Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

The Fog of Four AM
by Mike Stevens

Hello Mike

Cool rhymed poem. Excellent rhyme except this stanza....

wonder what is the reason?
Answers taunt me, haunt me "you have none!"

Maybe you did it on purpose.

I have problems with insomnia too.

Well done!

 Comment Written 06-May-2021

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reply by the author on 06-May-2021

Thank you, Gypsy, and I was tired and lazy this morning

Comment from Pj Dennison

Excellent

Your poem is excellent. Your rhythm scheme is very good. The third stanza is a little difficult to discern the rhythm but it's there. There is a nice meter going on. The ruminations of an insomniac is an interesting theme in your poem. As usual by the last stanza your poem puts a smile on my face; hexagon speech?

 Comment Written 06-May-2021

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reply by the author on 06-May-2021

Thanks, P. J.--perhaps now that I'm more awake I can improve it?

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

This is an excellent rhyming poem, with interesing, varied rhymes. These are all solid except hover/covers. As cover is an acceptable alternative to covers, as a purist I would have used it.

 Comment Written 06-May-2021

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reply by the author on 06-May-2021

Thank you much, Katherine