Child of Love
A roundabout poem for the Potlatch challenge10 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
This is a lovely poem about a child whose life was cut short. I lost a child too. The memory is sweet but grief shouldn't last forever. This Roundabout poem was nicely written.
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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This is a lovely poem about a child whose life was cut short. I lost a child too. The memory is sweet but grief shouldn't last forever. This Roundabout poem was nicely written.
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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Thank you for your lovely and empathetic sentiments.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely, but sad romance Roundabout poem June about losing the love of your life.
Eternal bond of love is tight
The joy outweighs the grief - yes, that is true. Nice one,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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A lovely, but sad romance Roundabout poem June about losing the love of your life.
Eternal bond of love is tight
The joy outweighs the grief - yes, that is true. Nice one,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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This is a sad piece, but I did enjoy learning the new format. It was not an easy one for me! Thanks for taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem for the club entry. Round about. It has a Beautiful overall presentation. Lovely photo to compliment your words. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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This is a nicely written poem for the club entry. Round about. It has a Beautiful overall presentation. Lovely photo to compliment your words. Well done.
Comment Written 10-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyd the read. It was a bit of a challenge to create. I appreciate the positive feedback.
Comment from harmony13
I found these words heartfelt, sad, loving, caring and creative. As I read
the author's words they brought me to tears. The pain of losing someone
you love so much was conveyed. The poem flows and connects well.
The artwork is lovely and goes well with these words.
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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I found these words heartfelt, sad, loving, caring and creative. As I read
the author's words they brought me to tears. The pain of losing someone
you love so much was conveyed. The poem flows and connects well.
The artwork is lovely and goes well with these words.
Comment Written 10-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Thank you so much for sharing your empathetic and insightful sentiments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A child without a father here and his legacy was left behind in his child with love and your sensitive handling of this situation brings joy to my ears, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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A child without a father here and his legacy was left behind in his child with love and your sensitive handling of this situation brings joy to my ears, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Thank you for your empathetic and insightful comments. Always appreciate your feedback.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Child of Love
June Sargent,
Your poem Child of Love is beautiful. there are so many lines of how you wrote, I was impressed with the The Roundabout format when you said---Our time together was too brief
A love affair so rare
I took a leap
'Cross mountain steep
A love affair so rare
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Child of Love
June Sargent,
Your poem Child of Love is beautiful. there are so many lines of how you wrote, I was impressed with the The Roundabout format when you said---Our time together was too brief
A love affair so rare
I took a leap
'Cross mountain steep
A love affair so rare
Comment Written 09-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and share your thoughts,
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June Sargent you are so welcome.
Gert
Comment from kahpot
Absolutely beautiful, the form, rhyme, meaning, and overall presentation, a wonderful tribute to a passed loved one, your descending lines fit and flow with ease, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Absolutely beautiful, the form, rhyme, meaning, and overall presentation, a wonderful tribute to a passed loved one, your descending lines fit and flow with ease, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 09-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thank you so much for the insightful feedback and generous rating! I really struggled with this challenge. I appreciate your thoughts, as always.
Comment from lyenochka
You did a great job with this Roundabout format! I liked how you showed that despite the loss due to untimely death of the loved one, there remain so much love and joy in memories.
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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You did a great job with this Roundabout format! I liked how you showed that despite the loss due to untimely death of the loved one, there remain so much love and joy in memories.
Comment Written 09-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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I am glad you got the gist of what I was aiming for. I have to admit this roundabout was challenging for me!
Comment from royowen
The tragedy of losing a child must run very deep, although it's never happened to me or Elaine, and I've never known the daily pain of that loss, I can guess by the love I bear for my kids. This is a fine poem June, and marks your amazing ability with words. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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The tragedy of losing a child must run very deep, although it's never happened to me or Elaine, and I've never known the daily pain of that loss, I can guess by the love I bear for my kids. This is a fine poem June, and marks your amazing ability with words. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thank you, Roy!
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Bless you June
Comment from DentedSyke
This is really good. Besides following the structure correctly, you did it without forcing any syllables or rhymes. The message was heartbreaking and strong. The imagery that you evoked was clear and compelling. Great job!
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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This is really good. Besides following the structure correctly, you did it without forcing any syllables or rhymes. The message was heartbreaking and strong. The imagery that you evoked was clear and compelling. Great job!
Comment Written 09-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and share your insights! Your feedback is much appreciated. I have to admit the format was quite challenging for me...
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You're welcome.
