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Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "A Weekend Break - 1943"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
33 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Peter Allen has an agenda and means to follow it. His step-by-step approach is evident in his stopping to inspect the downed aircraft and its site. He is in his element as they approach Jericho Farm and uses his knowledge to the nth degree.
Ralf
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Peter Allen has an agenda and means to follow it. His step-by-step approach is evident in his stopping to inspect the downed aircraft and its site. He is in his element as they approach Jericho Farm and uses his knowledge to the nth degree.
Ralf
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you for continuing to play catch up with this story. You are not far behind now and the last chapter is #48. I really appreciate these reviews.
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I enjoyed the readings.
Comment from Gloria ....
A fine chapter, even though I haven't be following each. The setting is well-delineated, and it is easy to imagine the Vale of Evesham, the river, the city, and all those things that make a place unique and endearing.
Dialogue is terrific. You are have a masterful skill with its delivery.
This is developing into a terrific novel, and I have no idea how you manage it with all your other duties. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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A fine chapter, even though I haven't be following each. The setting is well-delineated, and it is easy to imagine the Vale of Evesham, the river, the city, and all those things that make a place unique and endearing.
Dialogue is terrific. You are have a masterful skill with its delivery.
This is developing into a terrific novel, and I have no idea how you manage it with all your other duties. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 29-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Many thanks for this complimentary review. My current poetry class finished yesterday so I shall be back to posting this novel on a twice weekly basis. There are not many chapters to go now and we will be moving on to the third book in the series before the end of the month.
I am no longer calling it a trilogy because ideas for a fourth book are beginning to take shape in my mind.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Really enjoyed this chapter. Allen's personality is certainly on view here as he certainly isn't interested in impressing people. I look forward to the next chapter although I may not get to it for a few weeks. Hope you have an interesting class to teach.
reply by the author on 26-May-2021
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Really enjoyed this chapter. Allen's personality is certainly on view here as he certainly isn't interested in impressing people. I look forward to the next chapter although I may not get to it for a few weeks. Hope you have an interesting class to teach.
Comment Written 26-May-2021
reply by the author on 26-May-2021
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Thank you so much for this kind review. Enjoy yourself for the next few weeks. I will miss your contributions.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very good image and
chapter to go with it.
-It flowed well and kept my interest.
-I always enjoy Peter Allen's character.
-He is intelligent and clever, and I
liked the early reference about how
one understood his meaning by "the how"
instead of "the what."
-The discussion between him and
Venables was done very well.
-Then there is the trip down
memory lane to the mill and the Baches.
-I have to comment on "the Vale of Evesham"
because that is a community right next to us,
called Evesham Township. A nice touch that
you didn't know about:)
-The investigation by Peter was thorough,
and I liked the ending about how he wanted
to be let out at the back of the house.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 26-May-2021
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-A very good image and
chapter to go with it.
-It flowed well and kept my interest.
-I always enjoy Peter Allen's character.
-He is intelligent and clever, and I
liked the early reference about how
one understood his meaning by "the how"
instead of "the what."
-The discussion between him and
Venables was done very well.
-Then there is the trip down
memory lane to the mill and the Baches.
-I have to comment on "the Vale of Evesham"
because that is a community right next to us,
called Evesham Township. A nice touch that
you didn't know about:)
-The investigation by Peter was thorough,
and I liked the ending about how he wanted
to be let out at the back of the house.
-Well done!
Comment Written 25-May-2021
reply by the author on 26-May-2021
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Thank you so much for this complimentary review of this chapter. The Vale of Evesham has been described as the orchard of England and at this time of year is a beautiful sight with the blossom on the trees.
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You are very welcome. It sounds like a very nice place. I will have to look it up!
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There is a small town also called Evesham close by.
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So we have that in common across the pond!
Comment from robyn corum
Jim,
Nice. Sounds like you are settling/answering/referring nicely to all the questions about the location of the landing and the other incidentals. This was well-written and enjoyable.
One note:
--> Reckon Adolf's scraping the bottom of the barrel, sir(.)'
reply by the author on 26-May-2021
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Jim,
Nice. Sounds like you are settling/answering/referring nicely to all the questions about the location of the landing and the other incidentals. This was well-written and enjoyable.
One note:
--> Reckon Adolf's scraping the bottom of the barrel, sir(.)'
Comment Written 25-May-2021
reply by the author on 26-May-2021
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Thank you for this kind review and the heads up on the missing period. Several people have commented on that and I have corrected it at least three times but it doesn't want to stick for some reason. Strange that.
Comment from Brenda Henderson
You certainly packed a great deal of character and story development into this narrative. Your readers are likely anxiously awaiting the next installment. Thank you for choosing a picture of the type of vehicle that would've been used. It helps the reader to better envision the trip. Well Done!
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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You certainly packed a great deal of character and story development into this narrative. Your readers are likely anxiously awaiting the next installment. Thank you for choosing a picture of the type of vehicle that would've been used. It helps the reader to better envision the trip. Well Done!
Comment Written 25-May-2021
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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Thank you for these supportive comments. I sometimes think I spend too long selecting the pictures but a comment like yours makes it all worthwhile.
