Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Melktert
by Debra White

I checked the recipe, it sounds delicious but too difficult to make, for me.
Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images. Well done.

Gyp

 Comment Written 10-May-2021

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reply by the author on 13-May-2021

Thanks so much, Gypsy :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

I enjoyed this - perhaps I should also feel inspired to make one. Just note the spelling of "luscious", just a small detail to edit. Your photo makes it look very tempting, and your words are well chosen.

 Comment Written 09-May-2021

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reply by the author on 09-May-2021

Hi Wendy :) Thank you so much for your feedback. I appreciate you picking up the error - all sorted now! Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Egg custard, very sweet and naughty. Not tasted this in ages as I don't buy cakes. But your poem made my mouth water here, love the alliteration, delicious and delicate, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 08-May-2021

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reply by the author on 09-May-2021

Thank you so much, Dolly :)
Love an egg custard with a cup of tea!
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Sharon Davis

Excellent

This rhymed poem is short, but composed in a manner that offers just the right amount of description necessary to offer the reader a taste of the sweet treat the piece is written about. Great job.

 Comment Written 08-May-2021

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reply by the author on 09-May-2021

Thank you, Sharon, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Your poem makes it sound so yummy (as long as you can have dairy!). It reminds me of a custard, or around here we call it "flan." I like the sound of the crumbly crust with "cinnamon dust."

 Comment Written 08-May-2021

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reply by the author on 09-May-2021

Thanks so much, Helen :)
Best wishes as always, Debra

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Debra,
I'm always stuck for inspiration. Earlier today, an idea for a poem came into my pointed head... but I neglected to write it down! And now I can't remember what it was. It would have been a comical poem... that much I remember.
I wondered what "Melktert" was when I saw your title. A sweet pie, the South African Milk Tart. It caused me to remember one of my grandmother's desserts... bread pudding with raisins. She'd pour a bit of cream on top.
I really enjoyed your poem describing this pastry.
Perfect meter for a great flow.
I count 4-4-7 syllables in each verse.
Nice rhymes.
And I like the alliteration of,
"lucsious, luxurious" ... (luscious)
and
"delicate, decadent"
Well done! If I had a six left, it would be yours.
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 08-May-2021

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reply by the author on 09-May-2021

Hello Kimbob :)
Thanks so much for your thoughtful feedback and I?m glad I?m not alone in my struggle for inspiration!
I misread your comment and had to double check myself - you referred to your head as pointed and then said it would?ve been a comical poem... I read it as conical (which tied in with the pointed head comment!) sometimes I amuse myself lol
Thank you for pointing out my spelling error - I blame it on my fnigers!
Best wishes as always, Debra :)

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The author's words make me hungry for dessert! The poem is
descriptive, appetizing, and creative. Thank you for the author's
notes - I love hearing the history behind the poem. The poem
flows and connects well. Great Poem!

 Comment Written 08-May-2021

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reply by the author on 08-May-2021

Thank you so much for your lovely feedback! Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Ginnygray

Exceptional

Debra, you have whetted my appetite with this delicacy of cream, crumbly crust, and cinnamon dust! The rhymes are spot on and your choice of words apropos. Alliteration and assonance add to the rhythmic flow. You have created a strong appetency! Great job!

 Comment Written 08-May-2021

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reply by the author on 08-May-2021

Hi Ginny :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and generous star rating. I appreciate both! The melktert looks delicious... I must try the recipe out.
Best wishes as always, Debra :)

Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

Oh, yummy!! This is the kind of dessert I love. It must be like flan... You made a very pretty presentation of this little poem. You must let us know how it turns out!

 Comment Written 08-May-2021

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reply by the author on 08-May-2021

It looks so nice, doesn't it?! Can't wait to try it.
Thanks for the feedback, Sherry...
Best wishes as always, Debra :)

reply by Sherry Asbury on 09-May-2021

Yum yum!!!

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job, Debra. I like the rhyme scheme that ties the two verses together nicely. The image is perfect for your words. I like the way the last line of both verses rhyme with each other and the other two lines in the verses have their own rhymes. Your words flow smoothly and are descriptive. Now where is the recipe for this awesome treat?
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 08-May-2021

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reply by the author on 08-May-2021

Hi Jan, thank you for your feedback :) You can find the recipe at www.feastandwest.com. Let me know how it turns out if you get chance to make it and we'll compare notes! Best wishes as always, Debra :)