-The Hearts Enclave-
Free verse6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Heart's Enclave, has overpowered me with allusions to ethereal moments within the movement of two lives through the positive environment of a good relationship.
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This poem, The Heart's Enclave, has overpowered me with allusions to ethereal moments within the movement of two lives through the positive environment of a good relationship.
Comment Written 10-May-2021
Comment from royowen
It's true we are all sojourners, in a place that's not our, even those that are on a journey to a land they can never own, but will own them, which is the reward for rebellion, they my not know it with the conscious mind, but with their spirit they do. Beautifully written Gordon, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Upon (mysteries) bare back. Mystery's?
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It's true we are all sojourners, in a place that's not our, even those that are on a journey to a land they can never own, but will own them, which is the reward for rebellion, they my not know it with the conscious mind, but with their spirit they do. Beautifully written Gordon, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Upon (mysteries) bare back. Mystery's?
Comment Written 08-May-2021
Comment from JanPerry
I like, "heavens found within the dreams gentle nature."
"In our father's name". I thought you were going to quote a Bible verse here.
A sensual escapade is expressed through your longings and lust for kisses and love. A male's point of view of the feminine values implored by you. Well done.
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I like, "heavens found within the dreams gentle nature."
"In our father's name". I thought you were going to quote a Bible verse here.
A sensual escapade is expressed through your longings and lust for kisses and love. A male's point of view of the feminine values implored by you. Well done.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
Comment from oliver818
I really enjoyed reading your poem. It flows well and has lovely imagery. I really like the descriptions you include as they are powerful and bring the whole thing to life. Thanks for sharing this
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. It flows well and has lovely imagery. I really like the descriptions you include as they are powerful and bring the whole thing to life. Thanks for sharing this
Comment Written 08-May-2021
Comment from DentedSyke
You have nice imagery and a good vocabulary. I would say that your structure is not easy to follow, therefore, it is not easy to understand. I would focus on a little structure to make your meanings clearer. You have talent; that is obvious. Work on clarity.
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You have nice imagery and a good vocabulary. I would say that your structure is not easy to follow, therefore, it is not easy to understand. I would focus on a little structure to make your meanings clearer. You have talent; that is obvious. Work on clarity.
Comment Written 07-May-2021
Comment from Bonnie Seach
*found within the dreams gentle nature.*
Attention to punctuation is recommended for this poem. The poem is dynamic and well spaced making it easy to read. It will readily be upgraded with re-editing. All the best
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*found within the dreams gentle nature.*
Attention to punctuation is recommended for this poem. The poem is dynamic and well spaced making it easy to read. It will readily be upgraded with re-editing. All the best
Comment Written 07-May-2021