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You're Welcome!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Oopsie, the farm is getting a new fritz candidate for the inheritance. It will be very interesting to see how this is going to fan out with the auntie. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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Oopsie, the farm is getting a new fritz candidate for the inheritance. It will be very interesting to see how this is going to fan out with the auntie. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 25-May-2021
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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We will have to see what Allen can dig up over the tea table,
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jim, it's a wonderful chapter. I really like the way you've captured the times. It makes it so authentic. Now, will it be that he comes across the papers hidden in the mill? I'm pre-emptying. I'm sorry. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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Hi Jim, it's a wonderful chapter. I really like the way you've captured the times. It makes it so authentic. Now, will it be that he comes across the papers hidden in the mill? I'm pre-emptying. I'm sorry. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-May-2021
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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Many thanks for this supportive review. Several people have been concerned about those papers. Could be a red herring and the longer they remain undiscovered the ruddier the fish. Lol
Comment from estory
Good visuals drive this chapter, along with the lively, realistic dialogue. You place here in the English country side, and give us a good description of the wreck of the plane in the middle of the idyllic, ploughed field. It is odd that Brucker's plane should have crashed, praticaly right on top of Jericho farm. The suspense is also building on Brucker's connection to the people there. This chapter unfolded very much like a TV episode. Nice job. estory
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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Good visuals drive this chapter, along with the lively, realistic dialogue. You place here in the English country side, and give us a good description of the wreck of the plane in the middle of the idyllic, ploughed field. It is odd that Brucker's plane should have crashed, praticaly right on top of Jericho farm. The suspense is also building on Brucker's connection to the people there. This chapter unfolded very much like a TV episode. Nice job. estory
Comment Written 25-May-2021
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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Many thanks for this for this encouraging review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from JudyE
I'm looking forward to finding out 'what happens next'. The writing is always good and I wondered for a while if I was going to find anything at all to suggest. But I did have a few thoughts:
Their plane got shot up over Liverpool, while on a hit and run raid, but after that with their instruments destroyed, they had no idea where they were. - comma needed after 'that'
Their route was a reciprocal of that taken by the 30cwt, army truck that had brought BrĂ¼cker and his pilot to the interrogation centre two days before, though that journey had taken longer, and had been rather less comfortable, neither had the prisoners obtained any glimpse of the countryside. - I'm not sure that 'nor had the prisoners ...' wouldn't be preferable to 'neither had the prisoners...' And I wonder if the comma after '30 cwt' is necessary.
Bentink had been in the act of turning the Humber into the right fork that led along the top of the high ground to Jericho Farm but, in response to the colonel's, order he pulled the big car onto the grass verge that separated the forking roads. - delete comma after 'colonel's'; insert comma after 'order'
At the left hand end of the scar, the crashed aircraft stood - maybe there is a better word than 'stood'. Maybe 'rested', or 'sat'.
'We was out on manoeuvres, sir, when it come down, we was? Bloody Home Guard got here first, didn't they? - delete question mark after 'was'
He came to the conclusion that if the Germans had planned to plant BrĂ¼cker on them, something had gone sadly wrong in the execution. - comma after 'that'
It's mostly 88s now'days. Reckon Adolf's scraping the bottom of barrel, sir'
'No signals codes?' The sergeant shook his head. 'Burnt them, I reckon, sir' - period missing at end of sentence.
Apart from the use of an obsolete aircraft, he was now more certain than ever, that the crash had been a coincidence, he thanked the sergeant, and made his way back to the Humber, where Bentink had the door open, ready for him. - delete comma after 'ever'. Period after 'coincidence'
With best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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I'm looking forward to finding out 'what happens next'. The writing is always good and I wondered for a while if I was going to find anything at all to suggest. But I did have a few thoughts:
Their plane got shot up over Liverpool, while on a hit and run raid, but after that with their instruments destroyed, they had no idea where they were. - comma needed after 'that'
Their route was a reciprocal of that taken by the 30cwt, army truck that had brought BrĂ¼cker and his pilot to the interrogation centre two days before, though that journey had taken longer, and had been rather less comfortable, neither had the prisoners obtained any glimpse of the countryside. - I'm not sure that 'nor had the prisoners ...' wouldn't be preferable to 'neither had the prisoners...' And I wonder if the comma after '30 cwt' is necessary.
Bentink had been in the act of turning the Humber into the right fork that led along the top of the high ground to Jericho Farm but, in response to the colonel's, order he pulled the big car onto the grass verge that separated the forking roads. - delete comma after 'colonel's'; insert comma after 'order'
At the left hand end of the scar, the crashed aircraft stood - maybe there is a better word than 'stood'. Maybe 'rested', or 'sat'.
'We was out on manoeuvres, sir, when it come down, we was? Bloody Home Guard got here first, didn't they? - delete question mark after 'was'
He came to the conclusion that if the Germans had planned to plant BrĂ¼cker on them, something had gone sadly wrong in the execution. - comma after 'that'
It's mostly 88s now'days. Reckon Adolf's scraping the bottom of barrel, sir'
'No signals codes?' The sergeant shook his head. 'Burnt them, I reckon, sir' - period missing at end of sentence.
Apart from the use of an obsolete aircraft, he was now more certain than ever, that the crash had been a coincidence, he thanked the sergeant, and made his way back to the Humber, where Bentink had the door open, ready for him. - delete comma after 'ever'. Period after 'coincidence'
With best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 25-May-2021
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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Many thanks as usual. I am particularly grateful for your suggestion regarding the use of 'stood' when describing the crashed aircraft. In the end I settled for 'At the left hand end of the scar, the crashed aircraft squatted like a cornered animal, malevolent though motionless.'
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I think that is much better.