Haiku 2021
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Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written haiku. Beautiful
Overall presentation background colour and font. Great photo to compliment your words as well. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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This is a nicely written haiku. Beautiful
Overall presentation background colour and font. Great photo to compliment your words as well. Nicely done.
Comment Written 10-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Thank you, Joanne, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Sharon Davis
A cleverly composed jisei haiku. The words are powerful in the imagery that is created. The accompanying image and title of the poem reflect the theme of the piece. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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A cleverly composed jisei haiku. The words are powerful in the imagery that is created. The accompanying image and title of the poem reflect the theme of the piece. Nicely done.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Hello Sharon :)
Thank you for your lovely comments, best wishes, Debra
Comment from lyenochka
As much as I dread the spreading of dandelion seeds, each seed is such a marvel. That's what I appreciate about your jisei haiku - it shows not only the death of the plant but the flying "untethered" seed predicts new life somewhere else.
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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As much as I dread the spreading of dandelion seeds, each seed is such a marvel. That's what I appreciate about your jisei haiku - it shows not only the death of the plant but the flying "untethered" seed predicts new life somewhere else.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Hi Helen, thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it as always, best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Debra,
We used to have a lot of fun with these when we were young. We'd pretend the seeds were paratroopers behind the enemy lines in France.
I count a 5-6-3 contemporary Haiku. It's going to land someplace, but all up to the wind. Still a bit early for these seeds in southern New Brunswick.
I like the alliteration with "wisp/wanders/wake".
Nice entry for the JISEI HAIKU event.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Hi Debra,
We used to have a lot of fun with these when we were young. We'd pretend the seeds were paratroopers behind the enemy lines in France.
I count a 5-6-3 contemporary Haiku. It's going to land someplace, but all up to the wind. Still a bit early for these seeds in southern New Brunswick.
I like the alliteration with "wisp/wanders/wake".
Nice entry for the JISEI HAIKU event.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thanks so much, Kimbob :)
Glad you enjoyed this one. It took me ages to get the wording just how I wanted it... I always find that writing haiku takes me a long time - it?s satisfying though! Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gorgeous! So lovely and elegant, and whimsical besides! Impressive alliteration in WWW. This could have been a contender in a haiku contest. Nice work.
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Gorgeous! So lovely and elegant, and whimsical besides! Impressive alliteration in WWW. This could have been a contender in a haiku contest. Nice work.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thanks so much, Liz :)
Glad you enjoyed it. Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Dandelion
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
I love your contemporary jesei haiku. Beautiful imagery and presentation. Nice alliteration. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Dandelion
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
I love your contemporary jesei haiku. Beautiful imagery and presentation. Nice alliteration. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thanks so much, Gypsy :)
Your feedback means a lot...
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It will soon find a home as these flying seeds are tenacious and keen to survive, I enjoyed your Haiku, great imagery in these words as these seeds float like parachutes in the wind, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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It will soon find a home as these flying seeds are tenacious and keen to survive, I enjoyed your Haiku, great imagery in these words as these seeds float like parachutes in the wind, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Hello Dolly :) Thank you for your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Ginnygray
Wisp, wonders, wake make this short haiku come alive with nature's imagery which is precisely the goal. Certainly well achieved. I particularly found your author's notes advantageous and the neutral black enhanced the delicate dandelion's wistfulness! Thank you for sharing your talents.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Wisp, wonders, wake make this short haiku come alive with nature's imagery which is precisely the goal. Certainly well achieved. I particularly found your author's notes advantageous and the neutral black enhanced the delicate dandelion's wistfulness! Thank you for sharing your talents.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Ginny, for your lovely feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed my haiku :) Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation, Debra.
-A well written haiku
with effective nature
and seasonal imagery
that creates a vivid word
picture of the scene.
-A good satori line, too.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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-Nice image and
presentation, Debra.
-A well written haiku
with effective nature
and seasonal imagery
that creates a vivid word
picture of the scene.
-A good satori line, too.
-Well done!
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Hi Pam :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it as always. Best wishes, Debra
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You are welcome, Debra.
Comment from Pj Dennison
Your poem is excellent. The thoughts and the images that goes with your words are so very good. I like that the photo is black and white as well. One time my daughter when she was very young, around four told me to come running because there were angels everywhere outside. I had to see this and run I did. In the air were canopies of dandelion seeds floating up and away in the wind. She was so excited seeing the little angels I had not the heart to tell her any different. Thank you for bringing back that memory.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Your poem is excellent. The thoughts and the images that goes with your words are so very good. I like that the photo is black and white as well. One time my daughter when she was very young, around four told me to come running because there were angels everywhere outside. I had to see this and run I did. In the air were canopies of dandelion seeds floating up and away in the wind. She was so excited seeing the little angels I had not the heart to tell her any different. Thank you for bringing back that memory.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Hello :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and for sharing the memory of your daughter and the angels - very sweet!
Best wishes, Debra :)
