In the Horizon
5/7/5 Winter Haiku4 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
I like the way horizon, dark clouds and funeral give a sad image, yet it says we are all going upwards, though the artwork is a cemetary, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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I like the way horizon, dark clouds and funeral give a sad image, yet it says we are all going upwards, though the artwork is a cemetary, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--and another perfect picture that wound have made a groovy album cover for our band, since everyone knows that heavy metal music is a direct pipeline to evil; 'Welcome to the stage and abandon all hope; put your cloven hooves together for, The Beelzabuddies!'
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--and another perfect picture that wound have made a groovy album cover for our band, since everyone knows that heavy metal music is a direct pipeline to evil; 'Welcome to the stage and abandon all hope; put your cloven hooves together for, The Beelzabuddies!'
Comment Written 09-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thank you very much, Mike, for reading and reviewing my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jesse James Doty
So, ominous dark clouds mean a funeral party is coming or has come. That is a stretch of the imagination, I would venture...yet, your guess is as good as mine. I admit that dark clouds set a mood of foreboding in many who believe in the weather predicting bad situations. There is always the notion of 'earthquake weather,' which has never been scientifically proven but, nonetheless, many folks still believe the folklore. So, you write a pretty haiku and predict a funeral party. I'll buy it, or buy into it, as the case may be. Thanks for sharing and for letting me go on about the weather.
Have a wonderful day,
Jesse
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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So, ominous dark clouds mean a funeral party is coming or has come. That is a stretch of the imagination, I would venture...yet, your guess is as good as mine. I admit that dark clouds set a mood of foreboding in many who believe in the weather predicting bad situations. There is always the notion of 'earthquake weather,' which has never been scientifically proven but, nonetheless, many folks still believe the folklore. So, you write a pretty haiku and predict a funeral party. I'll buy it, or buy into it, as the case may be. Thanks for sharing and for letting me go on about the weather.
Have a wonderful day,
Jesse
Comment Written 09-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Hello, Jesse, the point of haiku poetry is to capture a nature's moment in time. In this case, I was hoping you visualize the ominous dark clouds over the cemetery during a funeral. You are already in a sad mood and the gloomy sky reflects that.
Thank you very much, Jesse, for reading and reviewing my poem.
Gypsy hugs
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You're welcome, my friend.
And please keep the Gypsy hugs coming!
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from lyenochka
That picture really shows those dark and ominous clouds over the cemetery. And though the imagery is dark and gloomy, the last line shows an oxymoron of a "funeral party." And yet, to think about it, at funerals we do celebrate a life.
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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That picture really shows those dark and ominous clouds over the cemetery. And though the imagery is dark and gloomy, the last line shows an oxymoron of a "funeral party." And yet, to think about it, at funerals we do celebrate a life.
Comment Written 09-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thank you very much, Hellen.
Gypsy hugs
