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Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "Teatime at Jericho Farm - 1943"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
As Peter Allen is recognized by Heather Bache he feels the familiarity of the place quite keenly. Besides the fact that Heather has aged a bit, nothing else seems different until Heather draws his attention to the electricity, which of course did not exist eighteen years ago. When Tom and Julia arrive and he is subsequently invited to stay for dinner, that presents the opportunity he needs to discuss his news. He is ushered into an unexpected elegant hallway to a telephone to sort out his plans. We have much to look forward to.
Ralf
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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As Peter Allen is recognized by Heather Bache he feels the familiarity of the place quite keenly. Besides the fact that Heather has aged a bit, nothing else seems different until Heather draws his attention to the electricity, which of course did not exist eighteen years ago. When Tom and Julia arrive and he is subsequently invited to stay for dinner, that presents the opportunity he needs to discuss his news. He is ushered into an unexpected elegant hallway to a telephone to sort out his plans. We have much to look forward to.
Ralf
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for more catch up with this six-star review. again it is much appreciated.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is a very good chapter
and a good image for it.
-It is always good to see
some of the characters from
the past and see how they are doing.
-Peter Allen is always interesting, and
he knows he must tread very lightly,
especially after learning about Jack.
-Hopefully, that situation works out somehow.
-This family has been through so much.
-I like the description of the Bache's home
as Peter goes to use the phone.
-I like the references to something
suitable for a Viennese waltz.
-It certainly has many of the modern
conveniences, too.
-I look forward to seeing how the
conversation will turn out.
-This was a nice trip down
memory lane, even if the
Bache's have aged, as we all do!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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-This is a very good chapter
and a good image for it.
-It is always good to see
some of the characters from
the past and see how they are doing.
-Peter Allen is always interesting, and
he knows he must tread very lightly,
especially after learning about Jack.
-Hopefully, that situation works out somehow.
-This family has been through so much.
-I like the description of the Bache's home
as Peter goes to use the phone.
-I like the references to something
suitable for a Viennese waltz.
-It certainly has many of the modern
conveniences, too.
-I look forward to seeing how the
conversation will turn out.
-This was a nice trip down
memory lane, even if the
Bache's have aged, as we all do!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Many thanks for this complimentary, six star review. It is much appreciated.
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You are very welcome and deserving.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jim, I can understand that Allen find the whole thing quite awkward. I feel that he's quite pleased to see the family, all the same. The are certainly very pleased to seeing him. Great dialogue and great imagery.
But now what. How to get to the real reason he's there? All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2021
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Hi Jim, I can understand that Allen find the whole thing quite awkward. I feel that he's quite pleased to see the family, all the same. The are certainly very pleased to seeing him. Great dialogue and great imagery.
But now what. How to get to the real reason he's there? All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your sympathetic review of this chapter, and for the compliments on the dialogue and imagery.
Comment from JudyE
Sorry I'm late but in the process of us moving house, I lost my mouse and wasn't able to 'compute'. However, I've now purchased another and it's all systems go again.
Just a few points:
'Oh we be fine, at least Tommy, Julia and me be. Jack be - she paused, and Allen hated himself. 'Jack be in a hospital somewhere over there. He were a Spitfire pilot. Got shot down in the desert, hurt quite bad, they say. So now they've got him.' - speech marks needed before 'she paused'
Still, let's not be all gloomy eh! - question mark at end perhaps?
Not counting Tommy of course. - comma after 'Tommy'
She flicked the lightswitch on and off. - should 'light switch' be two words?
The girl he left behind had been Heather, now in her mid sixties, and here he was, once again about to go raking in the muck of their past. - i might have said 'The girl Tom left behind' otherwise the next use of 'he' is a bit ambiguous.
The door opened and a striking looking young woman stood - I think 'striking looking' should be hyphenated.
'Mr. Allen! Well I'll be buggered!' - comma after 'Well'
Eventually Tommy Bache managed to effect the introduction of his daughter, - comma after 'Eventually' and 'affect' rather than 'effect'.
as Heather left him alone in the extravagently lit hall. - spelling - extravagantly.
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2021
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Sorry I'm late but in the process of us moving house, I lost my mouse and wasn't able to 'compute'. However, I've now purchased another and it's all systems go again.
Just a few points:
'Oh we be fine, at least Tommy, Julia and me be. Jack be - she paused, and Allen hated himself. 'Jack be in a hospital somewhere over there. He were a Spitfire pilot. Got shot down in the desert, hurt quite bad, they say. So now they've got him.' - speech marks needed before 'she paused'
Still, let's not be all gloomy eh! - question mark at end perhaps?
Not counting Tommy of course. - comma after 'Tommy'
She flicked the lightswitch on and off. - should 'light switch' be two words?
The girl he left behind had been Heather, now in her mid sixties, and here he was, once again about to go raking in the muck of their past. - i might have said 'The girl Tom left behind' otherwise the next use of 'he' is a bit ambiguous.
The door opened and a striking looking young woman stood - I think 'striking looking' should be hyphenated.
'Mr. Allen! Well I'll be buggered!' - comma after 'Well'
Eventually Tommy Bache managed to effect the introduction of his daughter, - comma after 'Eventually' and 'affect' rather than 'effect'.
as Heather left him alone in the extravagently lit hall. - spelling - extravagantly.
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 01-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your work once again. Please don't worry about being late. Your reviews are always worth waiting for.
There was one of your suggestions I did want to query though. On the question of affect or effect, although effect is normally a noun and affect a verb I was almost certain I had it right in this instance. I thought you might find this, interesting.
