Calm Before...?
An unexpected encounter11 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Oh yes indeed, two forces that seem to be in collusion with one another are the wind and the water, and although they nurture life, they can likewise take it, beautifully written my friend, an excellent entry in this contest, good luck blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-May-2021
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Oh yes indeed, two forces that seem to be in collusion with one another are the wind and the water, and although they nurture life, they can likewise take it, beautifully written my friend, an excellent entry in this contest, good luck blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-May-2021
reply by the author on 15-May-2021
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Thanks so much Roy. I always look forward to your reviews.
Linda
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Bless you Linda
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Calm Before, has the right formatting and reminds the reader that under the surface there sometimes lurks something terribly life changing.
reply by the author on 15-May-2021
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This 5-7-5, Calm Before, has the right formatting and reminds the reader that under the surface there sometimes lurks something terribly life changing.
Comment Written 15-May-2021
reply by the author on 15-May-2021
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Thanks so much for your feedback!
Linda
Comment from lyenochka
You're right that the sea's surface cannot tell us about the dangers below. I like your allusion to Robert Louis Stevenson's book in the last line to describe Nature's unpredicatability.
One typo:
Jeckyll and Hyde seas (Jekyll)
reply by the author on 15-May-2021
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You're right that the sea's surface cannot tell us about the dangers below. I like your allusion to Robert Louis Stevenson's book in the last line to describe Nature's unpredicatability.
One typo:
Jeckyll and Hyde seas (Jekyll)
Comment Written 15-May-2021
reply by the author on 15-May-2021
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Thank you so much for your observations as well as pointing out the name error. You're the only one who caught it!
Linda
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I see you took third place! Congratulations!!
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I think I got 2or 3 votes, woo-woo:)
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You had my vote, too!
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Thank You!
Comment from equestrik
This is for sure the truth of how the oceans can be. We are quite silly to think we have a right to go into their ocean homes with no consequence. Good write.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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This is for sure the truth of how the oceans can be. We are quite silly to think we have a right to go into their ocean homes with no consequence. Good write.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thanks so much for your comments. Isn't it true though? I went out in a cove to swim with the dolphins in the wild and it was fantastic. But when I saw what looked like a small shark on the bottom of the ocean, I couldn't get back fast enough. Lesson learned. Hmm, that might be my next story!
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Sounds like a good next story!
Comment from Karen Estep
I found this little ditty to be very captivating! Certainly the graphic fits your story very well. Treachery below captures the essence of your story. Good luck in the contest!!
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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I found this little ditty to be very captivating! Certainly the graphic fits your story very well. Treachery below captures the essence of your story. Good luck in the contest!!
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Wendy G
This is a superb image and your 5-7-5 does justice to it. Your words have been thoughtfully chosen, and the syllables fit smoothly to requirements. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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This is a superb image and your 5-7-5 does justice to it. Your words have been thoughtfully chosen, and the syllables fit smoothly to requirements. Well done!
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fun a and appropriate write as the sea with its turning tide and unpredictable mood can indeed be two faced, a fine 5-7-5 for the contest, one of the best I've read, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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This is a fun a and appropriate write as the sea with its turning tide and unpredictable mood can indeed be two faced, a fine 5-7-5 for the contest, one of the best I've read, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to review it.
Comment from Boogienights
You are so right about this. A calm surface can hide strong deadly currents beneath. This is a very nice contest entry, thank you for sharing, best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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You are so right about this. A calm surface can hide strong deadly currents beneath. This is a very nice contest entry, thank you for sharing, best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This poem is a strong metaphor. Many readers who identify this metaphor with see it reflects some of their relationship experiences. It could be any kind of relationship.
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reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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This poem is a strong metaphor. Many readers who identify this metaphor with see it reflects some of their relationship experiences. It could be any kind of relationship.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Excellent point Liz...thank you.
Comment from T B Botts
Wow! What a great poem! I commercial fish and can attest to things on top of the water not being the way they are underneath. In fact most of the time the surface doesn't begin to show what lurks beneath. The last line was brilliant. Well done!
Tom
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Wow! What a great poem! I commercial fish and can attest to things on top of the water not being the way they are underneath. In fact most of the time the surface doesn't begin to show what lurks beneath. The last line was brilliant. Well done!
Tom
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Wow, thank you so much. I'm honored that a fisherman could identify with my poem.
