan.
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You are so right.
No problem.
Joan
Comment from Iza Deleanu
"but there are times when they come true
and seem to come out of the blue,
just when we've given up all hope
and reached that fraying end of rope.
I must have faith and keep believing
wishes I will be receiving." Reading these lines Noah's Arch come in mind and the messenger of a new beginning - the dove with the olive branch.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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"but there are times when they come true
and seem to come out of the blue,
just when we've given up all hope
and reached that fraying end of rope.
I must have faith and keep believing
wishes I will be receiving." Reading these lines Noah's Arch come in mind and the messenger of a new beginning - the dove with the olive branch.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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What a lovely thing to say. Thank you.
Comment from Boogienights
I like this form of poetry, very nicely done. We should never give up on our wishes because they are just another part of hope, and we should never give up on hope. Thank you so much for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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I like this form of poetry, very nicely done. We should never give up on our wishes because they are just another part of hope, and we should never give up on hope. Thank you so much for sharing. :)
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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You are so right. Never give up hoping. Thank you somuch.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did an excellent job with your Potlatch challenge poem, Yvonne. I enjoyed reading it. Your two verses clearly have different POV's. The bridge works well to join them together and give readers much to think about. The color scheme is a great choice. The black background sets off the yellow font nicely. The doves pictured are beautiful, and give the idea that they do carry wishes to the sky when they fly. I like the internal rhyme of fly/sky and the alliteration of 'm.' The theme of your presentation is well thought out. Everyone has wishes, and hopes that they come true--some do, some don't. However, one must believe they will and be ready for them. If some don't, one can always revise their wishes as their life evolves.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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You did an excellent job with your Potlatch challenge poem, Yvonne. I enjoyed reading it. Your two verses clearly have different POV's. The bridge works well to join them together and give readers much to think about. The color scheme is a great choice. The black background sets off the yellow font nicely. The doves pictured are beautiful, and give the idea that they do carry wishes to the sky when they fly. I like the internal rhyme of fly/sky and the alliteration of 'm.' The theme of your presentation is well thought out. Everyone has wishes, and hopes that they come true--some do, some don't. However, one must believe they will and be ready for them. If some don't, one can always revise their wishes as their life evolves.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you for a beautiful review. I'm so glad you liked it.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, this is a beautiful poem. Maybe I read too much into it, but to me your words means that we never know what lies in wait for us, good or bad. To me that is so very true. What a lovely entry to the potlach. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Hi Yvonne, this is a beautiful poem. Maybe I read too much into it, but to me your words means that we never know what lies in wait for us, good or bad. To me that is so very true. What a lovely entry to the potlach. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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You hit it on the head. But we must keep dreaming/hoping/wishing. Thanks, Ulla.
Comment from Leann DS
I enjoyed reading this poem with the new to me style. I have heard of diamanté before, but not this one. The rhymes are great and so is the meter. I also liked the theme and the imagery is great. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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I enjoyed reading this poem with the new to me style. I have heard of diamanté before, but not this one. The rhymes are great and so is the meter. I also liked the theme and the imagery is great. Well done.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you so much.
Comment from L. Kalere
There's a complexity to this style that shows your dedication and skill. The dove is a beautiful metaphor and there's great rhythm and perfect rhyme. Best of luck in the Puente.
Linda
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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There's a complexity to this style that shows your dedication and skill. The dove is a beautiful metaphor and there's great rhythm and perfect rhyme. Best of luck in the Puente.
Linda
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you. Much appreciated.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
I love this so much! What a great visual in the first stanza of mourning doves taking to the sky with our wishes. Beautifully done!
Have a great weekend!
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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I love this so much! What a great visual in the first stanza of mourning doves taking to the sky with our wishes. Beautifully done!
Have a great weekend!
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you. You have a good weekend, too, I hope.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
No personal possession can compare to having good health and being able to watch nature and breathe in fresh are, bathe in the sun and appreciate life, I loved your uplifting words here, love Dolly x
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No personal possession can compare to having good health and being able to watch nature and breathe in fresh are, bathe in the sun and appreciate life, I loved your uplifting words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you. Got to keep wishing/dreaming/hoping.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very skillfully-written, moving, uplifting but realistic poem. It gently reminds us that our long-not-met wishes may, when we least expect it, come true.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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This is a very skillfully-written, moving, uplifting but realistic poem. It gently reminds us that our long-not-met wishes may, when we least expect it, come true.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Sometimes they do come true. Always wish/hope. Thanks, Janice.