From: https://www.huffpost.com/entry/affect-or-effect_b_2491596
?Effect? as a verb
?Effect? used as a verb goes beyond just being the stimulus or influence behind an action; as a verb ?effect? refers to actually achieving a final result?to bringing about, to accomplishing, to bringing into being, to executing, to resulting in whatever the final result was intended to be.
Some people find the distinction between ?affect? and ?effect? used as a verb confusing. The following examples should help clear that up. Regardless of what the grammar or spellcheck program on your computer tells you, the following examples are correct (this is a reminder that many times such computer programs are mistaken where correct grammar is concerned).
In these examples, ?effect? is used to indicate that an actual result is achieved. Just remember that where the intended result is actually accomplished, ?effect? is the correct verb to use. Where some action is merely stimulated or influenced by something, ?affect? is used.
Every administration hopes to effect a peace treaty in the Middle East.
Rest assured that the new CEO will effect many changes in our company.
The treatment effected a cure.
The epidemic caused the politicians to effect new standards of sanitary practices.
I think in my use of it here the introduction is 'actually accomplished'.
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Thanks for the link and explanation. I think you're right. :)
Cheers
Comment from royowen
So, Colonel Allen returns to the place he had entered on that previous mission he had before, but this time vastly different from the time before, but still concerned with the German prodigy of years before. What an interesting twist to the story, very clever. Well done Jim, excellent post. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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So, Colonel Allen returns to the place he had entered on that previous mission he had before, but this time vastly different from the time before, but still concerned with the German prodigy of years before. What an interesting twist to the story, very clever. Well done Jim, excellent post. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-May-2021
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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Thank you Roy for this review and you interesting comments.
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Good job
Comment from Sherry Asbury
#1 you are and #1 you deserve to be! This is captivating and charming...I am wondering why Allen wants to see the family...hope it isn't a nefarious reason, but I imagine it will have an impact. I am quite intrigued by the state of the living room - everything is intriguing!! Looking forward to more...
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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#1 you are and #1 you deserve to be! This is captivating and charming...I am wondering why Allen wants to see the family...hope it isn't a nefarious reason, but I imagine it will have an impact. I am quite intrigued by the state of the living room - everything is intriguing!! Looking forward to more...
Comment Written 31-May-2021
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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Thank so much for this positive review. I am pleased you enjoyed this episode.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is a cozy encounter! However, it's a little more comforting for the Baches than for Allen, who has some delicate business to attend to. I look forward to seeing that business resolved, in the next chapter. I'm hoping that Tommy and Heather Bache will be as forthcoming with Allen about Tom Joliffe's German girlfriend, as they were about the Hettie investigation, eighteen years previously.
Minor errors and suggestions:
So now they've got him'
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So now they've got him.'
Tom, it seemed, had been something of a ne'er do well ...
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Tom, it seemed, had been something of a ne'er-do-well ... [I think it's more commonly hyphenated]
A broad staircase swept upwards on Allens left,
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A broad staircase swept upwards on Allen's left,
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It's great to be back in the company of the Bache family. The descriptive narrative is charming. I don't know what desert Jack's plane crashed landed in or who's "got" him, but I hope it's not the Nazis. It doesn't sound very good, if he's badly injured.
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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This is a cozy encounter! However, it's a little more comforting for the Baches than for Allen, who has some delicate business to attend to. I look forward to seeing that business resolved, in the next chapter. I'm hoping that Tommy and Heather Bache will be as forthcoming with Allen about Tom Joliffe's German girlfriend, as they were about the Hettie investigation, eighteen years previously.
Minor errors and suggestions:
So now they've got him'
-->
So now they've got him.'
Tom, it seemed, had been something of a ne'er do well ...
-->
Tom, it seemed, had been something of a ne'er-do-well ... [I think it's more commonly hyphenated]
A broad staircase swept upwards on Allens left,
-->
A broad staircase swept upwards on Allen's left,
***
It's great to be back in the company of the Bache family. The descriptive narrative is charming. I don't know what desert Jack's plane crashed landed in or who's "got" him, but I hope it's not the Nazis. It doesn't sound very good, if he's badly injured.
Comment Written 31-May-2021
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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Many thanks for this helpful and searching six star review. It is much appreciated. All will eventually be made clear but at present, Allen is more concerned with getting information rather than disseminating it.
Comment from amahra
This is another fine chapter with a very interesting back story. I love the realistic dialogue that reflects the 1940s to a tee. And I remember as a kid picking up the phone and hearing, "Operator, what number please."
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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This is another fine chapter with a very interesting back story. I love the realistic dialogue that reflects the 1940s to a tee. And I remember as a kid picking up the phone and hearing, "Operator, what number please."
Comment Written 31-May-2021
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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Many thanks for this review. The 'business' with the old fashioned phone as given rise to several comments. Phones have come a long way since those days.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Another convoluted mystery of an illegimitate child--I mean that as a compliment! I'm glad to be off the battlefield and back in the cosy house.
typo: broad staircase swept upwards on [Allens=>ALLEN'S] left
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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Another convoluted mystery of an illegimitate child--I mean that as a compliment! I'm glad to be off the battlefield and back in the cosy house.
typo: broad staircase swept upwards on [Allens=>ALLEN'S] left
Comment Written 31-May-2021
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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Thank you for this review. I am trying to show how war isnt all battlefields and heroism. It affects different people in different ways. Thanks for picking up on that.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This is going to be a difficult moment for Allen to break the news that there is a german prisoner that is related to this familly and a potentinal heir to the family farm. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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This is going to be a difficult moment for Allen to break the news that there is a german prisoner that is related to this familly and a potentinal heir to the family farm. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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Thank you so much for this review. Remember, Allen is there to collect information not to give it - yet!